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== WA2 Omake Translations ==

Hi Velocity7,
I was browsing through the WA2 Omake short story translations when I noticed some discrepancies with your translation and the Chinese translation (I'm bilingual in Chinese/English) that I've been reading. Some of these discrepancies are not particularly minor either -- they seem to be related to pronouns (or lack thereof) and makes the sentences have completely different meanings. If you (or someone else on the WA2 project) would take sometime to go back to the source material to check...

On Twinkle Snow:
The Chinese translation has a slightly different take in wording. Starting with the "I'll go down in flames part". Here's what I am reading:

''——所以，我決定賠上一切。''

''不論是你我之間的朋友關係，還是三人的關係，你都可以一刀兩斷。''

''我會從你面前消失的。''


''她知道，三人的關係即將崩壞。''

''她知道，大家都會越傷越深。''

''她也知道，大概自己才是最悲哀的人。''

Translates into...

''----So, I've decided to go all in.

''Whether its the friendship between you and me, or our three-man relationship, you can erase both.''

''I can disappear forever.''


''She knows the relationship between the three of them would collapse.''

''She knows everyone will just get hurt deeper and deeper.''

''She also knows, she's probably the most pathetic of them all...''

Which has drastically different meanings compared to the english translation available.


Also, the English translation for The Idol Who Forgot How To Sing seems to have the same problem where (I presume) a sentence that doesn't specify who the action belongs to sometimes gets mixed up, eg. English translation for one of the sentences was

''And Setsuna finally found the one thing that she hated the most about Haruki. She loved that even though she tried to hate him so much, she had pretty much destroyed it all.''

when in Chinese translation it is more along the lines of

''And Setsuna finally found the one thing that she hated the most about Haruki. She loved that even though he tried so hard making himself hate me, he had ruined all his efforts in the end.''


And About Snow Melts Snow Falls

starting at the part where

''"See, a while back he suddenly came and was checking the address books and stuff."''

Chinese translation is more along the lines of...

''"See, a while back he suddenly came to my house? Said he got the address from student address book"''

''-- Very possible if it's that guy.''

''"Did you take the day off? Or did you leave something behind?"''

''"I did take the day off. There was a concert the day before and I went"''

''"Then he was there just to check on you."''

''"Even so, don't you think he's a little insensitive?"''

''--Yep, the guy has no concept of keeping his distance''

''"Did he barge into your house? Ask you for tea?"''

''"He said a few things and then left, but still..."''

'' -- But still.''

'' That kind of getting-overly-involved-with-others attitude only make people dislike him...''


There might be more but that's what I've noticed so far. I'd really appreciate it if you could look over these examples and let me know what you think. Also - was wondering if you guys would ever take indirect (JP->CH->EN) translations. Was interested in filling out the rest of The Idol Who Forgot How To Sing (the adult part) seeing how the rest is translated but those (imo, key) parts are not.

Thanks!

[[User:Pedot|Pedot]] ([[User talk:Pedot|talk]]) 00:20, 9 December 2013 (CST)
:Hello Pedot. Interesting that you point these out, though I feel it's more to do with the way I chose to translate those lines versus how the Chinese translation did it. Having said that, I did a direct read from the actual Japanese text, so maybe there might be differences as a result. Also, unless there are other people who are willing to take the plunge into the adult material and do the JP->EN method of doing things, I think it'll be fine if you do indirect translations. The amount of content covered by the adult sections is very miniscule anyway, in comparison to the rest of the sidestory. --[[User:Velocity7|Velocity7]] ([[User talk:Velocity7#top|talk]]) 01:31, 9 December 2013 (CST)