Editing User talk:Thatsjustpeachy (section)

===Chapter 1 of Vol 2===
* Wearing the uniform of the academy, both hands were gripped tightly onto his sword as he lifted it into a '''raised position'''. Just my thoughts, but doesn't 'raised position' sound a little weird?
* Returning the sword to the raised position, he '''repeated swinging his sword'''. --> Returning the sword to the raised position, he '''repeatedly swung his sword'''. or maybe '''again he swung his sword'''?
* Within the Seven Swords, the '''most brilliant''' of them was given the title of Sword Saint. How about 'strongest' ?
* Kurou swung his '''blade''' down even harder. Wouldn't 'sword' make more sense instead of blade? 
* There was a fine line between training and '''ruining his body'''. --> How about 'overexerting himself'?
* He could hear Sefi’s stream of '''abuse''' from behind the closed door. --> He could hear Sefi’s stream of '''insults''' from behind the closed door.
* ... with all his might as well as continued to stay inside the '''toilet''', the fact that Sefi hadn’t resorted to violence was a reflection of her kind nature. Wasn't he in the '''washroom'''?
* When he '''finally noticed his surroundings''', Hinako was already standing next to him, staring at Kurou intently. Wouldn't 'came to his senses' (or something like that) make a little more sense?
* Kurou was sitting right in front of the table '''at''' the center of the room. --> Kurou was sitting right in front of the table '''in''' the center of the room.
[[User:はじめ|はじめ]] ([[User talk:はじめ|talk]]) 06:38, 22 January 2014 (CST) Yeah, haven't quite finished editing this chapter. Well, the above are just my suggestions. Would you (Thatsjustpeachy) happen to be translating from a Chinese raw? There are a few sentences that seem to be a little awkward ... that aside, thanks for the effort you put into your translations and I hope that you continue to translate this LN. [[User:はじめ|はじめ]] ([[User talk:はじめ|talk]]) 06:38, 22 January 2014 (CST)