Editing City Series:Volume7a Prologue (section)

===Kawa-Commentary===

Prologue: Painting

I’ll be giving a lot of pointless commentary here.


*'''Overall

This was actually a trial chapter published in Dengeki hp before SF was serialized. That’s why some of the details differ from what comes later. For example, this one said “Image-City” at the top of each page’s frame.


*'''Page 1

Sarah generally sleeps on her side since she has wings.

There are beds on the market designed for winged species to sleep on their back, but differences in everyday habits mean few people buy them. (Hospitals have that kind of bed for winged species to rest in after abdominal surgery.)

Beretta isn’t in the bed with her because his actual bed is in the hall. He still comes to sleep in Sarah’s better-heated room when it’s cold.→See Chapter 6

The clock is an IZUMO product. In Japan, IZUMO was absorbed by their branch company IAI after a scandal in 1999, but the IZUMO brand remains in use overseas.


*'''Page 2

The view scrolls through the room to match Sarah’s movements, but you can see a bit of a sofa below the window in panel 3. Beretta is in the room now, but is that because Sarah opened the door, or because Sarah always lets him in after getting up? I feel like it’s the latter.


*'''Page 3

SF (in real life) is a city with lots of slopes, so its residential areas have a lot stairs and hills. The lines you can see on the road in panel 3 are for a city train or a cable car. Sarah is actually drawn there below the dialogue, but can you actually see her?

Sarah and her coworkers work under a leader who assigns them different parts of SF to redraw. Sarah does the sky and he might do a part of the city itself, for example.


*'''Page 4

Sarah spreads her wings. They usually only look like 2, but it’s actually 6 with 3 on each side.

She is flying toward the bay and you can’t see the clock tower tree, so that must be to the north. She likes working over the ocean because no one complains if she does a half-assed job, but she might also just like how it feels to fly.


*'''Page 5

The Grid Seeker and such are only used for big jobs, so we won’t be seeing them again after this. Oops.

This infodumps a bunch about her equipment and how she does her drawing, but Halifax and the rest are all IZUMO products. That is a famous corporation that also makes Rhythms and Devices, so they have a partnership with the SF City Hall. Sarah also personally prefers IZUMO products.


*'''Pages 6-7

That’s the Golden Gate Bridge you can see at the bottom.

That thing at the lower center of Page 7 is the Grid Seeker.


*'''Page 8

She jumps down. That’s SF’s coast, but the sunlight and the quantity of plastic greenhouses visible in the city below means this is the east side. The clouds floating low over the city below are because of how chilly it is in the morning.


*'''Page 9

This beach is the same one you could see on the previous page. Sarah’s two friends are already shown here, but I feel like Army (Kawakami Nickname for the one with a prosthetic arm – the other one is Plainy) would need to waterproof her arm before going to the beach…


Anyway, that’s how SF begins.

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