Editing City Series:Volume7a Chapter2 (section)

===Kawa-Commentary===

Chapter 2: Sense


*'''General

A story from Sarah’s past. After learning from the last two chapters, I finally decided on a format.

One thing not revealed in the story is that the Knight Striker woman Follett Missel traveled with the old and young women from France and was sightseeing around SF.


*'''Page 1

Benny is redecorating inside the hangar. She loves Japanese things, but the reason why is revealed in Ch. 5. I wonder what Sarah thought when she saw that 2nd wall scroll with her name on it. The 3rd from the left says Beretta.


*'''Page 2

A comparison to the previous page. Benny herself was created about 100 years ago, so her details have been repeatedly restored. That’s why she has small scale modification plans on the walls.

Those things on the left and right of the page are sound boards that prevent her music from hitting the concrete walls and sounding like a live concert (that word has nothing to do with the City concept of Lives this time).


*'''Page 3

The coast in the rain. The building is built on the edge of a cliff, but as you can see from the terrace on a later page, the ground below it has been dug out to give it a hangar. The sign on the roof says McWild with “Master of Sein Frau” below it. (Is the word “of” right there?) It is an automaton maintenance workshop.


*'''Page 4

Nothing really to say here. The tea isn’t British either.


*'''Page 5

A portion of the terrace roof is made of a transparent material.

The knife Sarah has here will be used a lot later on. It’s an IZUMO product and easy to obtain at her hometown (see Ch. 7, 8), so she brought it from home.
IZUMO worships the wind god, so they are good luck for a winged species. That is part of why Sarah loves their products.


*'''Page 6

Nothing really to say here either.

It really doesn’t matter, but am I the only one that think Western pears taste more like persimmons than Japanese pears?


*'''Page 7

Benny is reading a songbook here.

The bookmark marks her favorite song. She gives a few suggestions and the City Hall chooses one of them for her to sing. Sadly, the City Hall has to try and choose one that limits how out of tune she is.


*'''Page 8

Another straightforward page.


*'''Pages 9-10

There are about 10 background photos related to the characters and background.

The top right photo has Sarah standing on a post for winged species to rest their weary wings during a flight. It can be hard to land on the city’s roads with all the traffic, but most of the houses’ roofs are difficult to land on too, so these posts are erected at an interval of 100 yards. My idea is that they’re built as a set with three levels at different heights.

Oh, and Sarah is glaring at a pear on the left there. Like she can’t believe what her altered art turned it into.


*'''Page 11

The old woman’s handbag is on the table, but Beretta’s head blocks it from view…

*'''Page 12

Let’s ignore how Benny never stops trying to give her visitor more tea and instead focus on how Sarah’s sleeveless straps go on to become her tie. Compare this to Page 1 and you should be able to see it.

Also, one of her skirt’s straps is undone so Beretta can hang onto it. It’s kind of amazing how Beretta manages that…

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