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As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English? --[[User:Michpig|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig|talk]]) 10:07, 18 September 2012 (CDT) | As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English? --[[User:Michpig|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig|talk]]) 10:07, 18 September 2012 (CDT) | ||
Also, I was wondering whether the original had the narrator (Taichi) skipping back and forth between third and first person. The inconsistency is somewhat glaring and I reaaaally want to correct it. | |||
Also, like Chapter 7, I'm gonna do a run through of the entire chapter. I feel somewhat bad doing so, so I suppose I'll upload the big changes onto this discussion page as well once I get the chance. --[[User:Michpig|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig|talk]]) 11:18, 19 September 2012 (CDT) | |||
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Just a few questions.
I think "sharp-tongued response" is pretty awkward. If possible, changing them to something else would be preferable. Does anyone have any ideas? It's along the lines of a snarky reply or a sarcastic jab, right?
As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English? --Michpig (talk) 10:07, 18 September 2012 (CDT)
Also, I was wondering whether the original had the narrator (Taichi) skipping back and forth between third and first person. The inconsistency is somewhat glaring and I reaaaally want to correct it.
Also, like Chapter 7, I'm gonna do a run through of the entire chapter. I feel somewhat bad doing so, so I suppose I'll upload the big changes onto this discussion page as well once I get the chance. --Michpig (talk) 11:18, 19 September 2012 (CDT)