Talk:Kokoro Connect:Volume 4 Chapter 3

Instead of "landmine" (which does kind of work, "It was a landmine topic that Joan brought up", as it means that it's a dangerous to talk about. "Minefield" would also work,) how about "taboo"? This makes it more generally an undesirable topic to talk about.

Instead of "Truth be told, Aoki knew a single strawberry was probably just a result of a margin of error."

How about: "Truth be told, Aoki knew a single strawberry was probably just a added on a whim"?

I kind of want to change:

"By the way, from my standpoint, I can't pretend I didn't see this you know."

to "By the way, as a woman, I can't pretend that I didn't see this you know." or even "By the way, I can't just pretend that I didn't see this you know."

"Standpoint" sounds a bit too formal, like it's a lawyer defending their client's "standpoint". By the way, I don't think saying "that" makes it too formal O.o.

Also, I don't really know what Aoki's "defining trait" is O.o. Is it his ability to poke fun at people? And because Inaba shut him up so quickly made him feel endangered?

Pikon (talk) 16:32, 16 October 2012 (CDT)