Talk:Suzumiya Haruhi:Volume7 Chapter 7: Difference between revisions
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New page: "That was exactly where I and Koizumi '''had spent our lives digging''' for up to two meters." "Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change? --~~~~ |
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"Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change? | "Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change? | ||
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:There's nothing technically wrong with it, but I'd recommend "wasted out time" in place of "spent our lives" and removing the "for." [[User:Smidge204|Smidge204]] 11:02, 16 February 2007 (PST) | |||
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"That was exactly where I and Koizumi had spent our lives digging for up to two meters."
"Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change? --umiman 03:23, 16 February 2007 (PST)
- There's nothing technically wrong with it, but I'd recommend "wasted out time" in place of "spent our lives" and removing the "for." Smidge204 11:02, 16 February 2007 (PST)