Talk:Papa no Iu Koto o Kikinasai!:Volume 4 Chapter 2

Question: This is my first translation and as I just reached 20% or 1/5th of the chapter, I was wondering; What are you (the readers) opinions on its readability as compared to other translations? and Where do I need to improve? Sincerely translator- 黒曜石ペガサス

note: First sale of the year, they called it a 'first' sale and the store is called Western Style Hips...weird name but oh well, and its a different store than "heels".