Talk:Monogatari Series:Bakemonogatari Volume1/Hitagi Crab 002

We were in different classes for the first and second year of school and only ended up in the same class for third year. Even before we were in the same class, I had heard about Hanekawa's existence. It was a given; if Senjougahara was in the top class of the year, Hanekawa was the top student.

Odd.... “was in the top class of the year” shouldn’t it rather be something like “was in the top of the class every year” Changed it for now, feel free to revert it...

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“That – is really difficult,” said Hanekawa.

With an ominous right.

“It might be because of her illness, I suppose. During middle school, she was more energetic, and bright.”

what does ominous right mean?

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From middle school to high school, it’s given that people will change. I changed, and Hanekawa must also have changed. That’s why it’s understandable that Senjougahara had changed. She must have had her own problems, and maybe she really became it. That might be the reason why she had lost her cheerful self. She must have lost her energy. Anyone would be depressed when they’re sick. Especially if they had been lively in the past. That’s why, my conjecture must be correct.

she really became it? maybe it's "she really became ill" While you're at it, make it "it's a given"... didn't notice the missing a on my edit, don't feel like making another edit right now when this passage still has changes pending.