Editing User talk:Dark Kaito (section)

=== John Woodward ===
Hi Dark Kaito, 

I'm John Woodward, one of the editors:

In the latest chapters within the labyrinth volume, especially "Guardian of the Teleport Labyrinth", would it be OK to translate kaa-san to mom? Or would another english term be better?

Also, I read the above comment mentioning my edits as "a little off". Please don't worry too much- I will go over and check my edits now. I appreciate any of your time, though. Thank you and please feel free to refer me to a translator for verifying my edits, as well.  Since I don't want to interrupt your speed translating. 

Thanks again,

[[User:John Woodward|John Woodward]] ([[User talk:John Woodward|talk]]) 20:07, 16 August 2014 (CDT)

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Kaito,

Thanks for the well-written response, it helped me figure out the problems between revisions. I attached the fixes, will this be OK?


'''First fix:'''

''Before:''

''“The trap teleport magic circles surround the correct answer teleport magic circle. ''

''In other words, it's not the exterior, if you jump onto a certain interior part in the center, arrival on the next floor should be possible.”''

After:

“A trap teleport magic circle concentrically outside the correct answer teleport magic circle. 

In other words, it's not the exterior; if you jump onto the innermost circle, arrival on the next floor is possible.” 


'''Second fix:''' 

''Before:''

''“However, where Roxy was wandering around was a section restricted to only one-way magic circle use. ''

''Inside of that section, Roxy had over thirty one-way magic circles that she had no choice other than to try in order to return.” ''

After: 

“However, where Roxy was wandering around, it was a cavern that you can't enter without using a two-way magic circle. 

Inside of that cavern's maze, Roxy had over thirty one-way magic circles that she was forced to try in order to return to the two-way magic circle.” 

(Reminds me a tiny bit of the Gym Leader Sabrina in Pokemon Red/Blue and her one-way portals) 

The minor fix:

Per your suggestion, fixed kaa-chan--> mother, but I left Paul's quote: "Save your mom, even if you have to die."

Warm regards,

[[User:John Woodward|John Woodward]] ([[User talk:John Woodward|talk]])

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Hello Kaito,

How are you?  I have a low-priority storytelling question. It's about during non-Rudeus Perspectives (Eris, Roxy, Others), should I lean towards telling in past OR present verb styles (She spoke vs She speaks)?

For instance in Eris' Side Story, when around current moments for Eris, I revised Vanant's translation leaning towards present-tense verbs. Here was what Vanant said:

"I always felt that using past-only was satisfactory, since it'd be a sort of 'side story' that didn't focus on the main character himself (the view we take is of an omniscient 3rd person narrator), but if you feel you can make improvements to the tense, please go ahead. I'm quite picky with wording since I'm the one doing the translating, but I definitely don't claim to know better about tenses (often present tense stories in JP are translated to past tense stories in EN). Someone better at storywriting than me should decide on that."

I am just biding time until somewhat of a consensus is reached.  

Thanks I appreciate it,

[[User:John Woodward|John Woodward]] ([[User talk:John Woodward|talk]])