Editing Talk:Suzumiya Haruhi:Volume9 Prologue (section)

== Sasaki gender neutral edits ==

[[User:Magus|Magus]] made a bunch of edits in [http://www.baka-tsuki.net/project/index.php?title=Suzumiya_Haruhi:Volume9_Prologue&oldid=15776 this] and the next revision that made all references to Sasaki gender neutral. Was it really the intent of the author to leave the gender of Sasaki unknown until later on? Making Sasaki gender neutral makes for awkward phrasing - leaving gender unspecified is not a trick that can be done easily in English. --[[User:Maian|Maian]] 22:56, 16 May 2007 (PDT)

yes, it is the original intent of the author to avoid mentioning the gender till much later in prologue.

I agree that sentence phrasings will be really awkward if they are deliberately gender neutral in english, and so I opted to just proceed with using she, while attempting to retain her more boyish talking style. but that is of course my choice. I see that magus and Dan had ram through the neutralisation thing, and I think it is pretty well done. keep it up.
--[[User:Deskoh91|Deskoh91]] 05:58, 17 May 2007 (PDT)

One awkward phrase left - "Sasaki, slightly shooked head" - which of course could be corrected to "Sasaki slightly shook head" but would still be awkward - I've changed this to "Sasaki gave a slight shake of the head" which achieves both smoothness and gender-neutraility. "gave a shake of the head" ("slight" or otherwise) is a canned phrase in which "the head" seems natural to a reader (whereas "Sasaki shook the head" would be horrible, and a giveaway that something is being hidden!). I hope this is a solution to the problem of English awkwardness here! --[[User:Ids|Ids]] 18:48, 20 May 2007 (PDT)