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#character '＊Ｂ'
#character 'Fille'
// Girl
// 少女

<0000> Je me glisse hors de la salle de classe et me dirige vers l'ancien batiment scolaire, comme toujours.
// I sneak out of the classroom and head towards the old school building, as always.
// 教室を抜け出し、いつものように旧校舎の方に向かった。
<0001> En adoucissant mes pas, je continue dans le couloir.
// Softening my footsteps, I continue down the hallway.
// 足音を殺して、廊下を進む。
<0002> Presque toutes les pièces d'ici sont inutilisées.
// Almost all of the rooms here aren't used.
// ここらの教室は、ほとんど使用されていない。
<0003> Et sur demande, elles sont devenues des salles de club, mais ils ont l'habitude de les laisser tel quelles.
// And by request, they'd become clubrooms, but they're usually just left as is.
// And at request, they'd become clubrooms, but they'd just usually leave it as is.
// 申請があれば文化部の部室にあてがわれるらしいが、実際は放置されている。
<0004> Sans le savoir, je me glisse dans une des salles de classes vides.
// Without being discovered, I slip inside one of the empty classrooms.
// 見咎められることなく、空き教室のひとつに潜り込んだ。
<0005> Et je m'assieds ensuite sur une chaise appropriée.
// And then sit in a suitable chair.
// Lit. I sit in a suitable chair, and to the back of the chair I deeply entrust my body. - Shi-an
// 適当な椅子に座り、背もたれに深く体を預けた。
<0006> Un ciel agréable par-delà la fenêtre sans rideaux.
// Beyond the curtainless window is the beautiful sky.
// カーテンのない窓の向こう、代わり映えのしない空。
<0007> \{\m{B}} "Je m'attire plein d'ennuis à sécher, mais c'est la seule chose à faire pour tuer le temps."
// \{\m{B}} "I went to all the trouble of skipping, but I have nothing to do."
// Lit. "I went to all the trouble of skipping, yet the (only) thing to do is breaking time (to mean killing time)" - Shi-an
// \{\m{B}} 「せっかくサボって、やることは暇つぶしかよ…」
<0008> Mes murmures s'atténuent en se dispersant dans la pièce vide.
// My murmuring fades scatters through the empty room.
// Lit. My own muttering, is sucked in/inhaled by this empty-like room - Shi-an
// 自分の呟きが、がらんとした部屋に吸い込まれていく。
<0009> Je me demande si cette vie va changer.
// I wonder if this kind of life will someday change too.
// こんな生活も、いつか変わるんだろうか？
<0010> Quand est-ce que viendra ce jour qui changera quelque chose?
// Will the day that something changes come?
// Alt. TL: Will such a day come?
// Too short... Anyway, I just want to maintain the context here if possible so that it would make more sense. -DG1
// 変わる日が来るんだろうか？
<0011> Il y avait une personne qui parlait de ça...
// There was a person talking about that...
// そんなことを言ってた奴がいたな…
<0012> Penser à une fille efféminée était la seule chose m'étant venu à l'esprit.
// Thinking of an effeminate girl was the only thing that came to mind.
// Prev. TL: An effeminate girl was thinking about that and it only came to my mind.
// Not really sure how this line goes, but it sounded to me like he was thinking about an effiminate girl so that idea about how he doesn't change just came in to him. Need someone to check this line. -DG1
// Lit. After thinking it was an effeminate person, I realised it was myself. 
// The context is quite ambiguous, but I presume it means that he thinks "wow, the person that I am thinking of is such a sissy", // but then he realises that he himself started thinking about it through his own stream of thought, so therefore he is just      // as sissy-like as that person. - Shi-an
// 女々しい奴だと思ってから、自分だと気づいた。
<0013> Je ferme mes yeux.
// I close my eyes.
// 俺は目を閉じた。
<0014> Je me demande si quelque chose de bien arrivera juste en oisivant ici.
// I wonder if something good will happen if I just sit idly here.
// Lit. "'If I could postpone time, how good would that be?' I thought." 
// Yeah, makes no sense to me either - Shi-an
// 時間だけを先送りにできたら、どんなにいいだろうと思った。
<0015> .........
// ………。
<0016> ......
// ……。
<0017> ...
// …。
<0018> J'ouvre mes yeux, gênés par l'insupportable lumière étincelante du soleil.
// The sunlight shining on top of me becomes unbearable, and I open my eyes.
// ほぼ真上に来た太陽の陽射しに、たまらなくなって目を開けた。
<0019> De plus que je pourrais être pris, seul dans une salle vide.
// That was about as much as I could take of being in an empty room.
// 何もない場所にいるのは、そのぐらいが限界だった。
<0020> Je quitte la salle de classe vide.
// I leave the empty classroom.
// 俺は空き教室を出た。
<0021> Je m'apprête à déscendre insouciament les escaliers...
// Unconcerned, I am just about to descend the stairway...
// 何気なく階段を下りようとした時。
<0022> ... vers le bout du couloir, je vois une porte glissante.
// ... When at the end of the corridor, I see a sliding door.
// 廊下の突き当たりの引き戸が目に入った。
<0023> C'est la bibliothèque.
// It's the library.
// 図書室だった。
<0024> Il y a quelque chose d'écrit, "Fermé."
// There's a written note saying, "Closed."
// 『閉室中』と書かれた札がかかっている。
<0025> Mais, en regardant bien, la porte est légèrement ouverte.
// But, if I look closely, the door is slightly open.
// But if you look closely, the door is a little open.
// よく見ると、戸の端がほんの少しだけ開いていた。
<0026> La curiosité me prend.
// For some reason, I am curious.
// なぜだか気になった。
<0027> J'ouvre la porte glissante et me rend à l'intérieur.
// I open the sliding door and go inside.
// 引き戸を開け、中に入ってみた。
<0028> Il y a de grandes étagères et de tables de lecture toutes alignées.
// There are tall bookshelves and reading tables all lined up.
// 背の高い書棚と閲覧席が、整然と並んでいる。
<0029> Une douce brise penètre, mélangeant de l'odeur du papier et de la poussière.
// There's a soft breeze coming in, mixing the scent of paper and dust.
// かすかな風に乗って、埃と紙の匂いがした。
<0030> Le rideau flottant se balance dans les deux sens, comme s'il respirait.
// The floating curtain is swaying back and forth, as if it's breathing.
// Prev. TL: The curtain sways and floats as the wind blows it.
// 吹き流されたカーテンが、息をするように揺れている。
<0031> Et l'ombre d'une personne, visible près de la fenêtre.
// And over by the window is a person's shadow.
// Prev. TL: And over there by the window was the projection of someone's shadow.
// Don't really know if it's just me but, the prev. tl sounded unnatural to me. -DG1
// "Hitokage" can also mean "figure" or "silhouette". I have a gut feeling it is actually supposed to mean one of those
// in this context. Anyone agree? - Shi-an
// その向こう、窓際に人影があった。
<0032> Elle porte des ornements tel ce que portent les enfants, elle ressemble à une étudiante du genre silencieuse.
// Wearing child-like hair ornaments, a schoolgirl who seems like the quiet type.
// Prev. TL: There sat a reserved schoolgirl, wearing cutesy hair accessories like that of a child.
// Reason for changes: conciseness; childish and kodomo-poi radiate different impressions
// Tomoya wasn't really saying she's a reserved type, more like, someone who "might" (he has a feeling that she a quiet type of girl)
// 子供っぽい髪飾りをした、物静かな感じの女生徒。
<0033> La couleur de son insigne est la même que la mienne, celle de terminale.
// The color of her badge is the same as mine, that of a third year.
// Prev. TL: I see that she's a third year too from the color of her badge.
// 胸元の校章の色は、俺と同じ三年生だ。
<0034> Sans raison, elle est assise sur le plancher.
// For some reason, she's sitting on the floor.
// なぜだか、床にぺたんと座り込んでいる。
<0035> ... peut-être ne se sent-elle pas bien?
// ... is she feeling sick?
// Alt. TL: ... maybe she's not feeling well?
// …気分でも悪いんだろうか？
<0036> En me rapprochant, je réalise qu'elle est en train de lire un livre avec enthousiasme.
// Moving closer, I realize that she's reading a book with enthusiasm.
// "realized" is past tense, reading is present participle -DG1
// 近づこうとして、彼女が熱心に本を読んでいるのに気づいた。
<0037> Sècherait-elle les cours?
// Is she skipping class?
// サボリだろうか？
<0038> Alors que je croyais que Sunohara et moi étions les seules personnes qui ne pouvaient pas se trouver en classe à cette heure.
// And I thought Sunohara and I were the only people who wouldn't be found in a classroom in such a time.
// Previous - I was thinking that the only ones that should not be in a classroom were Sunohara and I.
// Alt - And I thought Sunohara and I were the only people who won't be found in a classroom in such a time. - Kinny Riddle
// Another Alt - I thought the only people not in a classroom around this time of day were Sunohara and me.
// こんな時間に教室にいないのは、俺か春原ぐらいだと思っていた。
<0039> La fille continue de lire le livre, sans-même me remarquer.
// Without noticing me, the girl continues reading the book.
// Prev. TL: She continued reading without noticing that I was there.
// 俺のことには気づかず、彼女は本を読み続けている。
<0040> Soudain, elle s'arrête sur une page.
// Then, she stops on a page.
// と、ページをめくる手が止まった。
<0041> On dirait qu'elle a trouvé quelque chose.
// It seems like she found something.
// 何か見つけたらしい。
<0042> Pour je ne sais quelle raison, elle sort une paire de ciseaux.
// For some odd reason, she takes out a pair of scissors.
// なぜかハサミを取り出した。
<0043> En tenant le bord de la page, elle fait une petite pause.
// Holding the edge of the page, she pauses for a moment.
// 本のページに刃を当てて、何秒かの間動作を止める。
<0044> On dirait qu'elle pense à quelque chose.
// It looks like she's thinking about something.
// 何かを念じるかのようだった。
<0045> Et alors...
// And then...
// そして。
<0046> Snip, snip, snip.
// Snip, snip, snip.
// じょきじょきじょき。
<0047> Sans hésiter, elle commence à couper la page du livre...
// Without hesitation, she starts cutting the book...
// ためらうことなく、本を切り抜いていった…
<0048> \{\m{B}} "Hé! Attends une seconde!"
// \{\m{B}} "Hey! Wait a second!"
// \{\m{B}} 「ちょっと待て、こらっ」
<0049> Je me précipite vers elle sans réflechir.
// I rush over to her without thinking.
// 思わず駆け寄ってしまっていた。
<0050> \{Fille} "?"
// \{少女} 「？」
<0051> Tout en arrêtant sa main, elle lève sa tête vers mon visage.
// Her hand stops as she gazes up at my face.
// 手を止めて、俺の顔を見上げる。
<0052> Pour je ne sais quelle raison, elle est pieds nus.
// For some reason, she's barefooted.
// なぜだか、彼女は素足だった。
<0053> Ses chaussettes et ses chaussures d'interieur sont situées sur le plancher.
// Her indoor shoes and socks are placed on the floor.
// 上履きも靴下も、脱いだまま床に置かれている。
<0054> Elle est aussi munie d'un d'un petit sac et des tonnes de livres semblant lui appartenir...
// And around her are a pouch handbag and tons of books that seem to belong to her...
// その周りに、彼女のものらしい巾着袋と本の山…
<0055> En regardant de plus près, on peut voir qu'elle a même un coussin.
// If you look even further, you'll see that she even has a cushion.
// さらによく見れば、どこから見つけてきたのかクッションまで敷いていた。
<0056> Elle semble sérieuse et calme, comme si elle était chez elle, même si c'est une mauvaise comparaison.
// She looks serious and calm, as if she's at home, but it's kind of unbalanced.
// 真剣なまなざしと、自分の家のようなくつろいだ格好が、不釣り合いだった。
<0057> \{\m{B}} "C'est une bibliothèque, non?"
// \{\m{B}} "That's a library book, right?"
// \{\m{B}} 「それ、図書室の本だろ？」
<0058> \{Fille} "??"
// \{少女} 「？？」
<0059> Elle pense à quelque chose.
// She thinks of something.
// Alt. TL: She takes a moment to think.
// Not as faithful to the original Japanese, but it flows better.
// Alt. TL: She seems to be thinking of something.
// Just switch, if you think the flow doesn't look nice -DG1
// 何事か考える。
<0060> Snip, snip, snip.
// Snip, snip, snip.
// じょきじょきじょき。
<0061> \{Fille} "Oui."
// \{Girl} "Yes."
// \{少女} 「はい」
<0062> Elle recommence à couper le coin de la page, et me la présente.
// She cuts the corner of the cut-off page again, and presents it to me.
// She cuts anew the corner of the cut off page, she then presents it to me.
// Prev. TL: She started cutting the corner of the paper and presented it to me.
// Alt TL She cuts off the corner of the severed page, and hands it to me.
// 切り取ったページの隅を新しく切って、俺に差し出してきた。
<0063> \{Fille} "Le coin de la page est délicieux."
// \{Girl} "The tip is delicious."
// The tip corner, like in a piece of pie where you bite first. -DG1
// \{少女} 「はしっこの方が、おいしいの」
<0064> Dit-elle comme si c'était une génoise ou un roti de porc.
// She says that as though it's like sponge cake or roast pork.
// カステラか焼き豚みたいなことを言う。
<0065> \{\m{B}} "Tu vas manger ça?"
// \{\m{B}} "Do you eat this?"
// \{\m{B}} 「食べるのか、あんたはこれを」
<0066> Lui demandais-je en mettant le morceau de papier coupé du livre devant elle.
// I ask while thrusting the piece of paper she cut out of the book in front of her.
// 成り行きで受け取ってしまった紙切れを突きつけ、そう訊いてやる。
<0067> \{Fille} "Non, ce n'est pas du mouton."
// \{Girl} "I don't, it's not mutton."
//PREV TL: "I don't, It's not edible."
//JUSTIFICATION FOR CHANGING: [YA][GI], the katakana, spells out goat; and goat is usually written in katakana, not in kanji, as one might expect. Therefore, this is almost certainly mutton.
// Yup, but I was like, "mutton? You're not making any sense" When I translated this route almost 2 years ago, I forgot to note it though, anyway, Kotomi isn't really making any sense sometimes as well... XD -DG1
//I wonder how the translation gotten to mutton??? Kotomi is saying shes not eating cause she is not a goat... thats all. - Anon A
// \{少女} 「食べないの。ヤギじゃないから」
<0068> \{\m{B}} "C'est vrai."
// \{\m{B}} "That's right."
// \{\m{B}} 「そうだろうな」
<0069> \{Fille} "Veux-tu manger du papier?"
// \{Girl} "Do you want to eat paper?"
// \{少女} 「紙、食べたい？」
<0070> \{\m{B}} "Je ne veux pas manger de papier non plus."
// \{\m{B}} "I don't want to eat paper either."
// \{\m{B}} 「俺だって食べたくない」
<0071> \{Fille} "Tu n'as pas faim?"
// \{Girl} "You're not hungry?"
// \{少女} 「お腹、空いてない？」
<0072> \{\m{B}} "Non, juste un peu."
// \{\m{B}} "No, I am a bit hungry."
// \{\m{B}} 「いや。そろそろ腹は減ってきたところだ」
<0073> \{Fille} "Moi aussi, j'ai faim."
// \{Girl} "I'm also hungry."
// In this scenario, translating the tense into present tense makes much more sense.
// \{少女} 「私も、お腹空いてきたの」
<0074> \{\m{B}} "........."
// \{\m{B}} 「………」
<0075> Alors que nous nous engagions dans la conversation, je sens que nous sommes en train de parler de choses à dormir debout.
// As we engage in conversation, I feel like we are slipping towards very basic communication.
// Prev. TL: It seems I'm engaging in some conversation with her, but, it feels like we're slipping away from the basics.
// Prev. TL: As we engage in this conversation, I realize that we're slipping off to basics.
// I have looked through several Kanji dictionaries and have not found 'kami' to mean 'falter.' 
// Assuming that it takes the meaning of the compund verb to means gears meshing, a literal translation would be: "It seems that our
// conversation is meshing together, and so I feel that it is slipping towards the fundamentals/basics.
// Noticably he says 'ni'(towards) instead of 'kara'(away from), when it comes to the direction that the conversation is slipping
// from the basics, so I believe Tomoya is saying that he realises that when the pair have a mutually intelligible conversation,
// it seems to consist of nothing but very basic conversation (which involves them talking about how hungry they are). - Shian
//Jc100: Looking over this script for about the 4-5th time, I'm starting to suspect that 噛み合って means 'to break down' in this context;with the 'kami' part meaning 'to falter', and 'atte' together; instead of the meaning of the compound verb of gears meshing or chewing one another. Please look into this.
// Actually, I think the line meant, "It seems I'm engage to some coversation with her but, it feels like we're slipping away from the basic." ask some pro to be sure though. -DG1
// 会話が噛み合っているようで、根本的にずれている気がする。
<0076> \{\m{B}} "De toute façon..."
// \{\m{B}} "Anyway..."
// \{\m{B}} 「とにかくだ」
<0077> \{\m{B}} "Je ne crois pas que tu devrais couper les pages des livres appartenant à l'école."
// \{\m{B}} "I don't think you should cut pages out of school books."
// Prev - "Don't think of cutting up the pages of the school book."
// Alt - "I don't think you should cut pages out of books from school." - Kinny Riddle
// \{\m{B}} 「学校の本を切り取るのはどうかと思うぞ」
<0078> J'essaie de la raisonner, bien que ça ne soit pas mon habitude.
// This is unlike me, but I try to preach to her.
// Prev. TL: This is unlike me to be preaching to her.
// Alt TL: It's not usually in my nature, but I lecture her anyway. - Shi-an
// Just wanted to maintain the "try" part -DG1
// how about "preach to her" rather than "preach her?" -R23
// 柄にもないが、一応説教しておく。
<0079> Snip, snip.
// Snip, snip.
// じょきじょき。
<0080> Elle n'écoute même pas...
// She's not even listening...
// I think listen would be better choice here (just my opinion), I mean, it's not that Kotomi didn't hear him, more like she wasn't listening because she's preoccupied... Hmmm... the idea is the same since she didn't quite hear him well since she's preoccupied... geh... I'm going on a circle XD -DG1
// 聞いちゃいなかった。
<0081> \{Fille} "?"
// \{少女} 「？」
<0082> \{\m{B}} "Non, rien. Fais ce que tu veux."
// \{\m{B}} "No, nothing, do what you like."
// \{\m{B}} 「いや、もういい。勝手にしてくれ」
<0083> Elle pose le morceau du livre coupé par terre.
// She puts the cut-off piece of the book on the floor.
// 渡されたページの切れ端を、床に放った。
<0084> Pendant ce temps, je jette un oeil sur les livres situés autour d'elle.
// During that, I look at the books placed around her.
// ついでに、少女の周りに置かれている本をそれとなく眺める。
<0085> Il y a quelque chose d'écrit sur un livre épais, "Astrophysique ~Histoire et Perspectives~"
// Written on the front of the thickest book is, "Astrophysics ~The History and Prospects~"
// いちばん厚い本の表紙には、『宇宙物理学～その歴史と展望～』と書かれていた。
<0086> Même si je lisais ce livre, je ne comprendrais certainement pas une seule ligne.
// Even if I read that book, I probably wouldn't understand a single line of it.
// 俺が読んでも、１行も意味がわからないだろう。
<0087> Tous les livres semblent très couteux et techniques pour des livres scolaires.
// All the books look too expensive and technical for a school library.
// At least, they're books that would be inappropriate to this library, as they're all high-priced technical books.
// Prev. TL: There's something almost inappropriate about this sort of library; there are only expensive, technical books.
// Tomoya, speaking about the books placed around Kotomi, is saying that they look too expensive, and are about specific subjects,
// which are not befitting to this (a school's) library. - Shi-an
// こんな図書室には似つかわしくないぐらい、専門的で高価そうな本ばかりだ。
<0088> Si on regarde de plus près, on peut y voir le cachet "Collection Bibliothèque des livres de la préfecture".
// If you look pretty closely, you'll see the stamp "Prefectural Library Book Collection".
// Something about the quotation usage, if the period is not among the quote, it is outside, blah. -Amoirsp
// Note that the typography you just corrected is standard American typography; however, the reason for that is now redundant with electronic text input; and hence this is redundant too. But thought you should know. --Jc100
// よく見ると、『県立図書館蔵書』と印がおしてある。
<0089> \{\m{B}} "........."
// \{\m{B}} 「………」
<0090> En fait, ce livre ne vient pas de cette école.
// Moreover, it isn't even a book from this school.
// そもそも学校の本じゃなかった。
<0091> \{\m{B}} "Hé..."
// \{\m{B}} "Hey..."
// \{\m{B}} 「あのなあ…」
<0092> Je gratte ma tête.
// I scratch my head.
// 思わず髪を掻きむしる俺。
<0093> \{\m{B}} "Tes parents ne t'ont jamais dit de faire attention aux affaires des autres quand tu étais petite?"
// \{\m{B}} "Didn't your parents tell you to take care of everyone's belongings when you were little?"
// "Didn't your parents tell you to handle public resources with care?"
// IMO 'minna no mono' refers to public stuff.--Jc100
// Sound unnatural, erm I mean, that's a famous phrase, right? XD
// I propose changing the line to "Didn't your parents ever tell you to take care of everyone's belongings?". I know that Tomoya
// says "when you were a child" but it can't really be translated well and sound natural so it would be better just to omit it.
// - Shi-an
// \{\m{B}} 「『みんなのものは大切に』って、子供の頃親に言われただろ？」
<0094> \{Fille} "??"
// \{少女} 「？？」
<0095> Elle se remet à penser à quelque chose.
// She's thinking about something again.
// また何事か考える。
<0096> Elle sort quelque chose de semblable à une boîte de déjeuner de son sac et ouvre le couvercle.
// She takes out something like a box from her pouch handbag and opens the lid.
// It's a pouch handbag and not a bag :3, you can see it at the CG -DGreater1
// 巾着袋の中から、何か箱のようなものを取り出し、ぱかっと蓋を開ける。
<0097> \{Fille} "Une boîte de déjeuner."
// \{Girl} "Boxed lunch."
// \{少女} 「お弁当」
<0098> \{\m{B}} "........."
// \{\m{B}} 「………」
<0099> \{Fille} "Une succulente boîte de déjeuner."
// \{Girl} "A very delicious boxed lunch."
// \{少女} 「とってもおいしいお弁当」
<0100> Je n'ai jamais entendu ça.
// I never heard anything about this.
// Prev TL: Not listening again...
// This statement is actually coming from Tomoya about himself. In english the same statement is used, such as when one gets a phone
// bill with a hundred dollars worth of hidden charges and so one says "I never heard about this!". In Japanese it used much more
// casually to say that one did not expect the current turn of events. - Shi-an
// 聞いてないっての。
<0101> \{Fille} "Je l'ai fait moi-même."
// \{Girl} "I made it myself."
// \{少女} 「私の手づくりなの」
<0102> \{Fille} "Le menu d'aujourd'hui, c'est pâté impérial dans un potage, de la viande et du ragout de pommes de terres avec des épinards, et des haricots cuisinés."
// \{Girl} "Today's menu is egg roll in a soup, meat and potato stew with spinach, and cooked beans."
// \{少女} 「今日のメニューは、出汁巻き卵と肉じゃがとほうれん草と煮豆なの」
<0103> \{Fille} "J'ai plutôt confiance en celui-ci."
// \{Girl} "I'm especially confident in this one."
// \{少女} 「特にこの辺が自信作」
<0104> Elle pointe son doigt sur le Tupperware.
// She points inside the Tupperware.
// タッパーの中を指さす。
<0105> \{\m{B}} "Ca a l'air certainement bon..."
// \{\m{B}} "It certainly looks good..."
// \{\m{B}} 「たしかに、うまそうだけどな…」
<0106> ... mais il me semble que la nourriture est interdite dans la bibliothèque.
// ... but I have a feeling that eating food is prohibited in the library.
// Alt - I have a feeling eating is not allowed in the library. - Kinny Riddle
// 禁止 = prohibited, banned, not allowed, etc.
// 図書室は、飲食禁止だった気がする。
<0107> Et par-dessus tout, je me souviens que les cours ne sont pas encore terminés.
// And to top that off, I remember that lessons are still taking place.
// He already knew he was skipping a lesson, so I'm replacing, "also realize" with "remember".  The other translations don't say anything about him realizing anything, so I don't think it's that big of a change.
// Prev. TL: And also, it's like eating during lessons.
// Alt - And to top that off, I realized lessons are still taking place. - Kinny Riddle
// It's prohibited to eat during lesson -DG1
// I think the "I remember that" could be ommitted, and the sentence would flow more smoothly.
// それ以前に、今は授業中だったような気もする。
<0108> \{Fille} "Tu ne manges pas?"
// \{Girl} "Won't you eat?"
// \{少女} 「食べる？」
<0109> \{\m{B}} "Non, ce n'est pas ce que je veux dire..."
// \{\m{B}} "No, that's not what I mean..."
// \{\m{B}} 「いや、そうじゃなくてだな…」
<0110> \{Fille} "Ce n'est pas de l'argile aujourd'hui..."
// \{Girl} "It's not clay today..."
// \{少女} 「今日のは、粘土じゃないから」
<0111> \{\m{B}} "... tu manges souvent des boîtes de déjeuner avec de l'argile à l'intérieur?"
// \{\m{B}} "... do you usually eat boxed lunches made of clay?"
// \{\m{B}} 「…普段は粘土で作った弁当を食ってるのか？」
<0112> \{Fille} "Non. Je pourrais avoir une indigestion."
// \{Girl} "I don't. I'll get indigestion."
// Alt. TL: "I don't. It will upset your stomach."
// \{少女} 「食べないの。お腹こわすから」
<0113> \{Fille} "Veux-tu manger de l'argile?"
// \{Girl} "Do you want to eat clay?"
// \{少女} 「粘土、食べたい？」
<0114> \{\m{B}} "Je ne veux pas non plus manger de l'argile."
// \{\m{B}} "I don't want to eat clay either."
// \{\m{B}} 「俺だって食べたくない」
<0115> \{Fille} "Tu n'as pas faim?"
// \{Girl} "You're not hungry?"
// \{少女} 「お腹、空いてない？」
<0116> \{\m{B}} "Non, juste un peu."
// \{\m{B}} "No, I am a bit hungry."
// \{\m{B}} 「いや。そろそろ腹は減ってきたところだ」
<0117> \{Fille} "Moi aussi, j'ai faim."
// \{Girl} "I'm also become hungry."
// \{少女} 「私も、お腹空いてきたの」
<0118> Je viens de réaliser que notre conversation n'accroche pas, et tourne en rond.
// I just realized that it seems our conversation doesn't connect, and is in a loop.
// Alt - I just realized our conversation was going in circles. - IMHO, If the essence of the Japanese text can be kept with a shorter sentence in English, then it's better to just keep it simple rather than trying to translate sentence by sentence. - Kinny Riddle
// I have a habit of maintaining the context as much as possible without making it sound unnatural :3 -DG1
// The problem is that if it doesn't connect, it can't make a loop...  I also prefer Kinny Riddle's sentence, but that's because I have the same opinion he does.
// I am for Kinny's translation too. What I do not understand is why previously Tomoya said earlier that their conversation WAS //"meshing together in gear" yet now he is saying that it isn't. If in line <0075> he said the conversation was NOT meshing 
// together, I could have changed that line to say "We were on completely different wavelengths", and then change this line to
// "On top of us being on completely different wavelengths, our conversation was stuck in a loop." - Shi-an
// 会話が噛み合わない上に、ループしてるような気がする。
<0119> \{\m{B}} "Attends une minute. En fait je..."
// \{\m{B}} "Wait a minute, you see I..."
// no comma after 'you see' is better than with, even though you may get the urge to insert one.-Jc100
// Not sure though, but I think having a "pause" there would be better -DG1
// \{\m{B}} 「ちょっと待て。俺はだな…」
<0120> \{Fille} "Tu ne manges pas?"
// \{Girl} "Won't you eat?"
// \{少女} 「食べる？」
<0121> Elle me regarde droit dans les yeux et me le redemande.
// She looks straight into my eyes and asks again.
// 俺の目をまっすぐに見て、もう一度訊いてくる。
<0122> \{Fille} "Tu ne manges pas...?"
// \{Girl} "Won't you eat...?"
// \{少女} 「食べる…？」
<0123> Sa voix la rend solitaire.
// Her voice sounds somewhat lonely.
// I was thinking 'desperate' for 'lonely' but decided against; it is too active and physical an emotion
// I don't think desperate would sound good here -DG1
// どこか心細そうな声。
<0124> Le vent entrant par la fenêtre souffle sur ses ornement, les faisant légèrment bouger.
// The wind blowing from the window makes her childlike hair ornaments sway softly.
// 窓から入ってくる風に、子供っぽい髪留めがふわりと揺れる。
<0125> Pour une raison inconnue, je me sens un peu coupable.
// For some reason, I feel a little guilty.
//PREV TL: For some reason, I remembered some small memories of guilt. 'oboeru' in this context is not remember but feel. PREV TL is nonsense and doesn't aid reader in comprehension.
// なぜだか少し、罪悪感を覚えた。
<0126> Manger // Option 1, goto 128
// Eat some
// 食べる
<0127> Décliner l'offre // Option 2, goto 156
// Decline offer
// 断る
<0128> \{\m{B}} "Je crois que je vais en prendre." 
// \{\m{B}} "I guess I'll take some." 
// \{\m{B}} 「少しだけ、もらうな」
<0129> La fille hoche la tête comme si elle était soulagée.
// The girl nods as if she's relieved.
// 彼女は安心したように、こくりと頷いた。
<0130> \{Fille} "Allons-nous manger alors?"
// \{Girl} "Shall we eat then?"
// \{少女} 「いただきましょう」
<0131> \{Fille} "Bon appétit."
// \{Girl} "Let's eat."
// \{少女} 「いただきます」
<0132> Elle joint ses mains et s'incline.
// She joins her hands together and bows down.
// きちんと手を合わせ、ぺこりとお辞儀をする。
<0133> \{Fille} "Fait 'Ahh.'"
// \{Girl} "Say 'Ahh.'"
// \{少女} 「あーんして」
<0134> \{\m{B}} "Ahh..."
// \{\m{B}} "Ahh..."
// \{\m{B}} 「あーん」
<0135> \{\m{B}} "... gah! Je vais pas faire un truc aussi embarassant alors qu'on vient juste de se rencontrer!"
// \{\m{B}} "... geh! As if I'd do such an embarrasing thing when we've only just met!"
// \{\m{B}} 「…って、初対面なのにそんな恥ずかしいことできるかっ！」
<0136> \{Fille} "???"
// \{少女} 「？？？」
<0137> Elle n'a pas l'air de comprendre ce qu'il y a d'embarassant dans tout ça.
// It seems she doesn't understand what is so embarrassing about it.
// Prev. TL: It seems like she doesn't what she's doing that's embarassing
//IMO, if the scriptwriter's intention was to say that she doesn't know the definition of 'embarassing', it would be instead written: 『恥ずかしい』とこの言葉、彼女がわからないらしい。
//PREV TL:It seems like she doesn't have any idea what embarrassing is.
// Alt - Seems like she doesn't have any idea what it was that's embarrassing. - Kinny Riddle
// "なにが恥ずかしいのか (What's embarassing)" is the object of what she doesn't seem to know. -DG1
// How about, "It seems she doesn't understand what embarrassing is."
// Kinny is right. I do not know how to explain it, but Tomoya is saying Kotomi does not understand what is embarrassing about the
// SITUATION, not what 'embarrassing' is as a whole. The problem is that in Japanese who/what is being talked about is often only
// implied, (seen in how there are no articles like "the" or "a") which to people who speak a very specific language like English
// can be a bit confusing. - Shi-an
// なにが恥ずかしいのか、わからないらしい。
<0138> \{\m{B}} "Soupir..."
// \{\m{B}} "Sigh..."
// \{\m{B}} 「はあ…」
<0139> J'ai comme l'impression que ne suis pas une simple personne ordinaire dans l'univers distant, et solitaire de cette jeune fille.
// I can feel that I'm not just an ordinary person in this girl's distant, lonely world.
// I prefer "I feel" or "I can tell", but...
// I can feel that I'm not just an ordinary person in the distant lonely world of this girl.
// この少女の浮世離れっぷりは、只者ではない気がする。
<0140> \{Fille} "Bon..."
// \{Girl} "Well..."
// \{少女} 「ええと…」
<0141> \{Fille} "Mais il n'y a qu'une seule paire de baguettes."
// \{Girl} "But there is only one pair of chopsticks."
// PREV TL: "But I only have one pair of chopsticks." sounds quite discouraging, which is not the case
// Don't really know, but prev. tl sound more natural to me -DG1
// \{少女} 「でも、お箸、一膳しかないの」
<0142> \{Fille} "Que devrions-nous faire..."
// \{Girl} "What should we do..."
// PREV TL:"What should I do..."
// \{少女} 「どうしよう…」
<0143> Je prend un morceau de viande avec mes doigts et le fourre dans ma bouche.
// I take a piece of meat out with my fingers and put it inside my mouth.
// One finger meat grab!
// 俺は肉じゃがをひとつ、指でひょいっとつまんで、口に入れた。
<0144> Je le mâche et l'avale.
// I chew it well and swallow.
// よく噛んで食べる。
<0145> C'est un peu froid, mais c'est vraiment goutu.
// It's a little cold, but it's really tasty.
// 冷たいけれどよく味が染みている。
<0146> Si elle a fait ça, alors je peux dire qu'elle est vraiment bonne en cuisine.
// If she made this, then I can say that she's really good at cooking.
// これが手作りなら、かなり料理上手だと思う。
<0147> \{Fille} "Oh..."
// \{少女} 「お…」
<0148> Elle dit quelque chose en regardant de nouveau mon visage.
// She says something and looks at my face again.
// 少女は何か言いかけて、もう一度俺の顔を見た。
<0149> \{Fille} "C'est bon?"
// \{Girl} "Is it good?"
// \{少女} 「おいしい？」
<0150> \{\m{B}} "C'est parfait."
// \{\m{B}} "It's all right."
// \{\m{B}} 「まあまあ、だな」
<0151> Elle me montre un petit sourire.
// She shows me a faint smile.
// 答えると、かすかに微笑んだ。
<0152> \{Fille} "Veux-tu en manger d'avantage?"
// \{Girl} "Do you want to eat some more?"
// \{少女} 「もっと食べる？」
<0153> A ce moment, la cloche sonne l'heure de la pause déjeuner.
// At that moment, the bell for lunch break rings.
// Prev. TL: The chime rang at that time and it's already lunch break.
// Alt - At that moment, the bell for lunch break rang. - Kinny Riddle
// その時、昼休みのチャイムが鳴った。
<0154> Encore quinze minutes, et cet endroit sera remplit d'étudiants, venus se préparer à leurs prochains cours. 
// Another fifteen minutes, and this place will also be full of students preparing for lessons. 
// もう１５分もすれば、予習をする生徒でここも混み合うはずだ。
<0155> Son déjeuner est plutôt petit, alors je ne devrais pas en prendre d'avantage.
// This lunch is quite small, so I shouldn't really take any more.
// orig wording: I shouldn't take any more of her inadequate boxed lunch. 
// Prev. TL: I shouldn't take any more of her already-scarce boxed lunch.
//REASON FOR CHANGE: as is apparent from the CG, and the previous part of the scenario, Kotomi starts off with a small bento; it isn't empty; nothing was eaten by this time other than the single chunk of (bite-sized)meat
// except, you should know that CG is not a good way to tell what the line should be saying, as there isn't that much CG in CLANNAD --velocity7
// Don't really know, but I think what Tomoya meant here is that her lunch box is too little for him (in his mind), so taking more would make the lunch not enough for the Fille. -DG1
// そう量が多くない弁当を、これ以上もらうわけにもいかない。// goto 195
<0156> \{\m{B}} "Non, je n'en veux plus."
// \{\m{B}} "No, I guess not."
// \{\m{B}} 「いや、やめとく」
<0157> Elle s'est mise à me regarder avec curiosité, juste après mes dires.
// After saying that, she looks curiously at me.
// そう言ったとたん、不思議そうに俺のことを見た。
<0158> \{Fille} "Tu es repu?"
// \{Girl} "Are you full?"
// \{少女} 「おなか、いっぱい？」
<0159> \{\m{B}} "Non, pas vraiment..."
// \{\m{B}} "No, that's not really it..."
// \{\m{B}} 「いや、そういうわけじゃなくてだな…」
<0160> ... Je crois que je suis réticent, à soudainement accepter la nourriture venant d'un étranger.
// ... I guess I have a resistance against suddenly accepting lunch from a stranger.
// Prev. TL: ... I guess it's quite unnatural to be accepting a sudden offer for lunch from a stranger.
// REASON FOR CHANGE: as 'yahari' shows, 'resistance' os not an emotion the player induces; it is an emotion which the player finds himself to be feeling
// やはり抵抗がある means "I have a resistance, as I thought..." and that resistance he's talking about is to suddenly accept some lunch from a stranger. -DG1
// Reword if it doesn't look right.
// …見ず知らずの奴からいきなり弁当を恵んでもらうのは、やはり抵抗がある。
<0161> La fille me fixe et, avec détermination, me dit:
// The girl is staring at me and, with determination, she says:
// Prev. TL: The girl was staring at me and proceeded to say with determination.
// should I end this with a colon instead? --Jc100
// I think this would be better :3 -DG1
// 少女は俺のことをじっと見ていたが、決心したように言った。
<0162> \{Fille} "Bon alors, je vais essayer d'en manger."
// \{Girl} "Well then, I'll try to eat."
// Prev. TL: "Well then, I'll give the meal a taste."
// Not sure but, she made it herself, right? Don't you think it would be unnatural if she say she'll give it a taste when hours could have passed since she cooked it and she might have already tasted it? -DG1
// \{少女} 「それじゃ、私が食べてみるの」
<0163> \{\m{B}} "Et bien, tu n'as pas vraiment besoin de me l'annoncer..."
// \{\m{B}} "Well, you don't really need to announce that..."
// \{\m{B}} 「いや、いちいち宣言しなくても…」
<0164> \{Fille} "Mangerons-nous alors?"
// \{Girl} "Shall we eat then?"
// \{少女} 「いただきましょう」
<0165> \{Fille} "Bon appétit."
// \{Girl} "Let's eat."
// \{少女} 「いただきます」
<0166> Elle joint ses mains ensemble et s'incline.
// She places her hands together and bows down.
// きちんと手を合わせ、ぺこりとお辞儀をする。
<0167> \{Fille} "The first one is, egg roll in a soup."
// \{Girl} "The first one is, egg roll in a soup."
// \{少女} 「最初は出汁巻き卵」
<0168> Elle le divise en une moitié avec ses baguette.
// She divides it in half with her chopsticks.
// 丁寧に箸で半分にする。
<0169> ... miom, miom, miom.
// ... munch, munch, munch.
// …はぐはぐはぐ。
<0170> Gloup.
// Gulp.
// ごくん。
<0171> \{Fille} "C'est vraiment délicieux."
// \{Girl} "It's really delicious."
// \{少女} 「とってもおいしいの」
<0172> \{Fille} "Le ragout à présent."
// \{Girl} "Next is the stew."
// \{少女} 「次は肉じゃが」
<0173> Elle divise celui-ci aussi en une moitié.
// She also divides it in half.
// やっぱり半分にする。
<0174> ... miom, miom, miom, miom.
// ... munch, munch, munch, munch.
// …もぐもぐもぐもぐ。
<0175> Gloup.
// Gulp.
// ごくん。
<0176> \{Fille} "C'est vraiment, vraiment délicieux."
// \{Girl} "It's really, really delicious."
// \{少女} 「とってもとってもおいしいの」
<0177> \{Fille} "A présent, ce qui suit est..."
// \{Girl} "And then, the next one is..."
// \{少女} 「それでね、次は…」
<0178> Elle écarte alors le riz blanc avec ses baguettes.
// Then, she spreads the white rice with her chopsticks.
// 白いご飯に箸をのばす。
<0179> \{Fille} "... Je vais te donner la prune séchée."
// \{Girl} "... I'll show you a dried plum."
// \{少女} 「…と見せかけて梅干しなの」
<0180> C'est une feinte.
// It's a feint.
// フェイントだった。
<0181> \{Fille} "C'est difficile de la diviser en deux alors..."
// \{Girl} "It's difficult dividing this in two so..."
// \{少女} 「これは半分こするのがむずかしいから…」
<0182> \{Fille} "Ca ne te dérange pas si je la mange avant toi?"
// \{Girl} "Is it all right if I eat this before you?"
// \{少女} 「私が先に食べてみていい？」
<0183> \{\m{B}} "... Je t'en prie."
// \{\m{B}} "... do as you please."
// \{\m{B}} 「…勝手にしてくれ」
<0184> \{Fille} "D'accord."
// \{Girl} "Okay."
// \{少女} 「うん」
<0185> Elle jette la petite prune rouge, directement dans sa bouche avec ses baguettes.
// She flings the small, deep, red plum in her mouth with her chopsticks.
// Deep?
// 真っ赤な小梅を、箸で口に放り込む。
<0186> \{Fille} "... c'est vraiment acide."
// \{Girl} "... it's really sour."
// \{少女} 「…とってもしょっぱいの」
<0187> Elle dit alors que c'est vraiment acide.
// She says so as if it's really sour.
// 本当にしょっぱそうに言う。
<0188> Après ça, elle enlève doucement le noyau, et pour je ne sais quelle raiosn, le maintient devant elle.
// After that, she gently takes out the seed, and for some reason, she holds it up in front of her.
// それから種をそっと出して、なぜか自分の顔の前にかざす。
<0189> Comme si elle essayait de me montrer quelque chose.
// It seems like she's trying to show me something.
// どうやら俺に見せびらかしているらしい。
<0190> \{Fille} "Regarde, ce n'est pas de l'argile."
// \{Girl} "See, it's not clay."
// \{少女} 「ほらね、粘土じゃないの」
<0191> \{\m{B}} "........."
// \{\m{B}} 「………」
<0192> Je ne comprend vraiment pas ce qu'elle veut dire par là.
// I really don't understand what she means by that.
// ものすごい意味不明っぷりだった。
<0193> A ce moment, le cloche signalant le début de la pause déjeuner se met à sonner.
// At that moment, the bell signaling the start of lunch break rings.
//PREV TL: At that moment, the bell starting lunch break rings.
// No harm adding nore detail and clarity here --Jc100
// Alt - At that moment, the bell for lunch break rang. - Kinny Riddle
// その時、昼休みのチャイムが鳴った。
<0194> Encore quinze minutes, et cet endroit sera remplit d'étudiants, venus se préparer à leurs prochains cours. 
// Another fifteen minutes, and this place will also be full of students preparing for lessons. 
// もう１５分もすれば、予習をする生徒でここも混み合うはずだ。
<0195> \{\m{B}} "Désolé de t'avoir dérangée." 
// \{\m{B}} "Sorry for bothering you." 
// \{\m{B}} 「邪魔したな」
<0196> Après mes simples dires, je me détourne d'elle.
// Saying only that, I turn away from her.
// それだけ言って、彼女から背を向けた。
<0197> \{Fille} "Euh..."
// \{Girl} "Um..."
// \{少女} 「ええと…」
<0198> On dirait qu'elle veut me dire quelque chose, mais je peux la voir hésiter.
// It seems she wants to say something, but I can see that she's hesitating.
// I can see that she wants to say something but she's hesitating.
// 何か言いたそうにして、ためらったのがわかった。
<0199> \{Fille} "A demain alors."
// \{Girl} "See you again tomorrow."
// \{少女} 「また、明日」
<0200> C'est la seule chose que j'ai entendu.
// That's the only thing I hear.
// それだけ聞こえた。
<0201> Je lève ma main gauche juste au-dessus de mon épaule, puis je quitte la bibliothèque.
// I raise my left hand just over my shoulder, and then leave the library.
// 俺は肩越しにひょいっと左手を上げて、図書室を後にした。

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