Editing Talk:Horizon:Volume 1 Prologue (section)

==Questions about translation==

So here's some lines I have trouble understanding:
<br />''At the habitable high-skies'' <- Does this mean a certain area of the sky is habitable or does it mean something else?
<br />''Fufufu, it's all right, my make-up was done...'' <- The entire sentence. Is it saying that Kimi reserves the morning for her to put on make-up?
<br />''Margot...not that name, you know...'' and ''The Nakamura-san three over named'' <- both these paragraphs make zero sense to me, sorry. I'll definitely need clarification for these.
<br />''Within Oriotorai's vision, its owner looking'' <- By 'owner' does it mean Oriotorai, or does it mean someone else?
<br />''and with that, they committed.'' <- Committed to what?
<br />More to come once I get to editing them. I lost about a couple of hours work just then, so it'll be a while before you see another edit update... [[User:Skarlath|Skarlath]] 00:15, 9 December 2011 (CST)

Just one thing: It's easier to read if you use # or * instead of line breaks.
# Yeah, that's what I believe it means.
# Kimi takes her time in the morning, she's trying to say how much extra time she has.
# Kimi prefers to be called by names other than her own name because her name sounds like 'raw yolk'. (I should change that from blue.) Nakamura-san three over is presumably her neighbour. She's complaining about her hobbies etc. 
# The owner is Oriotorai, yeah.
# They comitted to the provisional rule/History Recreation.

And that's why I need an editor. Thanks a lot! A few notes, I'll change this myself, but just to let you know:

# Westfallen should be Westphalia.
# Tsirch 'Testament' is supposed to be 'Church'. The word is 教譜 (Teachings/Faith) as opposed to 聖譜(Testament).
# Internally-fueled an externally-fueled should be changed to internal-fuel and external-fuel; I feel internally-fueled etc. is slightly inaccurate.
# There's a sentence where Heidi goes 'and...and...and...', you changed this, but due to the native Japanese structure, it's meant to convey that she's going on and on.
-[[User:YoakeNoHikari|YoakeNoHikari]] 01:34, 9 December 2011 (CST)

About Kimi's nickname, is it really Belle Flore and not Belle Fiore? Because, the latter seem to be used in wiki and MAL among other.