Editing Talk:Mushoku Tensei:Web Chapter 82 (section)

== Questions on Changes ==

1. To the This word, Protection knight who are Luke also agreed. (I'm going to change this, To these words, Protection Knight Luke also agreed)  >>  sounds much better.  I did make an error here though, Any instances of 'Protection knight' need to be changed to the more proper titled Guardian knight or Knight-guardian if they are spotted. Thanks! --Skui

I'm going to go with Guardian Knight -[[User:Marrow|Marrow]] ([[User talk:Marrow|talk]]) 11:26, 31 July 2014 (CDT)

2. Too luxurious was the bed. Too luxurious were the clothes the people wore. Too luxurious was the room. I don't know the reason why I'm in such a amazing luxurious place. 

'''This seems awkward to me, would it be alright if I changed it to something like'''

(The bed, the peoples' clothing, and the room were all too luxurious.)I don't know the reason why I'm in such a amazing, luxurious place.

>> go ahead. I was just doing a line-by-line as it appeared, since he reiterates it like that in that section.

　シルフィは目覚めた瞬間、夢だと考えた。 

　'''豪華すぎる'''ベッド。 >> '''too luxurious''' (was the) bed

　'''豪華すぎる'''服を着た人達。 >> '''too luxurious''' (were the) clothes the people wore

　'''豪華すぎる'''部屋。 >> '''too luxurious''' (was the) room.  

　自分がこんな豪華すぎる所にいる理由がわからなかった。 

I was just doing a line-by-line and trying to keep it looking similar. Honestly it looks better just making it grammatically pleasant.  He does this a few times, once at the beginning involving the demon attack, and a bit further on when talking about the 'genius boy' Rudeus. So, if you wish to polish those up, it's more than welcomed. --Skui


To be honest, I think the repetition was placed there purposely since it reads off like a list. Comparing

"The bed is too luxurious. 

The people's clothes are too luxurious. 

The room is too luxurious.

I don't know why I'm in such an amazing, luxurious place."

with

"The bed, the peoples' clothing, and the room were all too luxurious.
I don't know why I'm in such an amazing, luxurious place."

You can see amount of emphasis placed the notion of luxury primarily because it is repeated so many times. The latter condenses it, so it loses a bit of that feeling.

This is just my take on it though.
--[[User:Sarnik|Sarnik]] ([[User talk:Sarnik|talk]]) 11:53, 31 July 2014 (CDT)