Editing Talk:Suzumiya Haruhi:Volume8 Wandering Shadow (section)

=== Opening scene narration frame ===

Before I get too carried away...

As I read the opening scene, Kyon-the-narrator is in the gym, now, not writing in his journal the next day and certainly not in his arm-chair years later. If this is correct, there's a lot of tense adjustment  to do, bringing stuff out of immediate past into present. Is there any basis for not putting Kyon-the-narrator in the gym?--[[User:Nutcase|Nutcase]] 07:00, 9 March 2007 (PST)

:I would ask the same question: Is there any basis for doing all that work and putting Kyon-the-narrator in the gym? What parts make you think it's actively happening rather than (the more common) retrospective narration? [[User:Smidge204|Smidge204]] 10:19, 9 March 2007 (PST)

1. From the tone of his voice, it appears that he wasn’t in awe, but kind of disappointed instead.

2. This girl, who was currently sitting on the substitute bench drinking the beverages the team had brought, was, without a doubt, Suzumiya Haruhi

3. It was now March, and the end of term exams had just ended.

4. Maybe it was done out of the school’s concern for letting students have a break after the end of term exams, but if you ask me, I’d pick longer holidays over intramural sports activities anytime.

5. I agree completely with him. If Haruhi had joined the athletics (track and field) club, she would have been able to compete in the nationals right now.

6. As I continued to watch another match that was taking place beside the first court, I gave Kunikida my reply.


1 and 5 are explicitly scene present. 4 is only narration present, but it reflects a state of mind congruent with scene present - same decade at least. 2, 3 and 6 are representative examples of a pervasive emphasis on ‘storyboard immediacy.’ This was all in HC’s translation before I touched it. This all creates a cumulative impression.

Of course I have no detailed idea as to how this relates to the original.--[[User:Nutcase|Nutcase]] 13:14, 9 March 2007 (PST)