Editing User talk:John Woodward (section)

====Dark Kaito====

I'm not really too up for going out of my way to verify all changes made to chapters, on that end, if something ends up being edited into a different context, I'll leave it to anon TLs to fix later. On that end, this one is just me nitpicking but Rudeus refers to Zenith as Zenith generally, he only refers to her as kaa-san to other people, and it's used formally, it seems odd for that be "mom" to me, mother makes more sense.

^that one is just something that bugs me and not a major issue, but one thing that could be considered an actual problem, I saw two changes you made to the order of the teleport circle contexts. One was in regards to the "trap circle surrounding", it's mentioned that the trap is like a doughnut, in others it's a double circle, two circles inside of each other, and the outer rim is the trap. The way it was edited makes it sound like there's more magic circles on the outside of the real magic circle, the problem with that is there's only 3 magic circles in that room and they're not near each other.

The other one was in regards to the cut off section where Roxy ended up, basically there's two-way magic circles which are used as an entrance/exit and then one-way which will only you send to a different place, there's also the random ones which are completely random to the same floor. The way it was being stated is the only way to escape that secluded section is to try each of the one-way teleports until she manages to find the two-way one that leads back outside of the walled off section. Then there are 30 or so one-way teleports that just lead back around to other areas inside that section.

I don't really check through all edits but those two changes caught my attention because they could potentially confuse people on how many magic circles there are and how they ended up in that situation. --[[User:Dark Kaito|Dark Kaito]] ([[User talk:Dark Kaito|talk]]) 01:44, 17 August 2014 (CDT)

I'm a bit more pre-occupied with translating my last bit before I check over this stuff and I'm not great with choosing the tenses in the first place. Most PoV tenses are said in the characters own PoV. One of the unusual exceptions in regards of PoVs is a lot of the stuff in volumes 7 and 8. Particularly the Sylphy PoV ones which are almost like they're being read by a narrator in volume 8. The volume 7 ones have a mix of both 1st person and that as well.. which can make it pretty difficult. I'll check into things more after I finish translating what I have left planned. --[[User:Dark Kaito|Dark Kaito]] ([[User talk:Dark Kaito|talk]]) 03:49, 20 August 2014 (CDT)