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Because of this vague pain, Meiko started to become numb to time. She couldn’t remember anything. The only thing she knew was that a long time had passed since then.
 
Because of this vague pain, Meiko started to become numb to time. She couldn’t remember anything. The only thing she knew was that a long time had passed since then.
   
Meiko reminisced about the instant she vanished from the world.
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Meiko reminisced the instant she vanished from the world.
   
 
(Did it hurt?)
 
(Did it hurt?)
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She wanted to fulfill a wish.
 
She wanted to fulfill a wish.
   
That wish could only be fulfilled when everyone in the Super Peace Busters was together.
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That wish could only be fulfilled when everyone in the Super Peace Busters are together.
   
Every time she thought of something about herself, pain would crawl over her whole body, but this didn’t. This was the only fact that wouldn’t hurt when she thought of it.
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Every time she thought of something about herself, pain would crawl on her whole body, but this didn’t. This was the only fact that wouldn’t hurt when she thought of it.
   
 
She wanted everyone to know how each other felt, just like back then.
 
She wanted everyone to know how each other felt, just like back then.
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(Jintan…was hurt because of me.)
 
(Jintan…was hurt because of me.)
   
Jinta’s leaving scene kept running through her mind.
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Jinta’s leaving scene kept running on her mind.
   
Jinta said that he had had a tough life after that, and that everyone had changed.
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Jinta said that he had a tough life after that, and that everyone had changed.
   
Meiko wanted to deny this fact. She wanted the Super Peace Busters, including Jinta, to return to how they were before.
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Meiko wanted to deny this fact. She wanted the Super Peace Busters, including Jinta, to become like back then.
   
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The problem was that everyone after that incident had become vague to Meiko. She didn’t have the right to make a conclusion…she knew it.
She knew, however, practically nothing of after she passed away. As such, she wasn't fit to make decisions for others…she was aware of this.
 
   
 
“Arghahahahaha!!”
 
“Arghahahahaha!!”
   
A coarse laugh interrupted Meiko’s hesitation.
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A coarse laugh interrupted Meiko’s hesitation.
   
 
(Eh…?)
 
(Eh…?)
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Naruko and her high school friends strolled in front of the station.
 
Naruko and her high school friends strolled in front of the station.
   
If they hadn't had a special destination, McDonald's would have been a great choice. Or, they could have spent a bit more and gone to a family restaurant to kill time. However, they chose to gather in front of the station and chat there. This was to flaunt their equipment to the pedestrians.
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If they didn’t have a special destination, McDonalds would have been a great choice. Or they could spend a bit more and go to a family restaurant to kill time. However, they chose to gather in front of the station and chat there. This was to show to the pedestrians their equipment.
   
She was wearing a newly bought lace bra, and had had her fingernails coloured aqua-blue last night.
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She was wearing a new-bought, laced bra, and coloured her fingernails aqua-blue last night.
   
 
“Ahaha…!”
 
“Ahaha…!”
   
When did her laughing voice sound so loud? Naruko sometimes would even think this inconceivable.
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When did her laughing voice sounded so loud? Naruko sometimes would even think this was inconceivable.
   
Since the autumn of grade 2 in middle school, she would wear super-short skirts. By the summer of grade 3 she even started to wear high-heeled shoes.
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Sine the autumn of grade 2 in middle school, she would wear super-short skirts. And she even started to wear high-heeled shoes starting from the summer of grade 3.
   
Naruko was thinking about Jinta. She had seen him today, but it had been a long time. The last time dated back to the opening ceremony of the school.
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Naruko was thinking of Jinta’s matter. Today she saw him again after a long time, dating back to the opening ceremony of the school, but Jinta…
   
 
(How does he think of me?)
 
(How does he think of me?)
   
After Meiko’s incident, the Super Peace Busters drifted apart. Gradually, Jinta’s attitude changed. To sum it up in one word, it was the word ‘sullen’.
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After Meiko’s incident, the Super Peace Busters drifted apart. Gradually, Jinta’s expression changed. To sum it up in one word, it was the word ‘sullen’.
   
There were quite a few children around here who had to face the examination of promotion to high school. They entered the same high school, yet every time they met in the corridor, Jinta would always turn away, pretending he didn’t see her.
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There were quite a few children around here who have to face the examination of promotion to high school. They entered the same high school, yet every time they meet in the corridor, Jinta would always turn away, pretending he didn’t see her.
   
 
Naruko wanted to catch Jinta’s attention.
 
Naruko wanted to catch Jinta’s attention.
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No, he didn’t.
 
No, he didn’t.
 
 
Would he say anything to her after she had worn super-short skirts?
 
Would he say anything to her after she had worn super-short skirts?
   
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“…like some straw.”
 
“…like some straw.”
   
At that time, Naruko bought hair dye and tried dying her hair for the first time, but she messed up the bleaching time and made her hair bleach too much colour.
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At that time, Naruko bought a hair dye and tried her first time in dying her hair, but she messed up the bleaching time and made her hair bleach too much colour.
   
 
Nevertheless, it was enough to excite her.
 
Nevertheless, it was enough to excite her.
   
To see Jinta leaving and shouting like this was exciting and joyful.
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To see Jinta leaving and to shout like this was exciting and joyful.
   
 
‘What should I do now? Time’s up.”
 
‘What should I do now? Time’s up.”
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“There aren't any good ones here. Let’s just play around a bit and get out of here.”
 
“There aren't any good ones here. Let’s just play around a bit and get out of here.”
   
Naruko and her friends agreed to go to sing KTV with boys from other schools later. KTV partying, chatting in front of the station, or buying a one-hundred-yen snack if starving…going to Tokyo for shopping via the express at the holidays to buy exclusive things there—this was the vanity they were submerged in.
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Naruko and her friends agreed to go to sing KTV with boys from other schools in a while. KTV partying, chatting in front of the station, or buying a one-hundred-yan snack if starving…going to Tokyofor shopping via the express at the holidays for those things are exclusive there—this was the vanity they were submerged in.
   
They spent their time with a serious attitude after lessons were over in their rural school.
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With a serious attitude, they got through the time after school, the rural school.
   
They left their beverage cans on the bench they had sat on and left.
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They left their beverage cans on the bench they sat and left.
   
This was their everyday life. <!--日常-->
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This was their usual life. <!--日常-->
   
 
“…”
 
“…”
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Naruko imitated their behaviour.
 
Naruko imitated their behaviour.
   
This was difficult for Naruko, who loved to clean things up. If she were to walk forward a few steps and throw it into the trash bin beside the vending machine…she really wanted to do this, but…
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This was uneasy for Naruko, who loved to clean things up. If she were to walk forward a few steps and throw it into the trash bin beside the vending machine…she really wanted to do this, but…
   
 
“Naruko?”
 
“Naruko?”
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“Ah, sorry. Wait for me!”
 
“Ah, sorry. Wait for me!”
   
She left the can alone. She didn’t have time to care for the different thoughts in her mind. She only had to focus on what was happening before her: there was no need to care for abandoned things.
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She left the can alone. She didn’t have time to care for the different thoughts in her mind. She only had to focus on what was happening before her: there was no need to care for things abandoned.
   
Naruko began to wonder when she had turned into such a person.
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Naruko began to think when she had become such a person.
   
At the same moment, Menma stared at the person Naruko had now become.
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At the same moment, Menma stared at this kind of a Naruko.
   
 
(Anaru littered…)
 
(Anaru littered…)
   
Menma was a bit shocked, not because she wanted to reproach her for littering, but because the person Naruko once was would never have done such an act.
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Menma was a bit shocked, not because she wanted to reproach her for littering, but that the Naruko she knew would never do such an act.
   
She did everything according to the rules and loved to clean things up. When Meiko was eating a sweet cone, she would even pick up the scraps that had fallen beside her.
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She did everything according to rules and loved to clean things up. When Meiko was eating a sweet cone, she would even pick up the scraps that had fallen beside her.
   
(Anaru looked like she didn’t really smile…)
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(Anaru looked she didn’t really smile…)
   
 
Her pink chin painted with lipstick was a triangle, an expression of smiling. Even her eyes were bent…but that was not the smile Meiko knew.
 
Her pink chin painted with lipstick was a triangle, an expression of smiling. Even her eyes were bent…but that was not the smile Meiko knew.
   
Having confirmed that Naruko and her friends had left, Meiko picked up the can and threw it into the trash bin. The can knocked on the bottom of the bin and made a clear crackling sound.
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Having confirmed that Naruko and her friends had left, Meiko picked up the can and threw it into the trash bin. The can knocked on the bottom of the bin and caused a clear crackling sound.
   
 
The leaves of the persimmon tree she was familiar with rustled in the night wind.
 
The leaves of the persimmon tree she was familiar with rustled in the night wind.
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Meiko had gone to the family that raised her.
 
Meiko had gone to the family that raised her.
   
She had a feeling that there wasn’t an urgent need to come back here. Meiko, who had a vague memory, didn’t have a strong sense of belonging to this place. This place occurred to her as a place she had been just yesterday. This feeling scared her for no reason.
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She had a feeling that there wasn’t an urgent need to come back here. Meiko who had a vague memory didn’t have a strong sense of belonging to this place. This place occurred to her like a place she had been just yesterday. This feeling made her scared for no reason.
   
 
(What should I do...)
 
(What should I do...)
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Should she enter? She was scared to enter, but she didn’t know why.
 
Should she enter? She was scared to enter, but she didn’t know why.
   
Her thighs tensed, and her thumb curled and opened unconsciously. Suddenly, a rich, nostalgic<!-- an adjective which means tease one’s heart, make one’s heart itchy because of it or engrossing--> scent flew into Meiko’s nose…
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Her thighs tensed, and her thumb curled up and opened up unconsciously. Suddenly, a rich, attracting<!-- an adjective which means tease one’s heart, make one’s heart itchy because of it or engrossing--> smell flew into Meiko’s nose…
   
 
“Curry!”
 
“Curry!”
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Meiko blurted.
 
Meiko blurted.
   
It was Meiko’s favourite curry. Mashing the sweet corn grains with a mixer into a mush, and then putting a lot of other things into it makes honey-sweet curry. Her brother Satoshi liked it a lot, and her dad would also eat it with Worcestershire sauce<ref>https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Worcestershire_sauce</ref>…
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It was Meiko’s favourite curry. Mashing the sweet corn grains with a mixer into a mush, and then put a lot of other things into it to become a honey-sweet curry. Her brother Satoshi liked it a lot, and her dad would also eat it with Worcestershire sauce<ref>http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sauce</ref>…
   
When she thought of this, her confused perception of time was eased, and she regained some sense of belonging.
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When she thought of this, the vague time concept became a bit clearer, and the sense of belonging came back to her.
   
 
At this moment, the doorknob Meiko was holding onto…
 
At this moment, the doorknob Meiko was holding onto…
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“Good evening…”
 
“Good evening…”
   
She pushed it a bit, creating a little gap for her to spy inside and have a look at the living room.
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She pushed it a bit, creating a little gap, for her to spy inside and have a look at the living room.
   
 
“!!”
 
“!!”
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Everything was different. It was not the Honma Home she had in her memory.
 
Everything was different. It was not the Honma Home she had in her memory.
   
They didn’t talk: dad was reading the newspaper; Satoshi was playing the DS. On the table were dishes of curry surplus…Back then, mum would say in a lively voice, “The dishes have to be put to the sink!”.
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They didn’t talk. Dad was reading the newspaper. Satoshi was playing the DS. On the table were dishes of curry surplus…Back then, mum would say in a lively voice, “the dishes had to be put to the sink!”.
   
But now, mum was placing a small bowl of curry into a shrine that was installed here after Meiko's death.
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But now mum was placing a small bowl of curry into the shrine that didn’t exist when Meiko was around.
   
Then, she rang the bell and clasped her hands, maintaining an upright sitting position, her thin socks pressing softly against the skin of her feet.
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Then she rang the bell and clasped her hands, maintaining an upright sitting position, the thin socks pressingly softly on the skin of her feet.
   
 
“…”
 
“…”
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Meiko stopped moving.
 
Meiko stopped moving.
   
She didn't remember seeing this shrine before. Suddenly realising what that meant, she refrained from approaching it—she also refrained from approaching her beloved mum.
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That shrine was a shrine she didn’t remember. She suddenly knew what that meant, so she didn’t approach it—didn’t approach the mum she loved the most.
   
 
“Mum, can you stop giving the shrine a bowl of curry every time we have curry?”
 
“Mum, can you stop giving the shrine a bowl of curry every time we have curry?”
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(Satori…?)
 
(Satori…?)
   
Playing the DS, Satori complained, without even the slightest intention to lift his head and look at mum. “It looks very troublesome.”
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Playing the DS, Satori complained, without even the slightest intention to lift his head and look at mum. “It looks like it’s very troublesome.”
   
 
“You shouldn’t say this.” <!-- gentle tone-->
 
“You shouldn’t say this.” <!-- gentle tone-->
   
Mum wore a face Meiko had never seen.
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Mum showed an expression Meiko had never seen.
   
 
“Because your sister is a bit muddle-headed.”
 
“Because your sister is a bit muddle-headed.”
   
It was as if the smallest and lightest ripple induced by the wind crossed her face. She seemed to have held back her tears, yet she nevertheless seemed to be crying…
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It was as if the smallest and lightest ripple induced by the wind, looking like she was crying, yet at the same time, crying…
   
“So, your sister may not even be aware she has passed away.”
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“So, your sister may even don’t know she had already passed away.”
   
 
The words of Meiko’s mother gave Meiko the creeps, making her shiver.
 
The words of Meiko’s mother gave Meiko the creeps, making her shiver.
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“Hey. It wasn’t me!”
 
“Hey. It wasn’t me!”
   
Satori was falsely accused by her father again. However, Meiko wasn’t even feeling the urge to protect him. She just murmured absent-mindedly.
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Satori was accused wrongly by her father again. However, Meiko wasn’t even feeling the urge to protect her. She just murmured absent-mindedly.
   
 
“I know it…” <!-- adorable tone-->
 
“I know it…” <!-- adorable tone-->
   
She knew little about this present world, but this was home. This home wasn’t the Honma Home she once knew, and thus she was more alarmed of this unpalatable truth.
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Although there were a lot of things she didn’t understand, this was the home. This home wasn’t the Honma Home she once knew, and thus she even knew deeper this unpalatable truth.
   
“Menma knows that she has already passed away.” <!-- adorable tone x 2-->
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“Menma knows that she had already passed away.” <!-- adorable tone x 2-->
   
 
When she got outside, the warm night wind blew against her.
 
When she got outside, the warm night wind blew against her.
   
The fact of her passing away was perhaps painful…much more painful than having to accept the Japanese encephalitis vaccine<ref>accepted by injection via a medical syringe with a needle...a really sharp needle</ref>.
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Meiko thought, she had already passed away, perhaps it was painful…much more painful than having to accept the Japanese encephalitis vaccine<ref>accepted by injection via a medical syringe with a needle...a really sharp needle</ref>.
   
Yet she wasn't a member who shared this memory. Her mother and other family members, on the other hand, were. They must have accepted this memory and this pain for her, bearing it for her ever since.
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Yet, she hadn’t that memory again. The lost memory, the lost pain, must have been accepted by her mother and other family members, bearing it until now.
   
 
(Sorry…)
 
(Sorry…)

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