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Because of this vague pain, Meiko started to become numb to time. She couldn’t remember anything. The only thing she knew was that a long time had passed since then. |
Because of this vague pain, Meiko started to become numb to time. She couldn’t remember anything. The only thing she knew was that a long time had passed since then. |
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− | Meiko reminisced |
+ | Meiko reminisced the instant she vanished from the world. |
(Did it hurt?) |
(Did it hurt?) |
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At the instant she tried to remember it, a sharp, cold pain like a piece of glass slicing through her back shot right through her. |
At the instant she tried to remember it, a sharp, cold pain like a piece of glass slicing through her back shot right through her. |
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− | She wanted to |
+ | She wanted to fulfil a wish. |
− | That wish could only be fulfilled when everyone in the Super Peace Busters |
+ | That wish could only be fulfilled when everyone in the Super Peace Busters are together. |
− | Every time she thought of something about herself, pain would crawl |
+ | Every time she thought of something about herself, pain would crawl on her whole body, but this didn’t. This was the only fact that wouldn’t hurt when she thought of it. |
She wanted everyone to know how each other felt, just like back then. |
She wanted everyone to know how each other felt, just like back then. |
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(Jintan…was hurt because of me.) |
(Jintan…was hurt because of me.) |
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− | Jinta’s leaving scene kept running |
+ | Jinta’s leaving scene kept running on her mind. |
− | Jinta said that he |
+ | Jinta said that he had a tough life after that, and that everyone had changed. |
Meiko wanted to deny this fact. She wanted the Super Peace Busters, including Jinta, to return to how they were before. |
Meiko wanted to deny this fact. She wanted the Super Peace Busters, including Jinta, to return to how they were before. |
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− | She knew, however, practically nothing |
+ | She knew, however, practically nothing after she passed away. As such, she wasn't fit to make decisions for others…she was aware of this. |
“Arghahahahaha!!” |
“Arghahahahaha!!” |
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Naruko and her high school friends strolled in front of the station. |
Naruko and her high school friends strolled in front of the station. |
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− | If they |
+ | If they didn’t have a special destination, McDonalds would have been a great choice. Or they could spend a bit more and go to a family restaurant to kill time. However, they chose to gather in front of the station and chat there. This was to flaunt their equipment to the pedestrians. |
− | She was wearing a |
+ | She was wearing a new-bought, laced bra, and had her fingernails coloured aqua-blue last night. |
“Ahaha…!” |
“Ahaha…!” |
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Since the autumn of grade 2 in middle school, she would wear super-short skirts. By the summer of grade 3 she even started to wear high-heeled shoes. |
Since the autumn of grade 2 in middle school, she would wear super-short skirts. By the summer of grade 3 she even started to wear high-heeled shoes. |
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− | Naruko was thinking about Jinta. She |
+ | Naruko was thinking about Jinta. She saw him today, but it had been a long time. The last time dated back to the opening ceremony of the school. |
(How does he think of me?) |
(How does he think of me?) |
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After Meiko’s incident, the Super Peace Busters drifted apart. Gradually, Jinta’s attitude changed. To sum it up in one word, it was the word ‘sullen’. |
After Meiko’s incident, the Super Peace Busters drifted apart. Gradually, Jinta’s attitude changed. To sum it up in one word, it was the word ‘sullen’. |
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− | There were quite a few children around here who |
+ | There were quite a few children around here who have to face the examination of promotion to high school. They entered the same high school, yet every time they meet in the corridor, Jinta would always turn away, pretending he didn’t see her. |
Naruko wanted to catch Jinta’s attention. |
Naruko wanted to catch Jinta’s attention. |
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“…like some straw.” |
“…like some straw.” |
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− | At that time, Naruko bought hair dye and tried |
+ | At that time, Naruko bought a hair dye and tried her first time in dying her hair, but she messed up the bleaching time and made her hair bleach too much colour. |
Nevertheless, it was enough to excite her. |
Nevertheless, it was enough to excite her. |
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“There aren't any good ones here. Let’s just play around a bit and get out of here.” |
“There aren't any good ones here. Let’s just play around a bit and get out of here.” |
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− | Naruko and her friends agreed to go to sing KTV with boys from other schools later. KTV partying, chatting in front of the station, or buying a one-hundred- |
+ | Naruko and her friends agreed to go to sing KTV with boys from other schools later. KTV partying, chatting in front of the station, or buying a one-hundred-yan snack if starving…going to Tokyo for shopping via the express at the holidays to buy exclusive things there—this was the vanity they were submerged in. |
They spent their time with a serious attitude after lessons were over in their rural school. |
They spent their time with a serious attitude after lessons were over in their rural school. |
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− | They left their beverage cans on the bench they |
+ | They left their beverage cans on the bench they sat and left. |
This was their everyday life. <!--日常--> |
This was their everyday life. <!--日常--> |
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Naruko imitated their behaviour. |
Naruko imitated their behaviour. |
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− | This was |
+ | This was uneasy for Naruko, who loved to clean things up. If she were to walk forward a few steps and throw it into the trash bin beside the vending machine…she really wanted to do this, but… |
“Naruko?” |
“Naruko?” |
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She left the can alone. She didn’t have time to care for the different thoughts in her mind. She only had to focus on what was happening before her: there was no need to care for abandoned things. |
She left the can alone. She didn’t have time to care for the different thoughts in her mind. She only had to focus on what was happening before her: there was no need to care for abandoned things. |
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− | Naruko began to |
+ | Naruko began to think when she had turned into such a person. |
At the same moment, Menma stared at the person Naruko had now become. |
At the same moment, Menma stared at the person Naruko had now become. |
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(Anaru littered…) |
(Anaru littered…) |
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− | Menma was a bit shocked, not because she wanted to reproach her for littering, but |
+ | Menma was a bit shocked, not because she wanted to reproach her for littering, but that the person Naruko once was would never do such an act. |
− | She did everything according to |
+ | She did everything according to rules and loved to clean things up. When Meiko was eating a sweet cone, she would even pick up the scraps that had fallen beside her. |
− | (Anaru looked |
+ | (Anaru looked she didn’t really smile…) |
Her pink chin painted with lipstick was a triangle, an expression of smiling. Even her eyes were bent…but that was not the smile Meiko knew. |
Her pink chin painted with lipstick was a triangle, an expression of smiling. Even her eyes were bent…but that was not the smile Meiko knew. |
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− | Having confirmed that Naruko and her friends had left, Meiko picked up the can and threw it into the trash bin. The can knocked on the bottom of the bin and |
+ | Having confirmed that Naruko and her friends had left, Meiko picked up the can and threw it into the trash bin. The can knocked on the bottom of the bin and caused a clear crackling sound. |
The leaves of the persimmon tree she was familiar with rustled in the night wind. |
The leaves of the persimmon tree she was familiar with rustled in the night wind. |
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Meiko had gone to the family that raised her. |
Meiko had gone to the family that raised her. |
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− | She had a feeling that there wasn’t an urgent need to come back here. Meiko |
+ | She had a feeling that there wasn’t an urgent need to come back here. Meiko who had a vague memory didn’t have a strong sense of belonging to this place. This place occurred to her a place she had been just yesterday. This feeling scared her for no reason. |
(What should I do...) |
(What should I do...) |
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Should she enter? She was scared to enter, but she didn’t know why. |
Should she enter? She was scared to enter, but she didn’t know why. |
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− | Her thighs tensed, and her thumb curled and opened unconsciously. Suddenly, a rich, |
+ | Her thighs tensed, and her thumb curled up and opened up unconsciously. Suddenly, a rich, attracting<!-- an adjective which means tease one’s heart, make one’s heart itchy because of it or engrossing--> scent flew into Meiko’s nose… |
“Curry!” |
“Curry!” |
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Meiko blurted. |
Meiko blurted. |
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− | It was Meiko’s favourite curry. Mashing the sweet corn grains with a mixer into a mush, and then putting a lot of other things into it makes honey-sweet curry. Her brother Satoshi liked it a lot, and her dad would also eat it with Worcestershire sauce<ref> |
+ | It was Meiko’s favourite curry. Mashing the sweet corn grains with a mixer into a mush, and then putting a lot of other things into it makes honey-sweet curry. Her brother Satoshi liked it a lot, and her dad would also eat it with Worcestershire sauce<ref>http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sauce</ref>… |
When she thought of this, her confused perception of time was eased, and she regained some sense of belonging. |
When she thought of this, her confused perception of time was eased, and she regained some sense of belonging. |
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“Good evening…” |
“Good evening…” |
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− | She pushed it a bit, creating a little gap for her to spy inside and have a look at the living room. |
+ | She pushed it a bit, creating a little gap, for her to spy inside and have a look at the living room. |
“!!” |
“!!” |
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Everything was different. It was not the Honma Home she had in her memory. |
Everything was different. It was not the Honma Home she had in her memory. |
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− | They didn’t talk: dad was reading the newspaper; Satoshi was playing the DS. On the table were dishes of curry surplus…Back then, mum would say in a lively voice, “The dishes |
+ | They didn’t talk: dad was reading the newspaper; Satoshi was playing the DS. On the table were dishes of curry surplus…Back then, mum would say in a lively voice, “The dishes had to be put to the sink!”. |
− | But now |
+ | But now mum was placing a small bowl of curry into a shrine that was installed here after Meiko's death. |
− | Then |
+ | Then she rang the bell and clasped her hands, maintaining an upright sitting position, her thin socks pressingly softly against the skin of her feet. |
“…” |
“…” |
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“Because your sister is a bit muddle-headed.” |
“Because your sister is a bit muddle-headed.” |
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− | It was as if the smallest and lightest ripple induced by the wind crossed her face. She seemed |
+ | It was as if the smallest and lightest ripple induced by the wind crossed her face. She seemed she had held back her tears, yet she seemed nevertheless crying… |
“So, your sister may not even be aware she has passed away.” |
“So, your sister may not even be aware she has passed away.” |
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“Hey. It wasn’t me!” |
“Hey. It wasn’t me!” |
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− | Satori was falsely accused by her father again. However, Meiko wasn’t even feeling the urge to protect |
+ | Satori was falsely accused by her father again. However, Meiko wasn’t even feeling the urge to protect her. She just murmured absent-mindedly. |
“I know it…” <!-- adorable tone--> |
“I know it…” <!-- adorable tone--> |
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She knew little about this present world, but this was home. This home wasn’t the Honma Home she once knew, and thus she was more alarmed of this unpalatable truth. |
She knew little about this present world, but this was home. This home wasn’t the Honma Home she once knew, and thus she was more alarmed of this unpalatable truth. |
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− | “Menma knows that she |
+ | “Menma knows that she have already passed away.” <!-- adorable tone x 2--> |
When she got outside, the warm night wind blew against her. |
When she got outside, the warm night wind blew against her. |