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He looked up slightly into the hall. No, rather, much deeper inwards, he is looking at '''something''' that is squirming.
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He look up slightly into the hall. No, rather, much deeper inwards, he is looking at '''something''' that is squirming.
   
 
Something he could not see clearly.
 
Something he could not see clearly.
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“...... ha, haha, hahaha. What’s that. You wish to devour me? With your level of power, you wish to devour ME?”
 
“...... ha, haha, hahaha. What’s that. You wish to devour me? With your level of power, you wish to devour ME?”
   
As he says that, a different face appears at the shoulder of that monster. It is the face of a bird, and it replies to Lucile’s mocking query.
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As he says that, a different face appears at the shoulder of that monster. It is the face of a bird, and it replies Lucile’s mocking query.
   
 
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A high-pitched, an incomprehensibly high-pitched, ear-splitting woman's voice reverberated across the room. No, the voice probably did not reverberate across the room in reality. But, rather, the voice appears to be reverberating across the world, being delivered directly to their heads.
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A high-pitched, an incomprehensibly high-pitched, ear-splitting womans voice reverberated across the room. No, the voice probably did not reverberate across the room in reality. But, rather, the voice appears to be reverberating across the world, being delivered directly to their heads.
   
 
Sion turns to Lucile
 
Sion turns to Lucile
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The '''Goddess''' had embedded a power that would erode the will and destroy the minds of her enemies, within those words.
 
The '''Goddess''' had embedded a power that would erode the will and destroy the minds of her enemies, within those words.
   
In the past, perhaps Sion's sanity would have been destroyed, leaving him fearful and raving in madness.
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In the past, perhaps Sions sanity would have been destroyed, leaving him fearful and raving in madness.
   
 
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And then everything ended.
 
And then everything ended.
   
Anything and everything about the world up till then ended.
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Anything and everything about the world up till now ended.
   
   
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And a story about goddesses destroying the world.
 
And a story about goddesses destroying the world.
   
Every one of them had some degree of authenticity, but simultaneously, every one of them was also inserted with convenient lies.
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Every one of them had some degree of authenticity, but simultaneously, every one of them was also inserted with convinient lies.
   
 
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Even though it is not known who, nor for whose sake, created those stories. Or which strands of the story is real. Or who are the true protagonists of the story..... However, each and every one of them agree to one common point.....
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Even though it is not known who, nor for whose sake, created those stories. Or which strands of the story is real. Or who are the true protaganist of the story..... However, each and every one of them agree to one common point.....
   
 
Destruction of the world.
 
Destruction of the world.
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“Jade Emperor’s tongue.”
 
“Jade Emperor’s tongue.”
   
He muttered raising his right hand. However, nothing came forth from that right hand; nothing could be seen.
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He mutteres raising his right hand. However, nothing came forth from that right hand; nothing could be seen.
   
 
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Her words trailed off.
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Her words trail off.
   
 
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Ferris looks worry less as she digs into her dangos continuously without a care in the world.
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Ferris looks worryless as she dig into her dangos continuously without a care in the world.
   
 
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Ryner makes a sidelong glance at Kiefer who is being playfully tossed around by the troublesome sisters. He fights against his sleepiness, trying to think.
 
Ryner makes a sidelong glance at Kiefer who is being playfully tossed around by the troublesome sisters. He fights against his sleepiness, trying to think.
   
So to speak, the fact is, there is really no time to slack around like this. Yet, He and Kiefer listen to Ferris's story while eating dango.
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So to speak, the fact is, there is really no time to slack around like this. Yet, He and Kiefer listens to Ferris's story while eating dango.
   
 
''Firstly, with regards to Kiefer, ahh ~, what’s that again. Erm, the reason why she came back......''
 
''Firstly, with regards to Kiefer, ahh ~, what’s that again. Erm, the reason why she came back......''
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The path that leads to making Sion, the man committed to becoming the supreme ruler of the southern continent, his enemy.
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The path that leads to making Sion, the man commited to become the supreme ruler of the southern continent, his enemy.
   
 
Ryner remembers that day, when Sion wept while pulling out a knife despite...
 
Ryner remembers that day, when Sion wept while pulling out a knife despite...
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And with that, he killed King Gread Nelphi. With this, Roland could no longer achieve the outcome of ending the war with a minimum loss of lives. However, the stupidity of the Prince Starnel did not end here. Starnel then ordered ten thousand soldiers to repel Roland’s army that was advancing northwards, and on top of that, he took command of the remaining troops, and started massacring and looting the populace from within Nelpha. After looting, he intents to escape to some place.
 
And with that, he killed King Gread Nelphi. With this, Roland could no longer achieve the outcome of ending the war with a minimum loss of lives. However, the stupidity of the Prince Starnel did not end here. Starnel then ordered ten thousand soldiers to repel Roland’s army that was advancing northwards, and on top of that, he took command of the remaining troops, and started massacring and looting the populace from within Nelpha. After looting, he intents to escape to some place.
   
That’s why it is the worst possible scenario. With this, Nelpha no longer has anyone who could legitimately surrender to Roland.
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That’s why it is the worst possible scenario. With this, Nelpha no longer has anyone who could legitimately surrenders to Roland.
   
 
In other words, in order to put on their original show to the other countries, Roland would have to decimate the ten thousand abandoned troops, and furthermore, before reaching Starnel’s personally led army, they had to completely raze the streets they would pass through, and finally finish off the remaining troops which Starnel, who had no intention of surrendering, had taken over in a bid to save himself. With this however, even more losses would be sustained than if they were to just fight a head-on war.
 
In other words, in order to put on their original show to the other countries, Roland would have to decimate the ten thousand abandoned troops, and furthermore, before reaching Starnel’s personally led army, they had to completely raze the streets they would pass through, and finally finish off the remaining troops which Starnel, who had no intention of surrendering, had taken over in a bid to save himself. With this however, even more losses would be sustained than if they were to just fight a head-on war.
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But, at this juncture, in this worst case scenario, a ray of hope appears and that is Toale.
 
But, at this juncture, in this worst case scenario, a ray of hope appears and that is Toale.
   
The son of the King Gread Nelphi and a commoner mistress, Toale had helped the bewildered Ryner and Ferris by giving them access to the library and putting them up at his house. The kind, good kid loved by the people of Nelpha. Toale Nelphi had taken command of the ten thousand abandoned troops and stopped them from engaging Roland. That is the best of the best news to Roland.
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The son of the stupid Prince Starnel and his commoner mistress, Toale had helped the bewildered Ryner and Ferris by giving them access to the library and putting them up at his house. The kind, good kid loved by the people of Nelpha. Toale Nelphi had taken command of the ten thousand abandoned troops and stopped them from engaging Roland. That is the best of the best news to Roland.
   
 
With this turn of events, the possibility of Roland achieving its original goal of minimizing the loss of lives, appears once more.
 
With this turn of events, the possibility of Roland achieving its original goal of minimizing the loss of lives, appears once more.
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Well, that being the case, in the current Imperial Nelpha, Toale Nelphi’s great battle is just beginning. That should really be an unreasonably great battle. Toale’s ten thousand troops will clash with the sixty-eight thousand troops led by stupid Prince Starnel.
 
Well, that being the case, in the current Imperial Nelpha, Toale Nelphi’s great battle is just beginning. That should really be an unreasonably great battle. Toale’s ten thousand troops will clash with the sixty-eight thousand troops led by stupid Prince Starnel.
   
And even if Starnel’s forces, which were about seven times larger, were miraculously defeated and the throne was taken, next Toale would immediately surrender to Roland.
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And even if Starnel’s forces, which were about seven times larger, were miraculously defeated and the throne was taken, Toale would immediately surrender to Roland next.
   
 
Then, with a smiling face, he would be executed.
 
Then, with a smiling face, he would be executed.
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Ryner uttered without thinking, forgetting what he originally wanted to say because right before his eyes...
 
Ryner uttered without thinking, forgetting what he originally wanted to say because right before his eyes...
   
Ferris continues on and went to stand on top of the table and jumped. She jumped towards him. She lifted her foot backwards. And adopted a kicking stance, aiming at Ryner’s face.
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Ferris continues on and went to stand on top of the table and jumped. She jumped towards here. She lifted her foot backwards. And adopted a kicking stance, aiming at Ryner’s face.
   
 
“Wait, wait, wait, wait a minute, erm, it’s my bad, you don’t need to go to such an extent really......”
 
“Wait, wait, wait, wait a minute, erm, it’s my bad, you don’t need to go to such an extent really......”
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With her face that was on the verge of crying, but yet, with a glowering face, she held back her tears and looked intently towards here, and nodded sharply.
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Wit her face that was on the verge of crying, but yet, with a glowering face, she held back her tears and looked intently towards here, and nodded sharply.
   
 
Ryner, holding his gaze on her,
 
Ryner, holding his gaze on her,
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Even though it was already late into the night, bright reddish lights were shining from the town-scape. But there was no longer anyone there. Earlier at dusk, the Roland army led by Claugh had arrived here, destroying and setting everything on fire, razing all in sight.
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Even though it was already late into the night, bright reddish lights were shining from the townscape. But there was no longer anyone there. Earlier at dusk, the Roland army led by Claugh had arrived here, destroying and setting everything on fire, razing all in sight.
   
 
Only ruins lay there.
 
Only ruins lay there.
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Right now, he was thinking about how he could continue to show off Roland’s brutality to the other countries without killing the populace and wrapping things up, what should he do? That was what he was pondering.
 
Right now, he was thinking about how he could continue to show off Roland’s brutality to the other countries without killing the populace and wrapping things up, what should he do? That was what he was pondering.
   
In order to do that, the most important thing now was to get in touch with Toale Nelphi, the son of Gread Nelphi.
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In order to do that, the most important thing now was to get in touch with Toale Nelphi, the son of that stupid Prince Starnel who was running amok in the center of Nelpha.
   
 
But his location was unknown. Despite the fact that Toale was leading ten thousand troops, his intelligence could not yet get hold of where he was.
 
But his location was unknown. Despite the fact that Toale was leading ten thousand troops, his intelligence could not yet get hold of where he was.
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''Die. Die. Die. I will let you taste my hatred for killing my comrades!''
 
''Die. Die. Die. I will let you taste my hatred for killing my comrades!''
   
And Claugh had always answered them. He killed every one of them. Those were his orders, and Claugh had thought that was necessary as well. <!-- it’s confusing and a little hard to make a sense out of it, but that’s exactly what was written. Try as I might, I can’t infer much. Claugh thought replying them was necessary or killing them was necessary? Or the orders to answer them? and they came from Sion? and Claugh thought they were necessary as well? わけわからないよ! -->
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And Claugh had always answered them. He killed every one of them. Those were his orders, and Claugh had thought that was necessary as well. <!-- it’s confusing and a little hard to make a sense out of it, but that’s exactly what was written. Try as I might, I can’t infer much. Claugh thought replying them was necessary or killing them was necessary? Or the orders to answer them? and they came from Sion? and claugh thought they were necessary as well? わけわからないよ! -->
   
 
That’s why he was not surprised.
 
That’s why he was not surprised.

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