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As soon as Shirley left Masaki, he started feeling a little lonely.
 
As soon as Shirley left Masaki, he started feeling a little lonely.
   
However, he was a student who transferred half-way through the school year, so it was natural for him to feel that way.
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However, he was originally a student who transferred half-way through the year, so it was natural for him to feel that way.
   
 
He silently walked up the stairs.
 
He silently walked up the stairs.
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He heard a loud voice.
 
He heard a loud voice.
   
"Hey, look! Ha...ha...did you see it?! That's my power. What do you think now...I can still do it right!? It's useful, isn't it!! So...so...I'll do more!"
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"Hey, look! Ha...ha...did you see?! That's my power. What do you think now...I can still do it right!? It's useful, isn't it!! So...so...I'll do more!"
   
 
It was a shrill, urgent voice.
 
It was a shrill, urgent voice.
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Masaki heard what they were saying from the corridor.
 
Masaki heard what they were saying from the corridor.
   
He didn't want to get anywhere near trouble on his first day at this school––but he thought that it was a bit shameful for him not to see what was happening, even though there might be trouble taking place.
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He didn't want to get anywhere near trouble on the first day transferring to the school––but he thought that it was a bit shameful for him not to see what was happening even though trouble might be taking place.
   
If things got violent he couldn't just leave it alone, and even if there wasn't a problem, it would only be a little detour. He should still have some time to spare.
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If things got violent he couldn't leave it alone and even if there wasn't a problem it would only be a little detour. He should still have some time to spare.
   
 
Masaki left the staircase and went into the corridor.
 
Masaki left the staircase and went into the corridor.
   
His footsteps resounded within the silent corridor.
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His footsteps resounded in the silent corridor.
   
Since he was below the 30th floor, where there were only specials classrooms, and it was the morning, it was quite quiet.
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Since he was on the floor where there were only specials classrooms, below the 30th and it was the morning, it was quiet.
   
 
Someone jumped out from the open door of a classroom.
 
Someone jumped out from the open door of a classroom.
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"Shit! Shit! Ah...I get it now! I'll take care of it right away! So, I'll! It's fine, since it's a promise right?"
 
"Shit! Shit! Ah...I get it now! I'll take care of it right away! So, I'll! It's fine, since it's a promise right?"
   
He called out to inside the classroom. Because of that, Masaki assumed someone must be inside there.
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He called out to inside the classroom. As Masaki thought, someone must be there.
   
 
The man glared at Masaki.
 
The man glared at Masaki.
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"...Erm...What's going on?"
 
"...Erm...What's going on?"
   
Masaki presumed that there was something unusual going on, so he called out this while standing a ways back.
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Masaki presumed that there was something unusual going on so he called out from a place well away from him.
   
 
The other person was about ten steps away.
 
The other person was about ten steps away.
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"Huh?"
 
"Huh?"
   
"And, for now...you too..."
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"And, from now...you too..."
   
 
"Wh, what are you saying?"
 
"Wh, what are you saying?"
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"What's going on...?"
 
"What's going on...?"
   
"Cut! Slice up! I'll...waaah! Slice and tear him up! <<Cutting noise>>!
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"Cut! Sliced up! I'll...waaah! Slice and tear him up! <<Noise Cut>>!
   
 
At the same time as the twitching man's scream, a whooshing sound started. It was the sound of wind.
 
At the same time as the twitching man's scream, a whooshing sound started. It was the sound of wind.
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There was only a white afterglow drawn in the shape of a circle.
 
There was only a white afterglow drawn in the shape of a circle.
   
It was about one meter wide.
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It was about one metre wide.
   
All of the windows, walls and doors in the surroundings area broke and crumbled down to the ground.
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All of the windows, walls and doors in the surroundings broke and crumbled down.
   
 
He took a peek around the corner and saw that it looked as if there were completely different objects from the beginning; the concrete walls and metal door lay scattered on the floor.
 
He took a peek around the corner and saw that it looked as if there were completely different objects from the beginning; the concrete walls and metal door lay scattered on the floor.
   
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<!-- He took a peek around the corner and it looked as if it were a completely different room, compared with what it was just moments ago; the concrete walls and metal door lay scattered on the floor. -->
 
 
It was a paranormal phenomenon.
 
It was a paranormal phenomenon.
   
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It was a dangerous place.
 
It was a dangerous place.
   
Now that he had closed the distance, he was close enough for him to confront him, but did he have a knife?––Is what Masaki thought.
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Now that he had shortened the distance, he was close enough for him to confront him, but did he have a knife?––Is what Masaki thought.
   
 
There's no way that he could swing an invisible knife and cut everything up in the area! It was surprising to find the doors and walls completely destroyed.
 
There's no way that he could swing an invisible knife and cut everything up in the area! It was surprising to find the doors and walls completely destroyed.
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That guy is dangerous!
 
That guy is dangerous!
   
He could be killed if he's careless.
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He might be killed if he's careless.
   
 
He didn't understand why but the moment he shouted, the invisible knife dropped.
 
He didn't understand why but the moment he shouted, the invisible knife dropped.
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Masaki didn't understand what he was saying.
 
Masaki didn't understand what he was saying.
   
As for what he could guess from his speech and behavior. He thought that the man seemed to be acting like this in response to someone's incentive. Maybe that person was in the other classroom.
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As for what he could guess from his speech and behaviour. He thought that he seemed to be acting like that in response to someone's incentive. Maybe that person was in the other classroom.
   
Even though the man had lost all sense of reason, his judgment seemed to be fine. He slowly came closer to drive him into a corner.
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Even though the man had lost all sense of reason, his judgement seemed to be fine. He slowly came closer to drive him into a corner.
   
 
"Cut...cut...cut...I'll cut...this guy too...one person...two people...anyone..."
 
"Cut...cut...cut...I'll cut...this guy too...one person...two people...anyone..."
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The ceiling collapsed.
 
The ceiling collapsed.
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