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"Parents these days don't go to college entrance ceremonies!" "That may be so at <span class="plainlinks">[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/University_of_Tokyo Toudai]</span>, but at this place that's overdoing it. Everybody's going to think I'm some sort of mama's boy!" "Absolutely ridiculous!" "Parents don't normally come to college entrance ceremonies!" After Banri's complaints, his mother had returned home the day before. "Well, I've brought this just in case...", she said, then put a companion ticket for the admission ceremony back into her wallet, like it was something precious. He hadn't been all that seriously wishing for her not to come. But then he whined absurdly like a little kid, "I don't want you to come", in what he thought was a normal parent-child relationship.
 
"Parents these days don't go to college entrance ceremonies!" "That may be so at <span class="plainlinks">[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/University_of_Tokyo Toudai]</span>, but at this place that's overdoing it. Everybody's going to think I'm some sort of mama's boy!" "Absolutely ridiculous!" "Parents don't normally come to college entrance ceremonies!" After Banri's complaints, his mother had returned home the day before. "Well, I've brought this just in case...", she said, then put a companion ticket for the admission ceremony back into her wallet, like it was something precious. He hadn't been all that seriously wishing for her not to come. But then he whined absurdly like a little kid, "I don't want you to come", in what he thought was a normal parent-child relationship.
   
And now, having gotten here, already discouraged, but above all, feeling guilty of being disloyal to his parents. '''(<!-- This sentence needs to be rephrased entirely ~ MatrixM -->)''' It weighed heavily on him. He hadn't even waved. His mother's back had gone through the <span class="plainlinks">[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yaesu Yaesu]</span> north entrance ticket gate, disappearing as he saw her off.
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And now, having gotten here, already discouraged, but above all, feeling guilty of being disloyal to his parents. '''(!<!-- This sentence needs to be rephrased entirely ~ MatrixM -->)''' It weighed heavily on him. He hadn't even waved. His mother's back had gone through the <span class="plainlinks">[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yaesu Yaesu]</span> north entrance ticket gate, disappearing as he saw her off.
   
 
Without realizing it, he sighed pathetically as he stood still in the entrance, seeing the hair of people descending the steps, laughing together.
 
Without realizing it, he sighed pathetically as he stood still in the entrance, seeing the hair of people descending the steps, laughing together.
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Do you really want to eat some ice cream right now? The opening ceremony has just ended, and you want ice cream from a convenience store in the middle of the way to the orientation, when the time is limited? He gazed the back of the left guy's head. "Forget it." You on the left, say it! Just what he was going to do while those guys ate ice cream, he had no idea.
 
Do you really want to eat some ice cream right now? The opening ceremony has just ended, and you want ice cream from a convenience store in the middle of the way to the orientation, when the time is limited? He gazed the back of the left guy's head. "Forget it." You on the left, say it! Just what he was going to do while those guys ate ice cream, he had no idea.
   
"In that case I'll have some too. There ought to be a<span class="plainlinks"> [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/7-Eleven 7-Eleven]</span> around here somewhere."
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"In that case I'll have some too. There ought to be a<span class="plainlinks"> [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/7-Eleven 7-11]</span> around here somewhere."
   
"Yeah, there was a 7-Eleven. But where was it, I wonder?"
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"Yeah, there was a 7-11. But where was it, I wonder?"
   
They didn't hear Banri's silent message. Leaving the slow stream of passersby, the two turned down a narrow side street. This was the time when he should have bidden farewell to them, sticking to the other freshmen. Banri should have done that, but he suffered a lapse in judgment. Going along straight ahead, it wasn't easy to distinguish freshmen from businessmen right away, so without thinking he had gone along with the two down the side street. "Ah ah ah." Ignoring Banri, whose conscience tried quietly to hurry him, those two were saying things like, "Hmm, 7-Eleven, 7-Eleven. Over there? Over here?" Those two stayed cool and collected as they went along unfamiliar streets. Perhaps they wanted to get rid of him... among such doubts, he turned left and right, straying from the right way,
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They didn't hear Banri's silent message. Leaving the slow stream of passersby, the two turned down a narrow side street. This was the time when he should have bidden farewell to them, sticking to the other freshmen. Banri should have done that, but he suffered a lapse in judgment. Going along straight ahead, it wasn't easy to distinguish freshmen from businessmen right away, so without thinking he had gone along with the two down the side street. "Ah ah ah." Ignoring Banri, whose conscience tried quietly to hurry him, those two were saying things like, "Hmm, 7-11, 7-11. Over there? Over here?" Those two stayed cool and collected as they went along unfamiliar streets. Perhaps they wanted to get rid of him... among such doubts, he turned left and right, straying from the right way,
   
"Ah, it wasn't a 7-Eleven after all."
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"Ah, it wasn't a 7-11 after all."
   
 
They were in front of a <span class="plainlinks">[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/FamilyMart Family Mart]</span>.
 
They were in front of a <span class="plainlinks">[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/FamilyMart Family Mart]</span>.

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