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"Well, not that I had anyone to talk to either, since ''Yana''-ssan wasn’t coming", Banri went on, and this morning’s scene entered his mind.
 
"Well, not that I had anyone to talk to either, since ''Yana''-ssan wasn’t coming", Banri went on, and this morning’s scene entered his mind.
   
Amongst the other students, dressed in their colorless jeans and hoodies, Kouko, wearing what must have been brand-name, an order or two of magnitude more expensive than the others, a bright pink, one piece silk dress, she really stood out from the crowd.
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Amongst the other students, dressed in their colorless jeans and hoodies, Kouko, wearing what must have been brand-name, an order or two of magnitude more expensive than the other's, a bright pink, one piece silk dress, she really stood out from the crowd.
   
 
Dark brown hair spilling over her shoulders, in her ears were diamonds set in flower-shaped earrings. Her arms so white, her wrists so delicate, her neck so smooth it was scary, she could hardly be more different from the rest of the class.
 
Dark brown hair spilling over her shoulders, in her ears were diamonds set in flower-shaped earrings. Her arms so white, her wrists so delicate, her neck so smooth it was scary, she could hardly be more different from the rest of the class.
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Besides, seen from the side, she appeared to be bored, listening to the lecture. Her profile was pretty without doubt. Even Banri as a guy understood, that she was spending her time carefully doing her makeup. It was not only Banri watching her profile fixedly for an hour and a half for sure. But everybody in the classroom --- both boys and girls, even the professor, was looking at the rose-scented Kouko, he thought.
 
Besides, seen from the side, she appeared to be bored, listening to the lecture. Her profile was pretty without doubt. Even Banri as a guy understood, that she was spending her time carefully doing her makeup. It was not only Banri watching her profile fixedly for an hour and a half for sure. But everybody in the classroom --- both boys and girls, even the professor, was looking at the rose-scented Kouko, he thought.
   
There was not a single person, Banri included, to call out to her.
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The was not a single person, Banri included, to call out to her.
   
 
"As I saw Kaga-san like that, somehow I..."
 
"As I saw Kaga-san like that, somehow I..."

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