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And yet.
 
And yet.
   
What the heck, really.
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What was heck, really.
 
As if he wanted to pull his bangs from his scalp, he ripped the coldpack from his forehead. It had long since returned to room temperature.
 
As if he wanted to pull his bangs from his scalp, he ripped the coldpack from his forehead. It had long since returned to room temperature.
   
 
Even though he felt like this, even though he was truly here, even though he wanted to return, and had said that he wanted to, it wasn't "this place" . . . not at all.
 
Even though he felt like this, even though he was truly here, even though he wanted to return, and had said that he wanted to, it wasn't "this place" . . . not at all.
   
He gasped in amazement. It was as if that bit of Kouko-flame he had just gulped down had burned his lungs. Hot and painfully, each cell was being torn apart.
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He gasped in amazement. It was as of that bit of Kouko-flame he had just gulped down had burned his lungs. Hot and painfully, each cell was being torn apart.
   
 
There was nothing he could do about it. No matter how hard he tried. Struggling, squirming, he just couldn't sort out his feelings. It didn't even seem like he could sort them out in time order. How had he wound up like this? And who the heck was to blame?
 
There was nothing he could do about it. No matter how hard he tried. Struggling, squirming, he just couldn't sort out his feelings. It didn't even seem like he could sort them out in time order. How had he wound up like this? And who the heck was to blame?
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"Nope."
 
"Nope."
   
"It was too. ...Even though I want to be a ‘good girl'. I can't do anything right. I'm a complete piece of junk."
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"It was too. ...Even though I want to be a ‘good girl.' I can't do anything right. I'm a complete piece of junk."
   
 
"That's not at all true!"
 
"That's not at all true!"

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