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== Chapter 2 - Leitmeritz ==
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=== Leitmeritz ===
 
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He was having a bad dream.
 
He was having a bad dream.
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The other followers expressed their approval one after another. Tigre grit his teeth in anger.
 
The other followers expressed their approval one after another. Tigre grit his teeth in anger.
   
In the Kingdom of Brune, their complaints were acceptable.
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In the Brune Kingdom, their complaints were acceptable.
   
 
''“The bow is the weapon of a coward who does not have the courage to expose his body before a naked blade.”''
 
''“The bow is the weapon of a coward who does not have the courage to expose his body before a naked blade.”''
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The aristocrat didn't look resentful. He was simply grumbling in dissatisfaction.
 
The aristocrat didn't look resentful. He was simply grumbling in dissatisfaction.
   
Duke Ganelon was one of the most influential nobles of the Kingdom of Brune, on par with Thenardier. There were many powerful aristocrats amongst his relatives as well. His power, too, was something not even the king could ignore.
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Duke Ganelon was one of the most influential nobles of Brune Kingdom, on par with Thenardier. There were many powerful aristocrats amongst his relatives as well. His power, too, was something not even the king could ignore.
   
 
When it came to territory, Brune nobles were allowed to govern pieces of land, but for certain privileges, such as setting taxes, the permission of the king was necessary.
 
When it came to territory, Brune nobles were allowed to govern pieces of land, but for certain privileges, such as setting taxes, the permission of the king was necessary.
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“I am a poor noble. There is no point comparing my small mansion to this one," Tigre replied without a hint of shame. He continued to look about, admiring the ceiling and floor.
 
“I am a poor noble. There is no point comparing my small mansion to this one," Tigre replied without a hint of shame. He continued to look about, admiring the ceiling and floor.
   
Until now, Tigre had never left the Kingdom of Brune. Now, he was in the province's imperial palace. The mosaics which decorated the floor were new to him.
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Until now, Tigre had never left Brune Kingdom. Now, he was in the province's imperial palace. The mosaics which decorated the floor were new to him.
   
 
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Tigre had heard stories of prisoners being mocked and assaulted or killed by torture in a convoy. Some died without having a single meal. However, on their way back from Dinant, Tigre had never been abused. He had even been given proper food. Though it may have been because he was Elen's captive, Limalisha -- that is, Lim -- had been the one who properly took care of him.
 
Tigre had heard stories of prisoners being mocked and assaulted or killed by torture in a convoy. Some died without having a single meal. However, on their way back from Dinant, Tigre had never been abused. He had even been given proper food. Though it may have been because he was Elen's captive, Limalisha -- that is, Lim -- had been the one who properly took care of him.
   
Lim did not respond to Tigre. She did what she had to. She hid her anger as she was being thanked by Tigre by ignoring him and facing Elen.
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Lim did not respond to Tigre. What had to be done was done. She hid her anger as she was being thanked by Tigre by ignoring him and facing Elen.
   
 
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''I'm worried about the soldiers' safety as well. I'm certain my people are worried.''
 
''I'm worried about the soldiers' safety as well. I'm certain my people are worried.''
   
''And above all else, I promised Titta I would return.''
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''Above all, I promised Titta I would return.''
   
 
''I want to respond to their wishes.''
 
''I want to respond to their wishes.''
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“What a terrible bow...”
 
“What a terrible bow...”
   
The material was hardly suitable for a bow, and the condition of the grip was poor as well. The stringing, too, was badly done. There was also some warping. It was clear what their intention was.
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The material was hardly suitable for a bow, and the condition of the grip was poor. The stringing, too, was badly done. There was also some warping. It was clear what their intention was.
   
 
Elen was looking at him from a distance, and, like a child, was filled with expectation.
 
Elen was looking at him from a distance, and, like a child, was filled with expectation.
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''--- It can't be an issue of the maker's ability... in the first place, there is no such profession as a bow craftsman.''
 
''--- It can't be an issue of the maker's ability... in the first place, there is no such profession as a bow craftsman.''
   
Tigre's bow was made by his father when he was small. The materials were chosen according to the knowledge and technology of other countries, such as Zchted.
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Tigre's bow was made by his father when he was small. The choice of materials, as well, was made according to the knowledge and technology of other countries, such as Zhcted.
   
The accuracy of his arrow was not solely due to Tigre's skill, but the quality of the tool as well.
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The accuracy of his arrow was not due to just Tigre's skill but the quality of the tool as well.
   
While pretending to check the condition of the bow, he glanced peripherally at the soldier who passed him the bow, and saw him and several other soldiers grinning.
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While pretending to check the condition of the bow, he looked at the soldier who passed him the bow in his peripheral vision and saw several soldiers grinning.
   
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“Such a petty trick.”
Angered, a murmur leaked from Tigre's mouth.
 
   
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Because he was angry, a murmur leaked from his mouth.
“Such a petty trick," he said.
 
   
 
“What is it?”
 
“What is it?”
   
Lim was standing nearby, looking at him dubiously. Apparently, she had not heard his words. Still, complaining about the quality of the bow as a prisoner of war was cumbersome.
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Lim, who stood nearby, looked at him dubiously. Apparently she had not heard his words. Still, complaining about the quality of the bow as a prisoner of war was cumbersome.
   
“I wish to confirm something," said Tigre. "It is not necessary for me to hit the target with all four arrows; only one, correct?”
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“I wish to confirm something. It is not necessary for me to hit the target with all four arrows, only one, correct?”
   
“That is a rather timid remark for a person who killed my horse with a single arrow.”
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“That is a rather timid remark for a person who killed my horse with one arrow.”
   
Though she thought Tigre was being sarcastic, she remained expressionless. There was no sign of malice. It seemed that she had not yet noticed that the bow was inferior.
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Though she thought Tigre was being sarcastic, she remained expressionless. There was no sign of malice. It seems she had not noticed the bow was inferior.
   
 
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“If your physical condition is poor, I can tell Eleanora-sama to do this another day.”
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“If your physical condition is poor, I can tell Eleanora-sama to hold this another day.”
   
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“No, I will do it.”
“No, I will do it," Tigre answered in a strong tone. He set the bow in his hand. “However, please allow me to hit the target with only one arrow. I am not as confident with an unfamiliar bow.”
 
   
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He answered with a strong tone. Tigre set the bow in his hand.
Lim bowed in assent and walked over to Elen. After speaking a few words, Elen looked at him without any dissatisfaction, as though she were saying, "Please begin."
 
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“However, please allow me to hit the target with only one arrow. I am not as confident with an unfamiliar bow.”
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Lim bowed in assent and immediately walked to Elen. After speaking a few words, Elen looked at him devoid of any dissatisfaction, as if saying “Please begin.”
   
 
Tigre nocked the first arrow and released it.
 
Tigre nocked the first arrow and released it.
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The hum of the arrow sounded as it flew in an arc. It hit the castle wall, far from the target.
 
The hum of the arrow sounded as it flew in an arc. It hit the castle wall, far from the target.
   
The soldiers laughed loudly. Some shook their shoulders; others looked at him with pity or contempt. Many eyes were piercing Tigre.
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The soldiers laughed loudly. Some shook their shoulders, others looked at him with pity or contempt. Many gazes pierced Tigre.
   
“Are you doing this seriously?” Lim said irritably. She looked at Elen.
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“Are you doing this seriously?”
   
 
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Lim, speaking in an irritated voice, looked to Elen.
Elen appeared troubled as she watched Tigre, like a student who had been scolded by a teacher, though she was trying to properly solve the problem.
 
   
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Elen looked troubled. Though she was trying to properly solve a problem, she looked at him as if she were scolded by a teacher.
“I'll do it,” Tigre replied and nocked the third arrow.
 
   
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“I'll do it.”
“Hey, are you going to keep going? You're really willing to keep making a spectacle of yourself?”
 
   
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Tigre eagerly replied and nocked the third arrow.
“Maybe you'd like a replacement. Even though you can reach the target, you can't even shoot straight.”
 
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“Hey, are you still continuing? You're really willing to make a spectacle of yourself, still?”
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“Maybe you'd like a replacement. Though he can reach the target, he can't even shoot straight.”
   
 
“Vanadis-sama, did you really make a man like this your captive?”
 
“Vanadis-sama, did you really make a man like this your captive?”
   
“This is quite a splendid show. I wonder if something new will be shown tomorrow?
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“This is quite a splendid show. I wonder if something new will be shown tomorrow.
   
Although the soldiers deliberately spoke ill of him, Tigre was not bothered by it. He was accustomed to such abuse. He had been harassed much worse than this many times before.
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Though the soldiers deliberately spoke ill, Tigre was not bothered.
   
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He was accustomed to such abuse. He had received mental abuse incomparable to this many times.
Tigre took a deep breath, and looked up at the sky for a change of pace, moving his neck around.
 
   
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He took a deep breath and looked at the sky for a change of pace, moving his neck around.
That was when he saw a black shadow.
 
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In Tigre's vision was a black shadow.
   
 
''--- What is that?''
 
''--- What is that?''
   
His neck stopped moving and he looked more closely.
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His neck stopped moving and he looked closely.
   
 
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In an instant, he understood the identity of the shadow. Chills ran down Tigre's spine as he screamed at Elen:
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In an instant, he understood the identity of the shadow. Chills ran down Tigre's spine as he screamed at Elen.
   
 
“Get down!”
 
“Get down!”
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''--- An arbalest...!''
 
''--- An arbalest...!''
   
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It was different from the bow Tigre used. It was a mechanical bow; the bowstring was pulled by a winch and shot with a trigger.
The arbalest was a mechanical bow. Unlike the one that Tigre used, its bowstring was pulled by a winch and shot with a trigger. Although it was difficult to maintain and prone to failure, it was a powerful weapon that could fire a bolt up to 350 alsin (approximately 350 meters) away, and with enough force that it could punch through shields and armor and come out the other side.
 
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It was difficult to maintain and prone to failure, but it could reach three-hundred-fifty alsin (approximately three-hundred-fifty meters) at maximum and could easily pass through shields and armor with enough force for the bolt to come out the other side.
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The black shadow on the rampart held one.
   
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A thick bolt was released from the arbalest.
The black shadow on the rampart was holding one.
 
   
A thick bolt was released from the arbalest, speeding through the air straight towards Elen. She had no time to avoid it.
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The roar of air sped straight toward Elen. She had no time to avoid it.
   
 
However, Elen did not panic, nor did she move from her spot.
 
However, Elen did not panic, nor did she move from her spot.

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