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However, there was an abnormality.
 
However, there was an abnormality.
   
From the man’s hand departed something that was similar to shining smoke.
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From the man’s hand departed something similar to shining smoke.
   
 
A gas which was a pale light blue color like the sky on a clear, sunny day was drifting from both his hands.
 
A gas which was a pale light blue color like the sky on a clear, sunny day was drifting from both his hands.
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Abruptly, Mui grabbed onto Takeshi’s Kendo Gi.
 
Abruptly, Mui grabbed onto Takeshi’s Kendo Gi.
   
Because of her excessive use of force, the uniform was being stretched in opposite directions and nearly fell off his shoulder.
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Because of her excessive use of force, the uniform was being strectched in opposite directions and nearly fell off his shoulder.
   
 
“I DON’T WANT TO.”
 
“I DON’T WANT TO.”
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Scowling, Tsuganashi said some dangerous words.
 
Scowling, Tsuganashi said some dangerous words.
   
“It can’t be helped. We'll have to take her with force.”
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“It can’t be helped. I’ll have to take her with force.”
   
 
“Understood.”
 
“Understood.”
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Suddenly, for a minute, Takeshi thought about his brother Gekkou.
 
Suddenly, for a minute, Takeshi thought about his brother Gekkou.
   
In Gekkou’s eyes, Takeshi wondered if he saw him in the same way?
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In Gekkou’s eyes, I wonder if he sees me in this way?
   
 
No, the eyes of that guy……
 
No, the eyes of that guy……
   
The glare from his eyes was tinged with heat and seethed with hatred.
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The glare from his eyes seethed with hatred, it would have been better if he was tinged with heat.
   
 
In this way he was cold and heartless.
 
In this way he was cold and heartless.
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His arms and chest had thick muscles, Takeshi understood that the man must have done some form of martial arts.
 
His arms and chest had thick muscles, Takeshi understood that the man must have done some form of martial arts.
   
He had piercing eyes and when he smiled his mouth became distorted.
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He had sharp eyes and when he smiled his mouth became distorted.
   
 
If anyone saw his appearance standing before a convenience store, it would be a most unpleasant meeting and they would want to leave as quickly as possible.
 
If anyone saw his appearance standing before a convenience store, it would be a most unpleasant meeting and they would want to leave as quickly as possible.
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Takeshi did not understand the situation, it would be abnormal if he could.
 
Takeshi did not understand the situation, it would be abnormal if he could.
   
At first nothing could be seen hanging from the man’s waist.
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Nothing could be seen hanging from the man’s waist.
   
The leather belt worn around his waist looked normal, however, there was a scabbard affixed with a sword sheathed.
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At a glance the leather belt worn around his waist looked normal, however, there was a scabbard affixed with a sword sheathed.
   
 
Takeshi had seen a real sword several times before, whether it was fake or genuine, there was a hilt protruding from the sheath.
 
Takeshi had seen a real sword several times before, whether it was fake or genuine, there was a hilt protruding from the sheath.
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It’s the same even now.
 
It’s the same even now.
   
Among the four people the man with piercing eyes talked the most, he was permitted to take action, he squeezed the handle of his sword as he moved towards the middle of the room with Takeshi in his line of sight.
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Among the four people the man with sharp eyes was the most talkative, he was permitted to take action, he squeezed the handle of his sword he moved towards the middle of the room with Takeshi in his line of sight.
   
 
Takeshi had to do something to distract the man’s attention and search for another way to escape.
 
Takeshi had to do something to distract the man’s attention and search for another way to escape.
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Moving several steps to the side, Takeshi grabbed the broom that was leaning against the wall.
 
Moving several steps to the side, Takeshi grabbed the broom that was leaning against the wall.
   
Using his foot, he broke off the straw part of the broom forcibly and was left with just the handle.
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Using his foot, he broke of the straw part of the broom forcible and was left with just the handle.
   
He wielded it seriously to ensure there were no obstructions to his body.
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He seriously wielded it to ensure there were no obstructions to his body.
   
 
Having done that, the broom became a long rod shaped weapon.
 
Having done that, the broom became a long rod shaped weapon.
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It was already too late anyways, the man had drawn his sword and was energetically approaching.
 
It was already too late anyways, the man had drawn his sword and was energetically approaching.
   
Takeshi could see an ominous glint reflected off the drawn sword.
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Takeshi could see an ominous glint reflected of the drawn sword.
   
 
Truly there was a difference from a Japanese sword, you could see it was a thick double edged blade meant to be used as a tool to kill a human and not to just strike them.
 
Truly there was a difference from a Japanese sword, you could see it was a thick double edged blade meant to be used as a tool to kill a human and not to just strike them.

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