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Ann Duke walked up to the girl. In the bed stuffed with waterfowl feathers, the girl slept as if sinking into it. Her cheeks were miserably thin, and Ann Duke remembered how surprised he had been at her lightness when he had picked her up. The magic flames had been made so that they didn't burn the girl, but she was still a sooty mess.
 
Ann Duke walked up to the girl. In the bed stuffed with waterfowl feathers, the girl slept as if sinking into it. Her cheeks were miserably thin, and Ann Duke remembered how surprised he had been at her lightness when he had picked her up. The magic flames had been made so that they didn't burn the girl, but she was still a sooty mess.
   
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He ran his fingers through her thin hair, which gave the impression of straw. He pushed her bangs aside and her forehead was revealed. There was a strange pattern on it, and none of the magicians had any idea of what it represented. However, it was definitely the work of the demon king, and there seemed to be no doubt that she was affected by some kind of spell.
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He ran his fingers through her thin hair, which gave the impression of straw. He pushed her bangs aside and her forehead was revealed. There was a strange pattern on it, and none of the magicians had any idea of what it represented. However, it was definitely the work of demon king, and there seemed to be no doubt that she was affected by some kind of spell.
   
 
"Are you alright? How are you feeling?"
 
"Are you alright? How are you feeling?"
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Ann Duke nipped at his lip, cast his eyes downward, and shook his head several times.
 
Ann Duke nipped at his lip, cast his eyes downward, and shook his head several times.
   
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He then gently embraced the girl's head.
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He then embraced gently the girl's head.
   
 
"You poor thing..." he said quietly, in a deep voice.
 
"You poor thing..." he said quietly, in a deep voice.

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