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Blood, a large amount of blood.
 
Blood, a large amount of blood.
 
 
It was spilled all over the hospital's outer wall and it seeped through the ground, leaving dark traces on the earth.
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It was spilled over the hospital's outer wall, and it flowed through the ground leaving crimson traces.
 
 
In the middle of it all was a woman who crawled on the ground and groaned in pain.
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In the middle of it all, was a woman who lay down and groaned in pain.
 
 
 
"Sterilization Disinfection."
 
"Sterilization Disinfection."
 
 
Hearing that voice, the woman abruptly looked across.
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Hearing the voice, the woman abruptly looked over.
 
 
Her skin and pristine hair were dirtied with mud and blood. Possibly having trouble breathing, she did not even wear her mask. This woman, who had blood spilling out of her chest and was sweating constantly, was called Sterilization Disinfection.
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Her skin and pure white hair were dirtied with mud and blood, and, possibly having trouble breathing, she did not wear her mask. This woman who had blood spilling from her chest, and was sweating constantly was called Sterilization Disinfection.
 
 
She looked at Ame-chan as if asking, "You can see me?" Laughingly, Ame-chan said, "So the largest Fragment in your heart was pierced. The sensory organ is damaged and the soul is collapsing -- In fact, you already can't use power on the level of the seven Great Fragments. Hehe, but... before that you still took away Usagawa Rinne's soul. However, at that point your heart -- the sensory organ -- was already filled, so you had no choice but to construct a new sensory organ somewhere else. You managed to stay alive because you hid a Fragment -- That's right, isn't it? But the emergency vessel had a serious rejection reaction, right?"
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She looked at Ame as if asking, "You can see me?" Ame laughingly said, "[[Mushi:Vol2_TLnotes#Questionable translations|So]] the largest fragment of the heart has been pierced. The sensory organ is damaged, and the soul is collapsing -- In fact, you already can't use power on the level of the seven great fragments. Hehe, but... before that you still took away Usagawa Rinne's soul, but it was because at that point the heart -- the sensory organ was already filled, so you had no choice but to construct a new sensory organ somewhere else, and also because you hid a fragment and restored a life -- That's right, isn't it? But the emergency vessel had a serious reaction, right?"
 
 
Ame-chan talked without pause, and then sneered. Mina gritted her teeth with an incomprehensible expression, staring the other woman's smile that seemed to say, "This is it for you?"
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Ame talked without pause, and then sneered. Mina gritted her teeth while seeming confused, looking at the smile that seemed to be saying, "Your abilities are only at this level?"
 
 
 
She probably wanted to hide here for a while, and wait for her body to restore to a level suitable for the sensory organ. However --
 
She probably wanted to hide here for a while, and wait for her body to restore to a level suitable for the sensory organ. However --
 
 
''Everything ends today. It's unfortunate that I found you.''
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''Everything ends today, who told you to get found by me.''
 
 
"Heeheeheehee," Ame-chan laughed.
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"Heeheeheehee," Ame laughed.
 
 
 
"Who are you?"
 
"Who are you?"
 
 
Sterilization Disinfection struggled to squeeze out these words.
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Sterilization Disinfection struggled to force her voice out.
 
 
 
Smiling, Ame placed her hand on her face.
 
Smiling, Ame placed her hand on her face.
 
 
"You don't know? Sterilization Disinfection, you've become weak. I'd heard that you used up all your power in that incident with Noah, but you can't even recognize me? What, if you're down to this level then there won't be a need to be cautious. I won't need to run off to antagonize Gankyū Eguriko. Whatever, I only just realized that." Her hand moved down and her eyes, nose, mouth, and eyebrows all disappeared. Sterilization Disinfection stiffened. Ame, who did not have a mouth, laughed joyfully, "Heehee. Right, it's me, not anyone else, it's me."
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"You don't know? Sterilization Disinfection, you've become weak. I'd heard that you used up all your power in that [[Mushi:Vol2_TLnotes#Questionable translations|incident]], but you can't even recognize me? What, if you're down to this level there wasn't a need to be cautious and run off to antagonize Gankyū Eguriko. Whatever, I only just realized that." Her hand moved down, and her eyes, nose, mouth, and eyebrows all disappeared. Sterilization Disinfection stiffened. Ame who did not have a mouth laughed joyfully, "Heehee. Right, it's me, not anyone else, it's me."
 
 
"<span style="text-decoration: underline">{{H:title|Ultimate Shield|The Weakest}}</span> -- You traitor..."
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"Ultimate Shield -- You traitor..."
 
 
She stood up with blood-shot eyes, and glared at Ame-chan while her body shook. This body could fight no longer. That should have be clearer to Sterilization Disinfection than to anyone else.
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She stood up with lines of blood running over her eyes, shakily glaring at Ame. This body already could not fight, this was something that should have been clearer to Sterilization Disinfection than to anyone else.
 
 
Even so, she absolutely must kill <span style="text-decoration: underline">{{H:title|Ultimate Shield|The Weakest}}</span>.
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Even so, she absolutely must kill Ultimate Shield.
 
 
"I thought it was annoying, since only your <span style="text-decoration: underline">{{H:title|Genocide Justice|Annihilation Mist}}</span> and Single Room are dangerous to me. Therefore, I will kill both of you to become truly invincible, an untarnished, strongest shield."
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"I thought it was annoying, since only your 'Genocide Justice' and Single Room are dangerous to me. Therefore, I will kill both of you to become a truly weakness-free, shield unparalleled in strength."
 
 
Ame-chan stretched out her arms, and said with happiness from the bottom of her heart: "And then I will rule this world. It's idiotic to have an existence like this but not putting that goal first. Hey, my sister, won't you die for me? Since it's so painful, just let yourself dissolve and die! You'll never be able to restore to the complete being anyways. It's useless. Isn't it meaningless to preserve such a life?"
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Ame stretched out her arms, and said with happiness from the bottom of her heart, "And then I will rule this world. With an existence like this, but still not putting the goal first, now that's idiotic. Hey, my sisters, won't you die for me? Since it's so painful, just let yourselves dissolve and die! You'll never be able to restore the complete body anyways, it's useless, isn't it meaningless to preserve such a life?"
 
 
 
"What kind of joke is this!?"
 
"What kind of joke is this!?"
 
 
Sterilization Disinfection clenched her fists, and even though she had already lost the ability to form her spray cay, she still slowly reached her arms down.
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Sterilization Disinfection clenched her fists, and even though she had already lost the ability to form her spray cay, she still slowly reachered her arm down.
 
 
''How pitiful'' -- <span style="text-decoration: underline">{{H:title|Ultimate Shield|The Weakest}}</span> laughed, and her spread out arms --
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How scary -- Ultimate Shield laughed, and her spread out arms --
 
 
 
Took the form of giant sickles.
 
Took the form of giant sickles.
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Was one she frequently used to mock herself with in the past.
 
Was one she frequently used to mock herself with in the past.
 
 
Ame-chan sneered, and used her sickle arms to cut her down.
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Ame sneered, and used her sickle arms to cut her down.
 
 
 
Neat and swift.
 
Neat and swift.
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That was enough.
 
That was enough.
 
 
''That was enough'', Guriko thought.
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That was enough, Guriko thought.
 
 
 
"Sakaki's protecting Rinne's body, so I'm not needed here."
 
"Sakaki's protecting Rinne's body, so I'm not needed here."
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Letting her wolf-like hair that could never blend into the the night flutter in the air, the single-armed girl wearing black looked back at the apartment.
 
Letting her wolf-like hair that could never blend into the the night flutter in the air, the single-armed girl wearing black looked back at the apartment.
 
 
She had lived with Rinne for almost two months here. Along with the laughter and happiness, there were also things from a thousand years ago that she should have forgotten.
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Along with the almost two months of happy laughter with Rinne in this apartment, there were the events from a thousand years ago that she should have forgotten.
 
 
''Shining brightly, and ever so lovable, I liked her.''
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''Shining brightly, and ever so lovable, I liked [[Mushi:Vol2_TLnotes#Questionable translations|her]].
 
 
''So, Rinne.''
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''So, Rinne.
 
 
''I must return her kindness.''
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''I must return her kindness."
 
 
''Even if this body is broken to pieces.''
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''Even if this body is broken to pieces."
 
 
 
Throwing off her reluctance to leave, Guriko turned her back to the building with her head lowered. The right arm that was completely annihilated by Sterilization Disinfection could not be returned even with an Apple's power. For all her numerous years -- those maddeningly long years -- she had lived using both her arms, and with only one left she could not balance herself well.
 
Throwing off her reluctance to leave, Guriko turned her back to the building with her head lowered. The right arm that was completely annihilated by Sterilization Disinfection could not be returned even with an Apple's power. For all her numerous years -- those maddeningly long years -- she had lived using both her arms, and with only one left she could not balance herself well.
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Rinne and Sakaki were the same. Now, without Rinne, if she stayed here she didn't think she could live properly.
 
Rinne and Sakaki were the same. Now, without Rinne, if she stayed here she didn't think she could live properly.
 
 
She might as well be alone; she should just live in the darkness without causing problems for others.
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She might as well be alone; without causing problems for others she should just live in the darkness.
 
 
 
"Are you trying to become a monster again?"
 
"Are you trying to become a monster again?"
 
 
Gazing at the uneven road's surface, Guriko felt something cold in the back of her head. Was it a gun?
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Gazing at the uneven road's surface, Guriko felt something cold in the back of her head, was it a gun?
 
 
 
Her intuition told her that, and she silently nodded without turning around.
 
Her intuition told her that, and she silently nodded without turning around.
 
 
"Then, for the safety of humans like me, I need to kill the monster before it is released."
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"Then, for the safety of humans like me, I need to kill the monster in front of me."
 
 
 
The voice held killing intent, and that gun was definitely loaded.
 
The voice held killing intent, and that gun was definitely loaded.
 
 
Standing behind her was Sakaki Guryū. ''No problem'' -- Guriko coldly smiled.
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Standing behind her was Sakaki Guryū, no problem -- Guriko coldly smiled.
 
 
 
"Shoot if you want, kill if you want. Sakaki, that's actually what I want."
 
"Shoot if you want, kill if you want. Sakaki, that's actually what I want."
 
 
Guriko lowered her head, looking at her remaining single arm.
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Guriko lowered her head, looking at her barely existing single arm.
 
 
"I've killed a lot of people, and I've taken so much, so much that this single life can't take enough punishment. Will you free me from that burden? Are you that kind of a man?"
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"I've killed a lot of people, and I've taken so much, the amount's so large that this single life can't take enough punishment. Will you free me from that burden? Are you that kind a man?"
 
 
 
He did not respond to the question.
 
He did not respond to the question.
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So Guriko closed her eyes and said something insignificant.
 
So Guriko closed her eyes and said something insignificant.
 
 
"You've gotten good at hiding your presence. Compared to when I first met you, you're completely unrecognizable. Have you been constantly working hard? You must have always been like this. It's not some prodigious talent, or some inherited gene, just constant hard work that got you to your strength today. You... will definitely become stronger, much stronger than me."
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"You've gotten good at hiding your presence, compared to when I first met you you're completely unrecognizable; have you been constantly working hard? You must have always been like this. It's not some prodigious talent, or some inherited gene, just constant, hard work that got you to your strength today. You... will definitely become stronger, much stronger than me."
 
 
 
"I--"
 
"I--"
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"Am very weak."
 
"Am very weak."
 
 
"Yup, you're really weak. Even though you'll become strong, you're still weak right now. I'm also very weak, so I couldn't protect Rinne."
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"Yup, you're really weak, even though you'll become strong you're still weak right now. I'm also very weak, so I couldn't protect Rinne."
 
 
Guriko naturally turned her head, and the gun that had not moved was pointed at her forehead. Stars danced in the night sky. Sakaki, in front of her, was covered in hazy shadow while insect cries could be clearly heard from all directions.
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Guriko naturally turned her head, and the gun that had not moved was pointed at her forehead. Stars danced in the night sky, and Sakaki in front of her was covered in hazy shadow while insect cries could be clearly heard from all directions.
 
 
 
She merely looked Sakaki straight in the eyes.
 
She merely looked Sakaki straight in the eyes.
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"So Sakaki, become strong! Help me protect Rinne."
 
"So Sakaki, become strong! Help me protect Rinne."
 
 
Guriko reached into her pocket, and took out a beautiful spoon for Sakaki to see. It was an expensive, rare spoon that Hino and Kio had bought for her. This piece of decorated cutlery only reflected the aura of night, dark and faint.
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Guriko reached into her pocket, and took out a spoon for Sakaki to see. It was an expensive, valuable spoon that Hino and Kio had bought for her. This piece of tableware covered with decorations only reflected the night, dark and faint.
 
 
"Hino and Kio -- " She looked at the spoon, and continued, "Maybe they were actually Sterilization Disinfection's Meat Dolls, maybe their real personalities had already completely disintegrated, but they didn't kill me and they even saved me that time. Plus, Kio and Hino both turned back into humans as they were dying. There must be more secrets to the Meat Dolls. Perhaps Rinne will return to how she was before, becoming the Rinne that we love."
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"Hino and Kio -- " She looked at the spoon, and continued, "Maybe they were actually Sterilization Disinfection's Meat Dolls, maybe their real personalities had already completely disintegrated, but they didn't kill me, and that time they even saved me. Plus, Kio and Hino both turned back into humans as they were dying. Meat Dolls, those things must have some kind of secret. Perhaps Rinne will return to how she was before, becoming the Rinne that we love."
 
 
 
The moon that was previously covered by clouds appeared and lit up Sakaki's expression. It was one that majestically shined with spirit, without the slightest weakness.
 
The moon that was previously covered by clouds appeared and lit up Sakaki's expression. It was one that majestically shined with spirit, without the slightest weakness.
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"I want to search for a way."
 
"I want to search for a way."
 
 
She gripped her spoon, and said to Sakaki's face, "Sakaki, you said that to me in the hospital, didn't you? You gave hope to the me, who had given up on everything, didn't you? Rinne hasn't died yet, so, Sakaki, help me protect her. Though I don't know how long it will take, I will find a way to return Rinne to how she was without doubt and then come back."
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She gripped her spoon, and said to Sakaki's face, "Sakaki, you said that to me in the hospital, didn't you? You gave hope to the me who had given up on everything, didn't you? Rinne hasn't died yet, so, Sakaki, help me protect her. Though I don't know how long it will take, I will without doubt find a way to return Rinne to how she was and then come back."
 
 
 
To return Rinne to how she was before.
 
To return Rinne to how she was before.
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To bring back the everyday life that Long-Armed Demon and Sterilization Disinfection destroyed.
 
To bring back the everyday life that Long-Armed Demon and Sterilization Disinfection destroyed.
 
 
"And then, let's go to school together, the three of us."
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"And then, let's go to school together, with the three of us."
 
 
This was Guriko's resolution. At first she only wanted to escape from this human world with nothing but pain, but now it was different. During the fight with Sterilization Disinfection, Sakaki had embraced her, and then she felt with even greater conviction that she did not wish to separate from them.
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This was Guriko's resolution. At first she only wanted to escape from this human world with nothing but pain, but now it was different. During the fight with Sterilization Disinfection Sakaki had embraced, and then she felt with even greater conviction that she did not wish to separate from them.
 
 
So, for the sake of returning to that period of happiness, Guriko would go on a journey. She wouldn't completely revert into a monster. She only needed to search for a way to recover Rinne by herself.
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So, for the sake of returning to that period of happiness Guriko would go on a journey. She wouldn't completely revert into a monster, she only needed to search for a way to recover Rinne by herself.
 
 
That was something that definitely could not be achieved while staying here to protect Rinne. She would need to go to the outside world, or rather into an even darker world where Mushi and monsters swarmed in order to find it.
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That was something that definitely could not be achieved while staying here to protect Rinne. She would need to go to the outside world, or into an even darker world where Mushi and monsters swarmed in order to find it.
 
 
 
Before she met Rinne, that had been Guriko's world.
 
Before she met Rinne, that had been Guriko's world.
 
 
Just a return to her life two months ago. There would be a day when she would definitely meet Rinne and Sakaki again.
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Just a return to life two months ago. There would be a day, she would definitely meet Rinne and Sakaki again.
 
 
"Creak," the door opened.
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*Creak* The door opened.
 
 
Rinne stood there. She who had become a Meat Doll, yet her eyes twinkled with firm determination. She sped over to Sakaki, who was pointing a gun at Guriko.
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Rinne stood there. She who had become a Meat Doll, showed eyes twinkling with firm determination, and sped over to Sakaki who was pointing a gun at Guriko.
 
 
 
"You can't."
 
"You can't."
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"Fight."
 
"Fight."
 
 
That appearance of hers, that expression as she spoke seriously for some reason.
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That appearance of hers, that expression as she spoke earnestly for some reason.
 
 
 
Sakaki and Guriko simultaneously loosened up, and their expressions became gentle.
 
Sakaki and Guriko simultaneously loosened up, and their expressions became gentle.
 
 
"I apologize. Aah, milady, do not worry, we weren't fighting."
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"I apologize. Aah, Your Majesty, do not worry, we weren't fighting."
 
 
"Right. This guy pointed a gun at me all on his own. It's not a fight, it's a one-sided assault."
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"Right. This guy pointed a gun at me all on his, it's not a fight, it's a one-sided assault."
 
 
"You can't, sensei."
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"You can't, Sensei."
 
 
Rinne truly believed that. With hands at her waist and her chest stuck out, her face completely was serious as she stared at Sakaki. There was a time when she made that expression whenever Guriko and Sakaki fought. Right, since it was like this, definitely --
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Rinne truly believed that, with hands at her waist while she stuck out her chest, her face completely serious as she stared at Sakaki. There was a time when she made that expression whenever Guriko and Sakaki fought. Right, since it was like this, definitely --
 
 
"You must get along well!"
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"You must communicate properly!"
 
 
After making a slightly angry face, she should scrunch her eyebrows. And, not knowing what to do, she should return to a kind, tender face.
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After making a slightly angry face, she should scrunch her eyebrows, and not knowing what to do, return to a kind, tender face.
 
 
Seeing her like this, Sakaki couldn't hold back his tears. A tear flew down the cheek of his handsome face.
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Seeing her like this, Sakaki couldn't hold back his tears. A tear flowed down the cheek of his handsome face.
 
 
Guriko forced out an exaggerated laugh, "Haha, Sakaki you idiot, you still cry at that age. How shameful."
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Guriko forced out an exaggerated laugh, "Haha, Sakaki you idiot, you still cry at that age, how shameful."
 
 
"What? Huh, why am I crying? And Guriko."
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"What? Huh, why am I crying? And, Guriko."
 
 
 
Sakaki looked over with a face of incredulity, and said in a low voice, "Why are you also crying?"
 
Sakaki looked over with a face of incredulity, and said in a low voice, "Why are you also crying?"
 
 
Guriko brought up her hand to feel her cheek, and noticed that there was a warm liquid. Tears, these were -- tears. As she realized that, she felt that she couldn't stop --
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Guriko brought up her hand to feel her cheek, and noticed that there was a warm liquid. Tears, these were -- tears, as she realized that, she felt that she couldn't stop --
 
 
Guriko silently wept, and then cried out in frustration. Sakaki was quiet, yet it seemed that his tears could not stop either, and he continued to incredulously tilt his head.
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Guriko silently weeped, and then cried out in frustration. Sakaki was quiet, yet it seemed that his tears could not stop either, and he continued to incredulously tilt his head.
 
 
 
In a rather remote place in Japan, there was a town called Kannonsakazaki. In it lived a girl called Usagawa Rinne. That girl didn't really stand out in anything; normal people like her could be found anywhere, and she just happened to be decent at cooking.
 
In a rather remote place in Japan, there was a town called Kannonsakazaki. In it lived a girl called Usagawa Rinne. That girl didn't really stand out in anything; normal people like her could be found anywhere, and she just happened to be decent at cooking.
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Yet she completely changed the standardized life of Sakaki.
 
Yet she completely changed the standardized life of Sakaki.
 
 
She saved a monster who had been swallowed by darkness for a millennium.
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She saved a monster who had been swallowed by darkness for a millenium.
 
 
Even though she became a Meat Doll, Rinne would never change. She would still look hurt whenever Sakaki and Guriko argued with each other, with an expression showing that she hated seeing their tears.
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Even though she became a Meat Doll, Rinne would never change, she would like always look hurt whenever Sakaki and Guriko argued with each other, with an expression showing that she hated seeing their tears.
 
 
Rinne calmly pulled the two next to her, embracing them. She was extremely weak, and she didn't feel real compared to before, but Sakaki and Guriko couldn't resist as they were pulled to her thin body.
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Rinne calmly pulled the two next to her, embracing them; she was extremely weak, and she didn't feel real compared to before, but Sakaki and Guriko couldn't resist as they were pulled to her thin body.
 
 
 
"Don't worry."
 
"Don't worry."
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Rinne quietly spoke. "Don't worry. Don't worry."
 
Rinne quietly spoke. "Don't worry. Don't worry."
 
 
She was also crying as she said that. And so, the three cried together, feeling each others' warmth under the dark, frigid night.
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She was also crying as she said that. And so, three people cried together, feeling each others' warmth under the dark, frigid night.
 
 
One was the heir to an enormous corporation, a man who had always walked on a predetermined route.
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One was the heir to an enormous corporation, a man who had always walked on a pre-programmed route.
 
 
One could not find a place to call home, a girl who had thrown herself into the sea.
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One could not find a reason to live, a girl who had thrown herself into the sea.
 
 
 
One gouged out eyeballs, a girl who lived in the darkness as a monster.
 
One gouged out eyeballs, a girl who lived in the darkness as a monster.
 
 
The three met by chance, definitely only by chance. In this world, where God had broken into fragments, perhaps miracles had long ceased to exist.
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The three met by chance, definitely only by chance. In this world where God had broken into fragments, perhaps the things known as miracles had long ceased to exist.
 
 
But Sakaki pledged to always protect Rinne.
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But, Sakaki pledged to always protect Rinne.
 
 
 
Guriko would search for a way to recover Rinne.
 
Guriko would search for a way to recover Rinne.
 
 
And Rinne would embrace the two of them like this.
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And Rinne, would embrace the two of them like this.
 
 
So there was no need to worry. Rinne's words were right. Though she didn't have anything to base it on, Guriko felt she didn't have to worry.
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So there's no need to worry. Rinne's words were right, though she didn't have anything to base it on, Guriko felt she didn't have to worry.
 
 
 
The night was about to end, and they needed to wake from this nightmare. Because after experiencing the blackest, darkest, desperation, people should be able to hope for a happier future..
 
The night was about to end, and they needed to wake from this nightmare. Because after experiencing the blackest, darkest, desperation, people should be able to hope for a happier future..

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