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The water of the oval lake was cold and clear, it wouldn't become muddy even if it rains. Therefore, It is said that the water springs from somewhere at the bottom of the lake.
 
The water of the oval lake was cold and clear, it wouldn't become muddy even if it rains. Therefore, It is said that the water springs from somewhere at the bottom of the lake.
   
Though it's a place that people rarely approached, people still came. Some of those few, said that they had seen strange things at that place.
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Though it's a place that people rarely approached, people still come. Some of those few, said that they had seen strange things at that place.
   
Someone said that they'd seen a foreign city at the bottom of the lake.
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Someone said that he seen a foreign city at the bottom of the lake.
   
 
Another said that the lake's water was stirring even though there was no wind.
 
Another said that the lake's water was stirring even though there was no wind.
   
Another said that they'd seen a dragon swimming there.
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Another said that he seen a dragon swimming there.
   
And another said that they'd seen a foreign girl in the lake.
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And another said that he seen a foreign girl in the lake.
   
 
As those rumors spread around, the few people who approached the lake suddenly stopped coming.
 
As those rumors spread around, the few people who approached the lake suddenly stopped coming.
   
Today as always, that forest wrapped in deep silence, the Ryuujinko, had a quiet appearance with the lake's surface shining from the sunshine like a mirror.
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Today as always, that forest wrapped in deep silence, the Ryuujinko had a quiet appearance with the lake's surface shining from the sunshine like a mirror.
   
 
At the lake's shore, there was a young man standing.
 
At the lake's shore, there was a young man standing.
   
The young man was probably around 16 or 17 years old and was wearing a strange outfit.
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The young man was probably around 16 or 17 years, and was wearing an strange outfit.
   
He had loose and disheveled hair, wore a pipe hakama of pongee that you cannot find around here with a katana on his waist, and a coat colored with flashy designs.
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He had loose and disheveled hair, wore a pipe hakama of pongee that you cannot find around here with a katana on his waist, and also a coat colored with flashy designs.
   
The young man stepped inside the lake shore, not caring at all about getting his legs wet as he looked into the lake.
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The young man stepped inside the lake shore, not caring at all about wetting his legs as he looked into the lake.
   
"A dragon lives here? How does it live in such clear water? In the first place, the bottom of the lake is completely visible. Where the hell is the dragon? I came a long way here expressly for this, but it turned out to be a false rumor."
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"A dragon lives here? How does it live in such clear water? In the first place, the bottom of the lake is completely visible. Where the hell is the dragon? I came a long way here expressly for this, but it turned out to be a fake."
   
As the young man spat out his displeasure, he bent down to pick up a pebble that fell by his feet and aimed at the lake to throw it.
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As the young man spit out his displeasure, he bent to pick up a pebble that fell to his feet and aimed at the lake to throw it.
   
At that moment, the lake's water began to swell even though there's no wind and the ripples approached the shore.
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At that moment, the lake's water began to swell even though there's no wind, and the ripples approached the shore.
   
The sound of the ripples breaking grew stronger.
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The sound of the ripples breaking in grew stronger.
   
 
"What!? Waves so suddenly!? It can't be, is there really something here!? "
 
"What!? Waves so suddenly!? It can't be, is there really something here!? "
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A surprisingly thick and tall giant tree.
 
A surprisingly thick and tall giant tree.
   
Beasts that he'd never seen squirmed in the forest.
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Beasts that he never seen squirmed in the forest.
   
 
"What on earth am I looking at!? No... What is it showing me?"
 
"What on earth am I looking at!? No... What is it showing me?"
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And the shade of a beautiful girl's face somewhere.
 
And the shade of a beautiful girl's face somewhere.
   
The young man had never seen any kind of appearance or clothes like those before.
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The young man never seen any kind of appearance or clothes like these before.
   
"A mirage!? No, I never heard of a mirage that projects underwater. What the hell is this!?"
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"A mirage!? No, I never heard of a mirage that projects underwater. What the hell is that!?"
   
As the young man steps inside the lake charmed by the spectacle, the waves that broke in the lakeshore suddenly grew.
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As the young man steps inside the lake charmed at the spectacle, the waves that broke in the lakeshore suddenly grew.
   
 
"Uwaaah!?"
 
"Uwaaah!?"
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Suddenly, the lake calmed down, the waves stopped and the surface became like a mirror once again.
 
Suddenly, the lake calmed down, the waves stopped and the surface became like a mirror once again.
   
Nothing was heard, not the sound of the wind or the chirping of the birds. It's a strange calm, as if the lake had absorbed all the sound. The small lake is wrapped with the same silence it had before.
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Nothing was heard, not the sound of the wind or the chirps of the birds. It's a strange calm, as if the lake had absorbed all the sounds. The small lake is wrapped with the same silence it had before.
   
 
And for the young man who disappeared...
 
And for the young man who disappeared...
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"Young master... Where are you?" Young masteeer."
 
"Young master... Where are you?" Young masteeer."
   
the voice of one of the young man's retainers called for him.
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the voice of one of the young man's retainer called for him?
   
 
"Young masteer... Do you hear me? Young masteeer."
 
"Young masteer... Do you hear me? Young masteeer."
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The voice’s owner drew closer to the lake little by little.
 
The voice’s owner drew closer to the lake little by little.
   
"The young master, where on earth did he go, leaving his retainers aside. he couldn’t have gone to the lake by himself."
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"The young master, where on earth did he go leaving his retainers aside. he couldn’t have went to the lake by himself."
   
An elderly man approached the lake, and bent his body towards it a little, and took a timid peek.
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An elderly man approached the lake, and bent his body towards the lake a little, and took a timidly peek.
   
 
"It can't be. No matter how unreasonable the young master is, he wouldn't have dived into the lake where the dragon god lives alone. So... Where did the young master go? "
 
"It can't be. No matter how unreasonable the young master is, he wouldn't have dived into the lake where the dragon god lives alone. So... Where did the young master go? "
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The elder retainer of about 50 years clicked his tongue with a frustrated expression.
 
The elder retainer of about 50 years clicked his tongue with a frustrated expression.
   
"Damn it young master. Going around without retainers in such rundown clothes, that's why you're called a fool by everyone."
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"Damn it young master. Going around without retainers with such rundown clothes, that's why you're called a fool by everyone."
   
Letting out a sigh, the elderly retainer turned and walks away from the lake.
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Letting out a sigh, the elder retainer turned and walks away from the lake.
   
 
"Young masteer! If you're there please respond! Young masteeeer!"
 
"Young masteer! If you're there please respond! Young masteeeer!"
   
 
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==Translator's Notes and References==
 
==Translator's Notes and References==
 
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