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"Understood..."
 
"Understood..."
   
''Is he really putting so much importance on that man...?'' His disgruntlement caused him to forget his fear of King Leygur for a moment.
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''Is he really putting so much importance on that man...? ''His disgruntlement caused him to forget his fear of King Leygur for a moment.
   
 
"You Majesty, certainly Rain has been gifted with talent. But he is only a commoner. Is he really a presence to focus so exclusively on?"
 
"You Majesty, certainly Rain has been gifted with talent. But he is only a commoner. Is he really a presence to focus so exclusively on?"
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Yes, that Rain locked himself in his room since returning, and hardly ever came out. When he did, it was only to grab something to eat, or drink some alcohol, which really got on her nerves.
 
Yes, that Rain locked himself in his room since returning, and hardly ever came out. When he did, it was only to grab something to eat, or drink some alcohol, which really got on her nerves.
   
''Now isn't the time for that!'' It's a bit twisted, but Yuri was getting impatient at Rain for not raising his hand against Zarmine already.
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''Now isn't the time for that! ''It's a bit twisted, but Yuri was getting impatient at Rain for not raising his hand against Zarmine already.
   
 
It seemed Xenoa thought the same way, and the looks she threw at him grew more agitated every day. It was only a matter of time before she lost it.
 
It seemed Xenoa thought the same way, and the looks she threw at him grew more agitated every day. It was only a matter of time before she lost it.
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The problem was with the second half.
 
The problem was with the second half.
   
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Incidentally, Rain.
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''Incidentally, Rain.''
 
   
''I have no idea how you came to make acquaintance with the princess, but if this battle should end in a loss, her life will be at risk.''
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I have no idea how you came to make acquaintance with the princess, but if this battle should end in a loss, her life will be at risk.
   
''Since it seems you two are close, I want you to lend your strength to protect the Princess for me.''
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Since it seems you two are close, I want you to lend your strength to protect the Princess for me.
   
''One more thing......I have no intention of saying anything about your relationship, but think of your position and age, and don't do anything rash (you know what I mean). Okay?''
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One more thing......I have no intention of saying anything about your relationship, but think of your position and age, and don't do anything rash (you know what I mean). Okay?
   
''That's all.''
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That's all.
   
 
"What do mean 'that's all'?"
 
"What do mean 'that's all'?"
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Yuri opened her mouth wide as she spoke.
 
Yuri opened her mouth wide as she spoke.
   
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''Guess so...''
''Guess so...'' Rain seemed to say with his chest puffed out wickedly. At that moment...
 
   
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Rain seemed to say with his chest puffed out wickedly. At that moment...
Near the center of the room light started to flicker, beginning to take on a form.
 
   
"Magic Vision?" Yuri asked.
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Near the center of the room light started to flicker, beginning to take on a form. "Magic Vision?" Yuri asked.
   
 
Rain didn't get a chance to respond as the light solidified, taking the shape of a man with sharp eyes.
 
Rain didn't get a chance to respond as the light solidified, taking the shape of a man with sharp eyes.
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"Rain......why are you here?"
 
"Rain......why are you here?"
   
"Right. I'm a centurion. In the last battle I did a few things and would you believe it, little one? In return I get invited to a ball. Jeez, if they're going to do all that, they might as well raise my status a little, right? I can't go along with them."
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"Right. I'm a centurion. In the last battle I did a few things and would you believe it, little one? In return I get invited to a ball. Jeez, if they're going to do all that, they might as well raise my status a little, right? I can't go along with them."
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"Oh, so then you slipped out and ended up coming here?"
 
"Oh, so then you slipped out and ended up coming here?"
   
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☆――☆――☆
 
☆――☆――☆
   
It was hard to believe three years had already passed since then.
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It was hard to believe three years had already passed since then. She could still remember it as though it were only yesterday. This same place, that day.
 
She could still remember it as though it were only yesterday.
 
 
This same place, that day.
 
   
 
At noon they ate the bread Rain had brought with him, and he stayed with her until evening.
 
At noon they ate the bread Rain had brought with him, and he stayed with her until evening.
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Looking at Rain's sunny smile, with only him occasionally gently rubbing her head, there was nothing else she could wish for.
 
Looking at Rain's sunny smile, with only him occasionally gently rubbing her head, there was nothing else she could wish for.
   
Whenever she would jump, those black eyes always watched over her deeply and intently.
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Whenever she would jump, those black eyes always watched over her deeply and intently. When she would fall over from playing, that large, warm hand held out to her.
 
When she would fall over from playing, that large, warm hand held out to her.
 
   
 
Shelfa wished this time could continue forever.
 
Shelfa wished this time could continue forever.
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Those words caused Shelfa to stand as still as ice.
 
Those words caused Shelfa to stand as still as ice.
   
From tomorrow she would be alone again......that truth pushed cruelly at her heart.
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From tomorrow she would be alone again......that truth pushed cruelly at her heart. But that wasn't all. Shelfa had come to realize it.
 
But that wasn't all. Shelfa had come to realize it.
 
   
 
That she had fallen in love with Rain.
 
That she had fallen in love with Rain.
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She would need to pack clothes that would make movement easy.......with the exception of an outfit for her reunion with Rain.
 
She would need to pack clothes that would make movement easy.......with the exception of an outfit for her reunion with Rain.
 
   
 
Returning to her private chambers, she prepared the basics before hurrying out into the corridor.
 
Returning to her private chambers, she prepared the basics before hurrying out into the corridor.
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The two girls pressed close together exchanged a look.
 
The two girls pressed close together exchanged a look.
   
Holding onto each other so, Liera's quivering passed on to Shelfa.
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Holding onto each other so, Liera's quivering passed on to Shelfa. Trying to comfort her, Shelfa gently patted her back.
 
Trying to comfort her, Shelfa gently patted her back.
 
   
 
In reality, it was she who was frightened. But right now, she was determined.
 
In reality, it was she who was frightened. But right now, she was determined.
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Just as Rain had done for her long ago, Shelfa extended her hand.
 
Just as Rain had done for her long ago, Shelfa extended her hand.
 
   
 
A little while later, two soldiers guarding the gate saw Princess Shelfa.
 
A little while later, two soldiers guarding the gate saw Princess Shelfa.

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