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== The Girl Who Swims in the Fountain of Mist ==
 
== The Girl Who Swims in the Fountain of Mist ==
 
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It wasn't noon yet since wild strawberries were picked early in the morning. However, danger lies dormant in the forest no matter what time of the day it is. There probably isn't a great difference in the danger whether it's day or the night.
 
It wasn't noon yet since wild strawberries were picked early in the morning. However, danger lies dormant in the forest no matter what time of the day it is. There probably isn't a great difference in the danger whether it's day or the night.
   
Beasts don't approached a fixed distance from the town because of the “Belfry of Beast Protection”. However, the effectiveness didn't reach deep into the forest as one would expect.
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Beasts haven't approached a fixed distance from the town because of the “Belfry of Beast Protection”. However, the effectiveness didn't reach deep into the forest as one would expect.
   
 
Bewildered, the girl raised her voice.
 
Bewildered, the girl raised her voice.
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“...Everyone – ! Where are you – !?”
 
“...Everyone – ! Where are you – !?”
   
The person who heard her voice was just nearby.
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The person who hears her voice was just nearby.
   
But it was particularly unfortunate for her – it wasn't a “Human”, a ferocious animal lived deep in the forest, furthermore it was bad timing since it happened to be hungry at that moment.
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But it was particularly unfortunate for her – it wasn't a “Human”, a ferocious animal lived deep in the forest, furthermore it was a bad timing since it happened to be hungry at that moment.
   
 
As soon as the girl noticed the beast's roar from behind, her body stiffened.
 
As soon as the girl noticed the beast's roar from behind, her body stiffened.
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A huge wolf emerged, swaying from the shade of the tree. It possessed a body not unlike a bear.
 
A huge wolf emerged, swaying from the shade of the tree. It possessed a body not unlike a bear.
   
Suddenly, the girl's breathing became shorter.
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Suddenly, the girl's breathe became shorter.
   
 
In this neighbouring forest, the Kokurou was at the top of the food chain. The jet black fur was traded at high prices, but even the hunters were greatly reduced since they couldn't handle the brutal beast.
 
In this neighbouring forest, the Kokurou was at the top of the food chain. The jet black fur was traded at high prices, but even the hunters were greatly reduced since they couldn't handle the brutal beast.
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A great poet who was alive 100 years ago said that the different looks that the fountain showed as time goes on were “Different emotions that a girl shows” and that the clear water was drops of moon.
 
A great poet who was alive 100 years ago said that the different looks that the fountain showed as time goes on were “Different emotions that a girl shows” and that the clear water was drops of moon.
   
(...No matter how you think of it, neither example was exaggerated.)
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(...No matter how you think of it, neither example is exaggerated.)
   
 
Midday.
 
Midday.
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Once, the descendants of that magician governed this town, but that bloodline had already long died out.
 
Once, the descendants of that magician governed this town, but that bloodline had already long died out.
   
Now, dispatched nobles sent from the government served as chief and controlled the Belfry of Beast Protection.
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Now, dispatched nobles sent from the government serve as head and control the Belfry of Beast Protection.
   
Fino's adoptive father Ordba Misthound Driard was the noble assigned as the chief of this town since her childhood.
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Fino's adoptive father Ordba Misthound Driard was the noble assigned as the head of this town since her childhood.
   
 
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He acquired his position as a noble but, he didn't have a territory inherited generation after generation since he was from the branch family.
 
He acquired his position as a noble but, he didn't have a territory inherited generation after generation since he was from the branch family.
   
His middle name “Misthound” was named after this town as well. A magician’s middle name was usually associated with his territory, birthplace or belonged to the name of an organisation. During a magician’s life, it wasn’t strange for his name to be changed many times. Almost all magicians of noble rank usually followed this.
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His middle name “Misthound” is named after this town as well. A magician’s middle name was usually associated with his territory, birthplace or belonged to the name of an organisation. During a magician’s life, it wasn’t strange for his name to be changed many times. Almost all magicians of noble rank usually followed this.
   
 
Some of the eccentric ones gave themselves names of places that didn’t exist as they pleased or another example is giving themselves rare names that they liked.
 
Some of the eccentric ones gave themselves names of places that didn’t exist as they pleased or another example is giving themselves rare names that they liked.
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Celo didn't know any other noble young women except for Fino. But he completely understood that nevertheless, she had an unusual character for a noble.
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Celo didn't know any other noble young women except for Fino. But he completely understood that nevertheless, she had an unusuall character for a noble.
   
The town’s children also sensed that and became close to open-hearted Fino.
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The town’s children also sensed that and became close to openhearted Fino.
   
Celo looked down on the basket Marill carried.
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Celo looked down on the basket Marilll carried.
   
 
“At any rate, that’s a lot of wild strawberries Marill. Did you collect all of that by yourself?”
 
“At any rate, that’s a lot of wild strawberries Marill. Did you collect all of that by yourself?”
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Fino’s sighed with Marill’s proud words as she stroked her hair.
 
Fino’s sighed with Marill’s proud words as she stroked her hair.
   
“Marill…that’s scary, from now on you absolutely must not go deep into the forest, okay? You haven’t lived long enough, what if the Foudi or Kokurou found you? Isn’t the effective range of the Belfry of Beast Protection vast enough?”
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“Marill…that’s scary, from now on you absolutely must not go deep into the forest, okay. You haven’t lived long enough, what if the Foudi or Kokurou found you? Isn’t the effective range of the Belfry of Beast Protectionvast enough?”
   
She scolded her lightly; Celo watched as Fino took a small wooden horse from within her bag and placed it in the palm of her hand.
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She scolded her lightly; Celo watched as Fino took a small wooden horse from within her bag and placed it in the pal of her hand.
   
 
Fino put a red saddle on the lovely black horse she named “Liquorice”.
 
Fino put a red saddle on the lovely black horse she named “Liquorice”.
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The legs which had a trace of roundness floated in the air.
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The legs which has a trace of roundness floated in the air.
   
 
The horse was created by a magical tool; “Heavenly Wooden Horse” was made by Celo’s grandfather Zeldonato and given to Fino on her birthday.
 
The horse was created by a magical tool; “Heavenly Wooden Horse” was made by Celo’s grandfather Zeldonato and given to Fino on her birthday.
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“ – Sleep.”
 
“ – Sleep.”
   
In that instant, the heavenly wooden horse reduced in size, reacting to the clear voice.
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On that instant, the heavenly wooden horse reduced in size, reacting to the clear voice.
   
 
After putting the now small wooden horse in her cloth bag, Fino entered the gate.
 
After putting the now small wooden horse in her cloth bag, Fino entered the gate.
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“Ah, that’s bad…”
 
“Ah, that’s bad…”
   
Fino presumed that person was about to arrive and she rushed inside the gate, as he started to trot towards the residence.
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Fino presumed that the person was about to arrive and rushed inside the gate as he started to trot towards the residence.
 
And then the resident butler and servants turned up to meet the guest on her behalf.
 
And then the resident butler and servants turned up to meet the guest on her behalf.
   
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His expression was fearless and it was always present in his strict demeanour.
 
His expression was fearless and it was always present in his strict demeanour.
   
Be that as it may, his personality wasn’t as strict as his appearance. He didn’t interfere too much with his adopted daughter Fino and he wasn’t particularly high-handed towards his servants, he was a good chief.
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Be that as it may, his personality wasn’t as strict as his appearance. He didn’t interfere too much with his adopted daughter Fino and he wasn’t particularly high-handed towards his servants, he was a good head.
   
 
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Ordba hardly showed any interest in Fino’s lie and whispered in a low voice.
 
Ordba hardly showed any interest in Fino’s lie and whispered in a low voice.
   
“…Apply discretion slowly. If you an aristocrat stay at his side forever, even he will be troubled.
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“…Apply discretion slowly. If you an aristocrat stay at his side forever, even he will be troubled.
   
“I’ll bear that in mind. Please don’t worry; I am a daughter of the Driard family.
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“I’ll bear that in mind. Please don’t worry; I am a daughter of the Driard family.
   
 
Fino didn’t really mean it for now, she only answered for the sake of it.
 
Fino didn’t really mean it for now, she only answered for the sake of it.
   
She wasn’t in the mood to argue with her foster father. She saw that the discussion wouldn’t reach an agreement and that there was a reason on her father’s side as a noble, through and through.
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She wasn’t in the mood of arguing with her foster father. She saw that the discussion wouldn’t reach an agreement and that there was a reason on her father’s side as a noble, through and through.
   
 
The people in the residence seemed to think so too and Celo also seemed too as well from what she had heard from other servants behind her back.
 
The people in the residence seemed to think so too and Celo also seemed too as well from what she had heard from other servants behind her back.
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If possible, it was better for her not to say anything.
 
If possible, it was better for her not to say anything.
   
Cadena quickly arranged Fino’s recently dried hair and ended by brushing down her skirt.
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Cadena quickly arranged Fino’s recently dried hair and ended with brushing down her skirt.
   
 
The head of the residence and his daughter lined up in front of the entrance and before long, the door opened.
 
The head of the residence and his daughter lined up in front of the entrance and before long, the door opened.
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There were some female knights mingling among them.
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There were some female knights mingling with them.
   
 
The young leading knight gave a soft bow to Ordba and Fino respectively when he saw them.
 
The young leading knight gave a soft bow to Ordba and Fino respectively when he saw them.
   
“This is our first time meeting each other. Royal Knight Wizard group Lonbardo, stationing commanding officer of the eight division Halmbuck Nanelfool Redafurio on duty.
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“This is our first time meeting each other. Royal Knight Wizard group Lonbardo, stationing commanding officer of the eight division Halmbuck Nanelfool Redafurio on duty."
   
 
His voice flawlessly made a greeting; the youth seemed like a light hearted person that was full of pride from serving the royal family.
 
His voice flawlessly made a greeting; the youth seemed like a light hearted person that was full of pride from serving the royal family.
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Ordba ushered him in with his low voice.
 
Ordba ushered him in with his low voice.
   
“Welcome, you must have had a long journey, please come in. I am the head of this town Ordba Misthound Driard. In any case, thank you for making this journey. Rooms have been prepared for the other knights as well, so please rest from your journey first. Take as much time as you like, we’ll do the greetings later.”
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“Welcome, you must have had a long journey, please come in. I am the head of this town Ordba Misthound Driard. In any case, thank you for making this journey. Rooms have been prepared for the other knights as well, so please rest from your journey first. Take as much time as you like, we’ll do the greetings later.
   
 
At that moment Fino, sensed the sign of her foster father and the squad leader called Halmbuck exchanging looks with each other.
 
At that moment Fino, sensed the sign of her foster father and the squad leader called Halmbuck exchanging looks with each other.
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She pretended not to notice, behaving like a noble young woman.
 
She pretended not to notice, behaving like a noble young woman.
   
“Mr Halmbuck and his convoy, please come this way. I shall guide you to your rooms.”
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“Mr.Halmbuck and his convoy, please come this way. I shall guide you to your rooms.”
   
 
“Thank you, umm …let me see…”
 
“Thank you, umm …let me see…”
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“This is impolite of me. Please excuse me.”
 
“This is impolite of me. Please excuse me.”
   
“It’s not a problem. It’s a thing of the past.
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“It’s not a problem. It’s a thing of the past.
   
 
Fino had an uncomfortable feeling when she answered back as if it was scripted.
 
Fino had an uncomfortable feeling when she answered back as if it was scripted.
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-Somehow, that smiling face made Fino shudder.
 
-Somehow, that smiling face made Fino shudder.
   
“I’d like to receive the cooperation of the renown wizard Mr Ordba as part of my duty…I wanted to ask that favour.”
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“I’d like to receive the cooperation of the renown wizard Mr.Ordba as part of my duty…I wanted to ask that favour.”
   
 
Once again, Ordba smiled wryly.
 
Once again, Ordba smiled wryly.
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“Ms Firiano. Thank you for guiding me here. We’ll certainly meet again later.”
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“Ms.Firiano. Thank you for guiding me here. We’ll certainly meet again later.”
   
 
Before she could think, he lightly kissed the back of her hand.
 
Before she could think, he lightly kissed the back of her hand.
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The girl straightened herself while keeping a stern look and bowed to Fino.
 
The girl straightened herself while keeping a stern look and bowed to Fino.
   
“I am grateful to you for now. I am the aide Elsie. I’m from the guard and I would like it if someone could show me around the residence.
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“I am grateful to you for now. I am the aide Elsie. I’m from the guard and I would like it if someone showed me around the residence.
   
 
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“I understand. Well…Cadena, please.
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“I understand. Well…Cadena, please.
   
 
Fino entrusted the task to the servant girl behind her and promptly ran away.
 
Fino entrusted the task to the servant girl behind her and promptly ran away.

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