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<!--The things that were swaying in front of me while I was cooking were...... some sort of tickets. Just as I was about to brush the tickets aside, I caught a glimpse of the words 'Conductor: Ebisawa Chisato' — I then realized his motive, and my mood went down in an instant.-->
 
<!--The things that were swaying in front of me while I was cooking were...... some sort of tickets. Just as I was about to brush the tickets aside, I caught a glimpse of the words 'Conductor: Ebisawa Chisato' — I then realized his motive, and my mood went down in an instant.-->
Тем, что колебалось передо мной, пока я был занят готовкой, оказались… какие-то билеты. Когда я только собрался отмахнуться от них, то заметил промелькнувшие слова: «Дирижер – Эбисава Чисато». После этого я понял его мотивы, и мое настроение упало вмиг.
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Тем, что колебалось передо мной, пока я был занят готовкой, оказались… какие-то билеты. Когда я только собрался смахнуть их в сторону<!--отмахнуться - idiffer-->, то заметил промелькнувшие слова: «Дирижер – Эбисава Чисато». После этого я понял его мотивы, и мое настроение упало вмиг.
   
 
<!--"This is...... your job, right......?"-->
 
<!--"This is...... your job, right......?"-->
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<!--Also...... why two tickets?-->
 
<!--Also...... why two tickets?-->
И еще… почему билетов два?
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И еще… почему билетов два?<!--билетА? - idiffer-->
   
 
<!--"I was thinking that I could attend the concert together with some beauty, so I asked them to give me two. These are VIP seats, you know? They cost forty thousand yen each! Man, how lucky Nao is to be able to go on an extravagant date! So please! It's not nice to leave the VIP seats empty, so make sure you bring someone along with you. I'll fork out the cash for the night at the hotel as well!"-->
 
<!--"I was thinking that I could attend the concert together with some beauty, so I asked them to give me two. These are VIP seats, you know? They cost forty thousand yen each! Man, how lucky Nao is to be able to go on an extravagant date! So please! It's not nice to leave the VIP seats empty, so make sure you bring someone along with you. I'll fork out the cash for the night at the hotel as well!"-->
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<!--"That feels so stupid. Why would I want to watch Papa's concert?"-->
 
<!--"That feels so stupid. Why would I want to watch Papa's concert?"-->
– Похоже на глупость. Зачем мне идти на папин концерт?
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– Похоже на глупость. Почему я должна хотеть увидеть папин концерт?<!--отчего мне захочется - idiffer-->
   
 
<!--Mafuyu turned her head towards the direction of the blackboard after she said that. She does really dislike her father a lot, so I knew it would be futile to try to invite her.-->
 
<!--Mafuyu turned her head towards the direction of the blackboard after she said that. She does really dislike her father a lot, so I knew it would be futile to try to invite her.-->
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<!--"So that means Nao's partner is indeed Aihara?"-->
 
<!--"So that means Nao's partner is indeed Aihara?"-->
– Это значит, парой Нао всё-таки будет Аихара?
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– Это значит, парой Нао определенно<!--все-таки - idiffer--> будет Аихара?
   
 
<!--"Yeah, it has got to be Aihara. She's practically no different than your wife!"-->
 
<!--"Yeah, it has got to be Aihara. She's practically no different than your wife!"-->
– Ага, должна быть она<!--а тут можно и «определенно» - idiffer-->. Она практически не отличается от настоящей жены! <!--Ага, кто же ещё? Айхара ему чуть ли не жена!-->
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– Ага, должна быть она<!--а тут можно и «определенно» - idiffer-->. Она практически не отличается от настоящей жены!
   
 
<!--"Who's talking about me?"-->
 
<!--"Who's talking about me?"-->
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<!--Chiaki walked past between me and Mafuyu, and sat down in the seat in front of me. As expected from the ex-Judo Club member, she had casually tied her short hair to the side with a rubber band. Her bag was stuffed with drum sticks and old magazines which were strengthened with sealing tape - she was probably practicing her drumming in the empty space on the rooftop or something.-->
 
<!--Chiaki walked past between me and Mafuyu, and sat down in the seat in front of me. As expected from the ex-Judo Club member, she had casually tied her short hair to the side with a rubber band. Her bag was stuffed with drum sticks and old magazines which were strengthened with sealing tape - she was probably practicing her drumming in the empty space on the rooftop or something.-->
Чиаки прошла мимо меня и Мафую и села на стул впереди меня. Ожидаемо для экс-члена кружка дзюдоистов, она по обыкновению собрала свои короткие волосы на бок и подвязала прорезиненной ленточкой. Её портфель был набит барабанными палочками и старыми журналами, которые были укреплены защитной пленкой – она наверняка училась барабанить где-нибудь в в свободном месте на крыше или ещё где.
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Чиаки прошла мимо меня и Мафую и села на стул впереди меня. Ожидаемо для экс-члена кружка дзюдоистов, она по обыкновению собрала свои короткие волосы по бокам и подвязала прорезиненной ленточкой<!--по идее тут на один бок - idiffer-->. Её портфель был набит барабанными палочками и старыми журналами, которые были укреплены защитной пленкой – она наверняка училась барабанить где-нибудь в в свободном месте на крыше или ещё где.
   
 
<!--"Oh? What's this?" The sharp-eyed Chiaki saw the tickets on my desk.-->
 
<!--"Oh? What's this?" The sharp-eyed Chiaki saw the tickets on my desk.-->
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<!--I took a brief glance at the information about the chorus contest that was printed on the handout. The set piece is Mozart's <Ave verum corpus>. Pretty well selected. It's short and easy to memorize.-->
 
<!--I took a brief glance at the information about the chorus contest that was printed on the handout. The set piece is Mozart's <Ave verum corpus>. Pretty well selected. It's short and easy to memorize.-->
Я быстрым взглядом окинул текст с описанием соревнования, напечатанный на листовке. Заданное произведение – «Ave verum corpus» Моцарта. Неплохой выбор: короткое и легко запоминающееся.
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Я быстрым взглядом окинул текст с описанием соревнования, напечатанный на листовке. Заданное<!--123123, поставил вар который использовался дальше. - idiffer--> произведение – «Ave verum corpus» Моцарта. Неплохой выбор: короткое и легко запоминающееся.
   
 
<!--"Since we've already decided that Nao will be conducting, all we need to do now is to select the person to be the accompaniment."-->
 
<!--"Since we've already decided that Nao will be conducting, all we need to do now is to select the person to be the accompaniment."-->
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Senpai hugged Chiaki, who was walking towards her, and planted a kiss on her forehead.-->
 
Senpai hugged Chiaki, who was walking towards her, and planted a kiss on her forehead.-->
- Я приветствую вашу милую ревность! – сэмпай обняла Чиаки, которая прошагала к ней, и поцеловала её в лоб.
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- Я приветствую вашу милую зависть<!--я вот хз, может лучше ревность? - idiffer-->! – сэмпай обняла Чиаки, которая прошагала к ней, и поцеловала её в лоб.
   
 
<!--"Don't be thinking that I'll forgive Senpai just like this!" Chiaki was still furious despite being hugged in Senpai's arms. I am already used to scenes like these, so I was not too surprised. Senpai do really enjoy flirting around with girls, while Chiaki joined this band all because of Senpai. She should be mad even if Senpai was saying that as a joke. But...... urm, why is Mafuyu angry as well? And she's even glancing at me angrily.-->
 
<!--"Don't be thinking that I'll forgive Senpai just like this!" Chiaki was still furious despite being hugged in Senpai's arms. I am already used to scenes like these, so I was not too surprised. Senpai do really enjoy flirting around with girls, while Chiaki joined this band all because of Senpai. She should be mad even if Senpai was saying that as a joke. But...... urm, why is Mafuyu angry as well? And she's even glancing at me angrily.-->
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Chiaki complained, and I felt the same as she did. Senpai loves things like gambling and contests. Her ingenious schemes has ensured that she had never lost before.-->
 
Chiaki complained, and I felt the same as she did. Senpai loves things like gambling and contests. Her ingenious schemes has ensured that she had never lost before.-->
- Тогда Сэмпай точно победит! – пожаловалась Чиаки, и я был с ней солидарен. Сэмпай обожает спорить и соревноваться, а её хитрые схемы ни разу её не подвели.
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- Тогда Сэмпай точно победит! – пожаловалась Чиаки, и я был с ней солидарен. Сэмпай обожает спорить и соревноваться, а её хитрые схемы подтверждают, что она ни разу не проиграла.<!--схемы ничего не подтверждают. Смысл: схемы гарантировали ей неподимость. - idiffer-->
   
 
<!--"I can handicap myself! Comrade Ebisawa and Comrade Aihara can team up, while I'll be alone by myself. I grant permission for young man to be on the same side as you two. One against three. How about that?"-->
 
<!--"I can handicap myself! Comrade Ebisawa and Comrade Aihara can team up, while I'll be alone by myself. I grant permission for young man to be on the same side as you two. One against three. How about that?"-->
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<!--"That's just you wanting to touch the two girls!"-->
 
<!--"That's just you wanting to touch the two girls!"-->
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- Потрогать других хочешь только ты!<!-- ну вообще тут противопоставление такое: семпай хочет не билет, а полапать девок. - idiffer-->
- Ты просто хочешь их потискать!
 
   
 
<!--"Young man can join us as well, yeah?"-->
 
<!--"Young man can join us as well, yeah?"-->
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Our spy went into a frenzy from that tsukomi of mine. Are you retarded!? Even without the badge, there should be at least someone who can recognize him by his face!-->
 
Our spy went into a frenzy from that tsukomi of mine. Are you retarded!? Even without the badge, there should be at least someone who can recognize him by his face!-->
- А-а, точняк. Нам крышка! – после моего замечания он впал в панику. Ты что, совсем идиот? Даже не будь бейджика, кто-нибудь может знать его в лицо!
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- А-а, точняк. Нам крышка! – после моего цуккоми<!--я голосую за то, чтобы переделать в «шутку», ибо в остальных местах именно так - idiffer--> он впал в панику. Ты что, совсем идиот? Даже не будь бейджика, кто-нибудь может знать его в лицо!
   
 
<!--"So did you two find out what their choice piece is?" Terada asked.-->
 
<!--"So did you two find out what their choice piece is?" Terada asked.-->
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<!--I gave a weak sigh. At the same time, I could feel a gaze piercing through my cheeks - Mafuyu was staring hard at me from her seat beside me.-->
 
<!--I gave a weak sigh. At the same time, I could feel a gaze piercing through my cheeks - Mafuyu was staring hard at me from her seat beside me.-->
Я издал слабый вздох. И тут же чей-то взгляд начал прожигать моё лицо – Мафую впивалась в меня взглядом со своего места.
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Я издал слабый вздох. И тут же чей-то взгляд начал прожигать моё лицо – Мафую смотрела на меня со своего места.<!--уставилась, пялилась? - idiffer-->
   
 
<!--"U-Urm...... What?"-->
 
<!--"U-Urm...... What?"-->
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"There are a few techniques that will help increase the chances of winning the chorus contest. For example, you can deliberately emphasize the strength of the voices; choosing a polyphonic piece; waving the baton in exaggeration...... and so on."-->
 
"There are a few techniques that will help increase the chances of winning the chorus contest. For example, you can deliberately emphasize the strength of the voices; choosing a polyphonic piece; waving the baton in exaggeration...... and so on."-->
- Товарищ Эбисава права, - сказала Кагуразака-сэмпай во время репетиции нашей группы в тот день. – Для того чтобы повысить шансы на победу, можно использовать пару трюков. К примеру, искусственно усилить голоса, выбрать полифоническое произведение, наигранно махать палочкой… и так далее.
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- Товарищ Эбисава права, - сказала Кагуразака-сэмпай во время репетиции нашей группы в тот день. – Для того чтобы повысить шансы на победу, можно использовать пару трюков. К примеру, искусственно усилить голоса, выбрать полифоническуое произведение, наигранно махать палочкой… и так далее.
   
 
<!--"I see......"-->
 
<!--"I see......"-->
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<!--Oi! Don't lump me up together with him! I placed the baton on the music stand. I was rather pissed off. Hey, I'll be really troubled if you push the blame of the disharmony onto me as well!-->
 
<!--Oi! Don't lump me up together with him! I placed the baton on the music stand. I was rather pissed off. Hey, I'll be really troubled if you push the blame of the disharmony onto me as well!-->
Эй! Не ставьте меня с ним в один ряд! Я положил палочку на пульт: меня вывели из себя. Эй, только не спихивайте на меня вину за то, что вы не можете спеть в унисон!
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Эй! Не ставьте меня с ним в один ряд! Я положил палочку на пульт<!-- Пультом ее разве называют? - idiffer-->: меня вывели из себя. Эй, только не спихивайте на меня вину за то, что вы не можете спеть в унисон!
   
 
<!--An awkward silence filled the music room for a short while. The person who broke the silence once more was Chiaki.
 
<!--An awkward silence filled the music room for a short while. The person who broke the silence once more was Chiaki.
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<!--I tried my hardest not to come into eye contact with Mafuyu, and sat myself before the music stand.-->
 
<!--I tried my hardest not to come into eye contact with Mafuyu, and sat myself before the music stand.-->
Я, стараясь избегать взгляда Мафую, сел у пульта дирижёра.
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Я, стараясь избегать взгляда Мафую, сел у пульта дирижёра.<!--еще раз пульт - idiffer-->
   
 
<!--I could hear the singing of my classmates coming from outside of the heavy metal door of the music room. Not just that, but all the classes in school were practicing at this time as well. The voices of hundreds of people were all mixed up together, though it did not sound clear.-->
 
<!--I could hear the singing of my classmates coming from outside of the heavy metal door of the music room. Not just that, but all the classes in school were practicing at this time as well. The voices of hundreds of people were all mixed up together, though it did not sound clear.-->
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<!--What appeared in my mind was the face of another judge — Mrs Hayase, the head teacher of the second year. She looked like an idle and rich lady, but she is actually a really strict middle-aged woman.-->
 
<!--What appeared in my mind was the face of another judge — Mrs Hayase, the head teacher of the second year. She looked like an idle and rich lady, but she is actually a really strict middle-aged woman.-->
Перед моими глазами всплыло лицо другого судьи – Хаясэ-сэнсэй, завуча второго года. Она выглядит прямо как богатая дама без определенных занятий, но строгости ей не занимать.
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Перед моими глазами всплыло лицо другого судьи – Хаясэ-сэнсэй, завуча второго года. Она выглядит прямо как богатая дама без определенных занятий<!--неприкаянная? - idiffer-->, но строгости ей не занимать.
   
 
<!--"Please do not reveal those complicated inside-stories to your students without any reservations!"-->
 
<!--"Please do not reveal those complicated inside-stories to your students without any reservations!"-->
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Terada's voice was incredibly harsh. It felt like she was pressing for his answers by stepping on his head with her shoes.-->
 
Terada's voice was incredibly harsh. It felt like she was pressing for his answers by stepping on his head with her shoes.-->
- Неважно. Ты смог раздобыть какую-нибудь информацию? – голос Тэрады был до ужаса резок. Казалось, что она, стоя у него на голове, выдавливала из него ответы.<!--кажется нюанс тут малость потерян - idiffer-->
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- Неважно. Ты смог раздобыть какую-нибудь информацию? – голос Тэрады был до ужаса резок. Казалось, что она задавала вопросы, стоя у него на голове.<!--кажется нюанс тут малость потерян - idiffer-->
   
 
<!--"Yes Boss! There were a stack of papers piled on their table, which looks like the registration forms. I did my best and snapped a picture of it with my handphone.-->
 
<!--"Yes Boss! There were a stack of papers piled on their table, which looks like the registration forms. I did my best and snapped a picture of it with my handphone.-->
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<!--Just as expected from a school that used to have music as its major, the atmosphere on the day of the chorus contest was really heated. The school was broadcasting Haydn's oratorios in the morning, while the canopy of the music hall was changed into those specially made for the chorus contest, which has the event's name printed on it...... If only they would direct some of the funds used in this event to the various clubs instead.-->
 
<!--Just as expected from a school that used to have music as its major, the atmosphere on the day of the chorus contest was really heated. The school was broadcasting Haydn's oratorios in the morning, while the canopy of the music hall was changed into those specially made for the chorus contest, which has the event's name printed on it...... If only they would direct some of the funds used in this event to the various clubs instead.-->
Как и подобало школе, которая главный упор ставила на музыку, атмосфера в день соревнования была накалена. Утром по школьному радио вещали оратории Гайдна, а в музыкальном зале теперь висел специально подготовленный занавес с вышитым на нём названием мероприятия… Жаль, что они не направили часть этих средств на финансирование кружков.
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Как и подобало школе, которая главный упор ставила на музыку, атмосфера в день соревнования была накалена. Утром по школьному радио вещали оратории Гайдна, а в музыкальном зале теперь висел специально подготовленный занавес с вышитым на нём названием мероприятия… Жаль, что они не направили часть этих средств на финансирование клубов.<!--у нас вроде кружки... - idiffer-->
   
 
<!--It had been an hour since the contest began. Our classmates squeezed themselves like a pack of sardines at the right side of the stage, pried the curtains slightly apart and peeked at the audiences through the gap. The teaching staffs seated at the first row were already showing putting on irritated expressions on their face. They must be tired from listening to <Ave verum corpus> for almost ten consecutive times already.-->
 
<!--It had been an hour since the contest began. Our classmates squeezed themselves like a pack of sardines at the right side of the stage, pried the curtains slightly apart and peeked at the audiences through the gap. The teaching staffs seated at the first row were already showing putting on irritated expressions on their face. They must be tired from listening to <Ave verum corpus> for almost ten consecutive times already.-->
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<!--I walked down the corridor and pushed open the heavy double doors of the music hall. Their performance was at the final chorus of <Ave verum corpus> and was fading into the dark. I took a look at the stage and was surprised at what I saw. Long hair which was tied into two braids — I recognized the back of Kagurazaka-senpai in an instant. She was standing right in the middle of the stage. Facing her was the ensemble of her class, whose grey silhouettes were arranged neatly on the terraced stage.-->
 
<!--I walked down the corridor and pushed open the heavy double doors of the music hall. Their performance was at the final chorus of <Ave verum corpus> and was fading into the dark. I took a look at the stage and was surprised at what I saw. Long hair which was tied into two braids — I recognized the back of Kagurazaka-senpai in an instant. She was standing right in the middle of the stage. Facing her was the ensemble of her class, whose grey silhouettes were arranged neatly on the terraced stage.-->
Я прошёл по коридору и толкнул тяжёлые двери музыкального зала. Они уже пели последние строки «Ave verum corpus», тонувшие в темноте. Я взглянул на сцену и удивился. Длинные волосы, подвязанные в две косички, - я тут же узнал Кагуразаку-сэмпай со спины. Она стояла в центре сцены. Перед ней был ансамбль её класса, чьи серые фигуры выстроились на ступеньках.<!--стройными рядами на ступеньках? - idiffer-->
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Я прошёл по коридору и толкнул тяжёлые двери музыкального зала. Они уже пели последние строки «Ave verum corpus», тонувшие в темноте. Я взглянул на сцену и удивился. Длинные волосы, подвязанные в две косички, - я тут же узнал Кагуразаку-сэмпай со спины. Она стояла в центре сцены. Перед ней был ансамбль её класса, чьи серые фигуры были на ступеньках.<!--стройными рядами на ступеньках? - idiffer-->
   
 
<!--Looking at the clothes that the girls were wearing — even without the veils, one can easily recognize their attires as the habits of nuns. So the school actually allowed them to dress up as that. Well, I guess they are pretty lax about the restrictions.-->
 
<!--Looking at the clothes that the girls were wearing — even without the veils, one can easily recognize their attires as the habits of nuns. So the school actually allowed them to dress up as that. Well, I guess they are pretty lax about the restrictions.-->

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