Editing Talk:Madan no Ou to Vanadis:Volume 09 Chapter 2
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'gave a smile'. Also for 'drop-out', why not 'deserting'. Drop-out sounds too... related to studies. I have encountered that word when talking about education. --[[User:Chancs|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs|talk]]) 14:37, 11 June 2014 (CDT) |
'gave a smile'. Also for 'drop-out', why not 'deserting'. Drop-out sounds too... related to studies. I have encountered that word when talking about education. --[[User:Chancs|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs|talk]]) 14:37, 11 June 2014 (CDT) |
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+ | "Revealed a smile" also sounds great, anything but floated really, while for dropout I'd recommend using deserting. To be honest, that last document that I sent you had all these stuff fixed already and more but I guess you didn't noticed it. [[User:Kuratatsu|Kuratatsu]] ([[User talk:Kuratatsu|talk]]) 19:47, 11 June 2014 (CDT) |
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− | Original : Whenever it counted five hundred soldiers, the Bydgauche army stopped once. Not to take a rest. But only to adjust their lines and quietly take a deep breath. And then, they advanced again. |
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− | Suggested Change 1: Whenever it counted five hundred soldiers, the Bydgauche army stopped once. Not to take a rest''', b'''ut only to adjust their lines and quietly take a deep breath. And then, they advanced again. |
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− | Suggested Change 2: Whenever it counted five hundred soldiers, the Bydgauche army stopped once. Not to take a rest''', b'''ut only to adjust their lines and quietly take a deep breath''', a'''nd then, they advanced again. |
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− | I believe that there a missing comma that needs to be exchanged for a period. |