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− | Sorry, didn't notice the inline comments. I think you're good on most of them. You could consider Tarkas Gladiator Troupe as an alternative name. Also, regarding the "nail hitting him on the head," Consider "The nail hitting the head, Orba turned away." or usage of "Hitting home-run," "Hitting base," "Hit bulls-eye" "Right on the mark" as possible alternatives. --[[User:Detalz|Detalz]] ([[User talk:Detalz|Detalz]]) 15:43 July 24, 2013 |
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