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"Just like that I got the thing from Zenovia that would make me a newly made live coal. " -This line seems very awkward. I changed live coal to "man" , but it still doesn't feel right. In this sentence is Ise worried that the other girls might burn him into charcoal if does make children with Zenovia or something along those lines? (Vol 4, life 1) -[[User:Hiro Hayase|Hiro Hayase]] 15:02, 26 February 2012 (CST) |
"Just like that I got the thing from Zenovia that would make me a newly made live coal. " -This line seems very awkward. I changed live coal to "man" , but it still doesn't feel right. In this sentence is Ise worried that the other girls might burn him into charcoal if does make children with Zenovia or something along those lines? (Vol 4, life 1) -[[User:Hiro Hayase|Hiro Hayase]] 15:02, 26 February 2012 (CST) |
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| − | Hm, a better statement would be "Like this I got elements from |
+ | Hm, a better statement would be "Like this I got elements from Zenovia that created further friction." |
It's extremely vague as to what the elements mean. |
It's extremely vague as to what the elements mean. |
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The next line of perversion is a bit vague as well if you noticed, is it at the place he met Zenovia or the place down there? |
The next line of perversion is a bit vague as well if you noticed, is it at the place he met Zenovia or the place down there? |
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Revision as of 02:45, 27 February 2012
High School DxD
"Just like that I got the thing from Zenovia that would make me a newly made live coal. " -This line seems very awkward. I changed live coal to "man" , but it still doesn't feel right. In this sentence is Ise worried that the other girls might burn him into charcoal if does make children with Zenovia or something along those lines? (Vol 4, life 1) -Hiro Hayase 15:02, 26 February 2012 (CST)
Hm, a better statement would be "Like this I got elements from Zenovia that created further friction." It's extremely vague as to what the elements mean. The next line of perversion is a bit vague as well if you noticed, is it at the place he met Zenovia or the place down there? -Akuma
