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In part 3, the words [Right at the moment, a thought flash-passed.], while technically not wrong, is rather awkward. I recommend changing it. My attempt: [Right then, a sudden thought occurred to him.][[User:Valthan|Valthan]] ([[User talk:Valthan|talk]]) 23:18, 7 August 2014 (CDT)

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In part 3, the words [Right at the moment, a thought flash-passed.], while technically not wrong, is rather awkward. I recommend changing it. My attempt: [Right then, a sudden thought occurred to him.]Valthan (talk) 23:18, 7 August 2014 (CDT)

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