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Couldnt that be changed into: "'''that long'''." |
Couldnt that be changed into: "'''that long'''." |
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| + | no offense, but the latter half of the chapter feels like reading from machine translation. |
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| + | Maybe you need to make it more smooth? [[User:Xenocross|Xenocross]] 03:54, 19 March 2012 (CDT) |
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| + | In Part 3 when describing the Hell Cat's claw's effect, 'iron steel' feels clumsy. As steel is refined iron, it sounds redundant. Could this be changed to either 'iron' or 'steel'? Also, undid an edit to a mistake on my part. [[User:Dezz|Dezz]] ([[User talk:Dezz|talk]]) 23:59, 9 October 2014 (CDT) |
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- it seems that he hasn’t lost consciousness that much period of time.
Couldnt that be changed into: "that long."
no offense, but the latter half of the chapter feels like reading from machine translation. Maybe you need to make it more smooth? Xenocross 03:54, 19 March 2012 (CDT)
In Part 3 when describing the Hell Cat's claw's effect, 'iron steel' feels clumsy. As steel is refined iron, it sounds redundant. Could this be changed to either 'iron' or 'steel'? Also, undid an edit to a mistake on my part. Dezz (talk) 23:59, 9 October 2014 (CDT)
