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| − | :There's nothing technically wrong with it, but I'd recommend "wasted |
+ | :There's nothing technically wrong with it, but I'd recommend "wasted our time" in place of "spent our lives" and removing the "for." [[User:Smidge204|Smidge204]] 11:02, 16 February 2007 (PST) |
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| + | :I went with "spent our life force" as an intermediate solution. Removing the "for" still leaves the last phrase a bit awkward, due to the implicit down vs. the explicit up. May sub "as much as two meters deep," eventually.--[[User:Nutcase|Nutcase]] 04:50, 17 February 2007 (PST) |
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"That was exactly where I and Koizumi had spent our lives digging for up to two meters."
"Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change? --umiman 03:23, 16 February 2007 (PST)
- There's nothing technically wrong with it, but I'd recommend "wasted our time" in place of "spent our lives" and removing the "for." Smidge204 11:02, 16 February 2007 (PST)
- I went with "spent our life force" as an intermediate solution. Removing the "for" still leaves the last phrase a bit awkward, due to the implicit down vs. the explicit up. May sub "as much as two meters deep," eventually.--Nutcase 04:50, 17 February 2007 (PST)
