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thank you eusth! XD<br> |
thank you eusth! XD<br> |
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"admittedly it doesn't look too Gothloli-ish." << that's where a fan-art worth it :3 |
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+ | Just now, I just did some rather massive editing on this, frequently changing sentence structure and words. Somewhere I read that I should open a section on the Talk-page when I do this, so here it is. In many cases I tried to improve the flow of the text, make it more succinct or further strengthen the mood I felt. Apart from correcting slight grammatical errors and things like that. Any feedback? Did I succeed at my attempts? Did I make it worse? Where? Was I too disrespectful towards the translator (which was in now way intended)?--[[User:Kadi|Kadi]] 15:13, 24 April 2010 (UTC) |
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I wonder if Daiya is smarter than Maria? And even if he is, Maria has the advantage of over 70 years of experience... Liardiary 22:44, 21 April 2010 (UTC)Liardiary
smarter or not, i'm sure he will become a formidable opponent if he really wanted to... and it will be more interesting if Daiya had received the Box from before the Rejecting Class... hehehe
I wonder if Kazuki will obtain a box later on...
What kind of box would Kazuki obtain? box of everyday living? O.O I think that would contradict his entire being somewhat...
hmm... i don't think he will ever receive the box even if it's emergency
I don't know about that... He did betray Maria, even if for a little while. So, he might be tempted... Liardiary 11:48, 22 April 2010 (UTC)Liardiary
And the sentence about the girl made me Intrigued. Maybe that girl links Kazuki to the box?
........ i really want to see that Gothloli Maria..... orz
- [1] - well, admittedly it doesn't look too Gothloli-ish. :D EusthEnoptEron 07:38, 24 April 2010 (UTC)
o_O today's lesson : check the illustration page OFTEN
thank you eusth! XD
"admittedly it doesn't look too Gothloli-ish." << that's where a fan-art worth it :3
Rather massive editing by Kadi
Just now, I just did some rather massive editing on this, frequently changing sentence structure and words. Somewhere I read that I should open a section on the Talk-page when I do this, so here it is. In many cases I tried to improve the flow of the text, make it more succinct or further strengthen the mood I felt. Apart from correcting slight grammatical errors and things like that. Any feedback? Did I succeed at my attempts? Did I make it worse? Where? Was I too disrespectful towards the translator (which was in now way intended)?--Kadi 15:13, 24 April 2010 (UTC)