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| - Rizo536 -
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| 1) "I'M NOT HAPPY AT THAT AT ALL!" (Part 2)
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| What's wrong: Redundant wording (still grammatically correct but not easy on the ears or line of thought)
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| What I did: Changed this line to fix redundancy.
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| We have 2 possible outcomes:
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| "I'M NOT HAPPY WITH THAT AT ALL!"
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| "I'M NOT HAPPY ABOUT THAT AT ALL!"
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| I went with option 1 via personal preference.
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| The rest is fixing grammar errors.
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| On a side note, what's the message behind "Sexual beast"? Is it a compliment or an insult in that context? Cuz the entire time I was just thinking "Sexy beast!"
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| [[User:Rizo536|Rizo536 - Actual Grammar Nazi]] ([[User talk:Rizo536|talk]])
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