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== Part 4's edit ==
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Under my edit in Part 4, it is mostly minor edits, but there contains two major edits.
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The first, after Rudeus is searching in the library for books:
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Previous) Also I found a book from the sea (tribe?) I sought out.
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After) Also, I found a book from the Sea Tribe I sought out..
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The second, after Rudeus makes purchases for common supplies:Previous) I make a proper purchase of a bunch of paper, ink, and pen, the paper is held together by a cord, then I headed back.
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After) I make a proper purchase of a bunch of paper (held together by a cord),ink, and pen, then I headed back.
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What are your thoughts?

Revision as of 06:54, 28 July 2014

Metastasis is used throughout the chapter to describe the teleportation. But, in nowadays English it is rarely used to describe teleportation and currently describes: "Metastasis, or metastatic disease, is the spread of a cancer from one organ to another." (wikipedia) Not only wikipedia, but other dictionary's answers tend to relate to transferring of cancer. Although they include "change of position, state, or form" too, I actually had to look up metastasis to find out its meaning.

Is it possible to switch with a less ambiguous, more commonly used word? One with more universal terminology such as:

  1. teleportation
  2. transport
  3. transportation
  4. space-time alteration
  5. space-time leaps
  6. etc.

? jwood 22:35, 27 July 2014 (CDT)

Part 4's edit

Under my edit in Part 4, it is mostly minor edits, but there contains two major edits.

The first, after Rudeus is searching in the library for books: Previous) Also I found a book from the sea (tribe?) I sought out. After) Also, I found a book from the Sea Tribe I sought out.. . . The second, after Rudeus makes purchases for common supplies:Previous) I make a proper purchase of a bunch of paper, ink, and pen, the paper is held together by a cord, then I headed back. After) I make a proper purchase of a bunch of paper (held together by a cord),ink, and pen, then I headed back. What are your thoughts?