Talk:Chrome Shelled Regios:Volume1 Prologue

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"Besides which, Nina understood it wasn’t possible anyone in the safe was safe." Is "safe" suppose to be city? Just making sure. Thanks.


"Nina’s line of sight became higher, and then the bus moved as if it was skipping." --> "Nina’s line of sight became higher and the bus began to move as if it was skipping."

I want to change it to that sentence but not sure if it would detract from meaning. Eschiver 16:04, 14 April 2009 (UTC) Eschiver


"Since it was no joke when the city moved, the driver and all the passengers could only wait in the small waiting area." The "no joke" part is vague. Does it mean "dangerous?" Eschiver 16:10, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver

"“Even here……” Again, the sound of the city’s movement drowned him out. A strong gust of wind blew past them. Layfon reached out a hand to steady Leerin on her shoulder." --> "“Even here……” Again, the sound of the city’s movement drowned him out. A strong gust of wind blew past them. Layfon reached out and placed his hand on Leerin's shoulder to steady her." Eschiver 16:16, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver

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