Talk:Kokoro Connect:Volume 4 Chapter 3
Instead of "landmine" (which does kind of work, "It was a landmine topic that Joan brought up", as it means that it's a dangerous to talk about. "Minefield" would also work,) how about "taboo"? This makes it more generally an undesirable topic to talk about.
Instead of "Truth be told, Aoki knew a single strawberry was probably just a result of a margin of error."
How about: "Truth be told, Aoki knew a single strawberry was probably just a added on a whim"?
I kind of want to change:
"By the way, from my standpoint, I can't pretend I didn't see this you know."
to "By the way, as a woman, I can't pretend that I didn't see this you know." or even "By the way, I can't just pretend that I didn't see this you know of Yui's."
"Standpoint" sounds a bit too formal, like it's a lawyer defending their client's "standpoint".
By the way, I don't think saying "that" makes it too formal O.o.
Also, I don't really know what Aoki's "defining trait" is O.o. Is it his ability to poke fun at people? And because Inaba shut him up so quickly made him feel endangered?
