Talk:Kokoro Connect:Volume 1 Chapter 4

Editing

After all, no matter the place or time, where there is a corporation, there are outlaws. 

Unkani: "Corporation"? Seems like an odd word to use here. "Outlaw" is also a strange word to be using here. Deviant, rebel(on a second thought, this is also a very harsh word), or the oft-loved word,(oops, I forgot to finish this thought) delinquent, could be good alternatives.

Pudding321: This is a metaphor used by the writer. The writer will extrapolate this later.

Unkani: Anyways, the main issue is that "corporation" implies a company, rather than a "society". It's also odd to refer to students as "outlaws", as that brings the negative connotation of them being hardened criminals, while what's happening here is a more minor-- civil disobedience. Typically, translators like to use "delinquent", though I'm not entirely convinced that this would be the most appropriate word either. I suppose a close word that would describe the concept here would be "insubordination", a purposeful refusal to comply with the rules.

The Literature club reorganizes the activity record into...

Having added a "The" before "Literature club" made me realize that I'm not quite sure if the Literature Club should be a proper noun or not. Also, it seems that in Ch. 1, "Literature Study Club" was used, before it simply became the "literature club" Unkani 20:00, 9 August 2012 (CDT)