Talk:Kokoro Connect:Volume 1 Chapter 1

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Regarding the description of Iori's hair:

her thin smooth hair that was as fine as silk didn't seem to have any substance to it

I think I understand what you were trying to get at here. "Persistence" and "insistence" are just odd words, so I changed it to "substance" Unkani 02:12, 7 August 2012 (CDT)

If you're changing <Bunken News> to <Bunken Bews>, don't forget the other chapters. This change seems particularly odd though. Unkani (talk) 16:28, 30 August 2012 (CDT)