Talk:Rakuin no Monshou:Volume1 Prologue

"However, ever since the winter her once robust grandfather got injured, he had become bedridden." I think that "injured" here is used incorrectly, as in the raw it just mentions that his health deteriorates 「ただ、壮健そのものであった祖父がある冬以来、身体を壊し、床に伏せるようになってしまった。」. -Kiydon

• I translated 身体を壊し as 'injured (壊し) his body (身体)', but you're right that 身体 can also mean health. Considering the context, you're suggestion's better, so I'll use that.

Here's some more. "As the sky began to blend into the same colour as the surface," "surface" here probably should be replaced with "ground", as 地面 in 地面と同じ色 refers to the earth's surface or the ground. --Kiydon

In this sentence, "If only father had the resolve to let me, on the bridal night, I would readily slice open the sleeping head of my husband to be!", it sounds a bit awkward, so a better way to phrase this would be "If only father had the resolve to let me, on the bridal night, slice open the sleeping head of my husband to be, I would readily do so!" Also, I'm just going through the chapters one by one, so do you want me to keep post these suggestions on the discussion page? I'm already directly editing the more minor fixes. --Kiydon