Talk:Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume2 Chapter2

For the part that goes "Ellis thrust her sword at the back of kamito's neck" it doesn't seem to correspond with the picture. Should it be changed to the side of his neck or under his chin?

unnecessary words

There are a lot of sentences, that have words, that are redundant. They don't hold any information neither do they make the sentence sound better, they are just there. For example 'This place was a salon café that was inside the academy'.

Readers already know that salon cafe is a place, there is no need to actually spell it. The words 'that was' are also unnecessary, they make the proposition too cumbersome. Wouldn't something like 'This was a salon café inside the academy' or 'They were at a salon cafe inside the academy' sound better?