Talk:Shakugan no Shana:Volume3 Summary
If any editor awares of this, please fix these errors:
"... as the boy's mother says that she must not let herselft get kissed so simply and if her son tryes something, just punch him in the face." -> "tries"
"Now changing to a defensive posture, Yuji tryes to explains it but accidentaly leaks out the jealousy that he felt after seeing her with another guy." -> "tries"
"Surprised by how he noticed it and felt the same than her after see him with Kazumi ..." -> "... way she did ..." Maybe, I don't think my correction would fit the best here though.
"These two young boys were in the same class than Shana and Yuji ..." -> "with"
"... he still didn't understand them completely, taking this as a joke, Chigusa agreeds." -> "agreed"
"... Shana realizes that the meaning of all the feelings that she got before, in an extreme pain on his chest for the preocupation of losing after this girl." -> "her", "preoccupation"
I hope that some minor errors I spotted was everything that flaw this great summary version of the book :)
-Some random reader-
Ufffff... though I would like to say that it was everything, sadly it wasn't. I don't have time tonight so I just went though and corrected the obvious spelling mistakes, but the sentence structure is quite messed up and it's hard to understand what the pronouns are referring to at times. There's too much liberal use of jargon and so it almost seems to me like you have to have watched the anime to be able to understand this summary. Also, just my opinion, but this seems like a bit too detailed for a summary for a volume.
That said, I think this page should be unlocked... --jonathanasdf 03:25, 10 April 2011 (UCT)
The first time reading the summary, I was just skimming through the page. Now after I have had a good detail look at it, I have to agree with you. At some points the summary gives a feeling that it is a spoken piece of summary which your friend is telling you. It feels like the summary takes common understandings about SnS was a given that it becomes too detailed here but not giving enough information there. Require a re-write I think. After all, summarize a novel is not an easy thing...
P.S: Although I did point out some obvious mistakes, my English skill is not that good (in fact, I'm struggling to make my point clear to you now, I just hate written English). So please pardon me for any grammar failure m(_ _)m
-Some random reader-
