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Although there was no set curfew, conversely, Orihime was obliged to decide by her own will and judgment the appropriate hours for a fifteen-year-old girl to return home then adhere to that time.
 
Although there was no set curfew, conversely, Orihime was obliged to decide by her own will and judgment the appropriate hours for a fifteen-year-old girl to return home then adhere to that time.
   
But on this day, she was quite delayed, failing to return home until 11pm. This was due to the dragon encounter at the uncomfortable Witch Mansion that she had sneaked into.
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But on this day, she was quite delayed, failing to return home until 11 pm. This was due to the dragon encounter at the uncomfortable Witch Mansion that she had sneaked into.
   
 
The first thing Orihime did as soon as she got home was to make her way to her grandfather's room.
 
The first thing Orihime did as soon as she got home was to make her way to her grandfather's room.
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"A job, you say... Now that's quite sudden," murmured Asya in response to the sudden notification.
 
"A job, you say... Now that's quite sudden," murmured Asya in response to the sudden notification.
   
"Actually, we were hired quite some time ago to help conduct a ritual. However, the matter was delayed repeatedly because our side was unable to locate a Grave Good for the covenant ritual. The client seems to be both rich and well-connected. During the call yesterday, they said they have secured the artifact already. Hence, it should be smooth sailing from this point onwards."
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"Actually, we were hired quite some time ago to help conduct a ritual. However, the matter was delayed repeatedly because our side was unable to locate a Grave Good for the covenant ritual. The client seems to be both rich and well-connected. During the call yesterday, they said they have secured the artifact already. Hence, it should be smooth sailing from this point onward."
   
 
The two new members never expected this type of job to fall upon them in the first place.
 
The two new members never expected this type of job to fall upon them in the first place.
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"This time, it seems like it's my turn to go 'what the heck'..."
 
"This time, it seems like it's my turn to go 'what the heck'..."
   
It was 6pm the following day after Hal was informed of the urgent job.
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It was 6 pm the following day after Hal was informed of the urgent job.
   
 
This conversation took place between Hal and Orihime after they met in the Juujouji residence's Japanese-style room.
 
This conversation took place between Hal and Orihime after they met in the Juujouji residence's Japanese-style room.
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Before Orihime could say anything, Hal changed the subject.
 
Before Orihime could say anything, Hal changed the subject.
   
"As you already know, humanity was forced to coexist with dragonkind in this century. Thus, the existence of 'serpents' became gospel to those who worry about the security of neighboring areas. Namely, those created through the ancient knowledge known as magic... the giant creatures named leviathans."
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"As you already know, humanity was forced to coexist with dragon-kind in this century. Thus, the existence of 'serpents' became gospel to those who worry about the security of neighboring areas. Namely, those created through the ancient knowledge known as magic... the giant creatures named leviathans."
   
 
Artificial monsters created by magic to oppose the dragons.
 
Artificial monsters created by magic to oppose the dragons.
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"Come on, words like 'tomboy' or 'modern kid' are already outdated in twenty-first-century Japan, right? Using such a retro choice of words is really quite fitting for a sheltered high-class lady like you. Besides, your 'strong at fighting' confession is really urging me to make a snide remark. However—"
 
"Come on, words like 'tomboy' or 'modern kid' are already outdated in twenty-first-century Japan, right? Using such a retro choice of words is really quite fitting for a sheltered high-class lady like you. Besides, your 'strong at fighting' confession is really urging me to make a snide remark. However—"
   
Glancing aloofly at Orihime who seemed airheaded in certain ways, Hal said, "That's not where the issue lies. You are too upstanding, too wholesome... It's impossible for you to share your soul with 'serpents,' the close relatives of dragons."
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Glancing aloofly at Orihime who seemed air-headed in certain ways, Hal said, "That's not where the issue lies. You are too upstanding, too wholesome... It's impossible for you to share your soul with 'serpents,' the close relatives of dragons."
   
 
"Wholesome?"
 
"Wholesome?"
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Orihime was probably trying to recall that girl's name. With a labored expression of pondering, she said, "Asya-san, if I recall correctly? She looks so delicate and dream-like, giving off such a frail impression. But she's a very powerful witch, isn't she?"
 
Orihime was probably trying to recall that girl's name. With a labored expression of pondering, she said, "Asya-san, if I recall correctly? She looks so delicate and dream-like, giving off such a frail impression. But she's a very powerful witch, isn't she?"
   
"Bullseye."
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"Bulls-eye."
   
 
Hal expressed great approval of what had caught Orihime's eye.
 
Hal expressed great approval of what had caught Orihime's eye.
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Only those with mental strength and sensibilities transcending conventional boundaries were able to attain greatness.
 
Only those with mental strength and sensibilities transcending conventional boundaries were able to attain greatness.
   
"Asya's body and mind easily grew accustomed to the path of unorthodoxy. She is more vicious than anyone in combat and definitely barbaric, almost rivaling the dragons. That already makes her an unprecedented monster."
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"Asya's body and mind easily grew accustomed to the path of the unorthodox. She is more vicious than anyone in combat and definitely barbaric, almost rivaling the dragons. That already makes her an unprecedented monster."
   
 
"W-Wait, Haruga-kun, how could you describe a girl in that manner!?"
 
"W-Wait, Haruga-kun, how could you describe a girl in that manner!?"
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Handling Asya also took a very long time.
 
Handling Asya also took a very long time.
   
It was currently after 10pm. Utterly exhausted, Hal made his way home on his own. Then roughly five minutes away from his messy house—
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It was currently after 10 pm. Utterly exhausted, Hal made his way home on his own. Then roughly five minutes away from his messy house—
   
 
Hal felt someone's gaze. On the dim road at night, a girl was staring at him with a sardonic smile.
 
Hal felt someone's gaze. On the dim road at night, a girl was staring at him with a sardonic smile.
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"Changed?"
 
"Changed?"
   
"Yes. Magical, spiritual and mysterious energies, miasma... That place is filled with such energies belonging to the path of unorthodoxy. Whether water, soil or air, everything has become different from that of ordinary land."
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"Yes. Magical, spiritual and mysterious energies, miasma... That place is filled with such energies belonging to the path of the unorthodox. Whether water, soil or air, everything has become different from that of ordinary land."
   
 
This time, it was Asya's turn to speak to Orihime who was staring in wide-eyed amazement.
 
This time, it was Asya's turn to speak to Orihime who was staring in wide-eyed amazement.
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"My tool of the trade, it's called the Clockwork Mage."
 
"My tool of the trade, it's called the Clockwork Mage."
   
Answering Orihime's inquiry, Hal lightly lifted up in the silvercrafted pocket watch.
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Answering Orihime's inquiry, Hal lightly lifted up in the silver-crafted pocket watch.
   
 
This was the memento he had discovered in his father's study soon after returning to Tokyo New Town. An old-fashioned mechanical watch with hundreds of turning parts such as gears, winders, springs and oscillators.
 
This was the memento he had discovered in his father's study soon after returning to Tokyo New Town. An old-fashioned mechanical watch with hundreds of turning parts such as gears, winders, springs and oscillators.
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"No, Juujouji, I was born in the same year as you. I'm still a young and tender fifteen-year-old."
 
"No, Juujouji, I was born in the same year as you. I'm still a young and tender fifteen-year-old."
   
"Somehow it feels really wrong to hear Haruomi calling himself young and tender... Oh by the way, I'm only fifteen as well, like everyone here. A girl who outblooms even a flower."
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"Somehow it feels really wrong to hear Haruomi calling himself young and tender... Oh by the way, I'm only fifteen as well, like everyone here. A girl who out-blooms even a flower."
   
 
"Say, Asya, didn't you ravenously wolf down a large amount of edible chrysanthemums or some other kind of flower earlier?"
 
"Say, Asya, didn't you ravenously wolf down a large amount of edible chrysanthemums or some other kind of flower earlier?"
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After a moment of thinking, Asya began to explain.
 
After a moment of thinking, Asya began to explain.
   
"This includes Sumerian and Coptic languages, Ancient Greek, Latin, and various languages used by modern humans. There's also their own language, Hyperborean, as well as the runic symbols of Ruruk Soun which are said to have gathered all magical wisdom possessed by dragonkind... In addition, elites have very strong magical power, making super high-level magic as easy to perform as breathing for them."
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"This includes Sumerian and Coptic languages, Ancient Greek, Latin, and various languages used by modern humans. There's also their own language, Hyperborean, as well as the runic symbols of Ruruk Soun which are said to have gathered all magical wisdom possessed by dragon-kind... In addition, elites have very strong magical power, making super high-level magic as easy to perform as breathing for them."
   
 
"You mean magic like the spell Haruga-kun just used?"
 
"You mean magic like the spell Haruga-kun just used?"
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The giant red dragon had flown to the Rockefeller Center twenty-odd years ago.
 
The giant red dragon had flown to the Rockefeller Center twenty-odd years ago.
   
Since his self-introduction was simply "I am the king and representative of dragonkind," the people of Earth gave him another nickname. Namely, "Hannibal."
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Since his self-introduction was simply "I am the king and representative of dragon-kind," the people of Earth gave him another nickname. Namely, "Hannibal."
   
 
The name of the famous ancient Carthaginian general who had ravaged the Roman Republic<!--JP text says Empire, but that's too inaccurate--> in the past...
 
The name of the famous ancient Carthaginian general who had ravaged the Roman Republic<!--JP text says Empire, but that's too inaccurate--> in the past...
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In technical parlance, an artifact like this mirror would be called the "magical apparatus for enshrined object emulation."
 
In technical parlance, an artifact like this mirror would be called the "magical apparatus for enshrined object emulation."
   
Once the covenant ritual was completed, it would become the leviathan's core&mdash;the Heartmetal&mdash;and start functioning as the cardiac organ of the super lifeform closely related to dragonkind.
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Once the covenant ritual was completed, it would become the leviathan's core&mdash;the Heartmetal&mdash;and start functioning as the cardiac organ of the super life-form closely related to dragon-kind.
   
 
"Okay, with this, the altar's preparations are done."
 
"Okay, with this, the altar's preparations are done."
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Even if the medium was wireless or a conventional phone, in the end, the same result could still be obtained.
 
Even if the medium was wireless or a conventional phone, in the end, the same result could still be obtained.
   
"O queen who gazes down on all creation with the eyes of the great sorceress, O noble advisor who possesses infinite wisdom."
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"O queen who gazes down on all creation with the eyes of the great sorceress, O noble adviser who possesses infinite wisdom."
   
 
"You are the one wielding authority. By your pale and noble hands, heaven and earth is nurtured, guided and shaped."
 
"You are the one wielding authority. By your pale and noble hands, heaven and earth is nurtured, guided and shaped."
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"How on earth..."
 
"How on earth..."
   
Perched on some school's roof, the lifeform was gazing down at the altar&mdash;
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Perched on some school's roof, the life-form was gazing down at the altar&mdash;
   
 
A winged dragon. The scales on its body's surface were bronze in color.
 
A winged dragon. The scales on its body's surface were bronze in color.

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