Editing Talk:Mahouka Koukou no Rettousei:Volume 6 Chapter 7

(Correction suggestion:  Inconsistency noted between 'Dojigiri' and 'Dokigiri', unless the two are in fact different words.)  (Personal reaction to the chapter:  Incredible squeeing.  I note that this is the first time in my memory that Miyuki's bro-con nature has been directly stated, rather than just strongly implied, in the narration ('Miyuki's answers always automatically triggered her bro-con concerns'--actually, that prompts an editing question as well, regarding whether 'triggered' should be 'reflected' or similar, or perhaps whether it should be 'were always automatically triggered by' or similar...  hm.).  Great amusement (and of course the squeeing) at the scene near the end, comparing it to her calm denial of that sort of possibility when talking with Honoka in the previous volume.  And, of course, it would be an incredible shame by this point if the series someday ended without that line ever having been crossed.  Aside from anything else, I'm very curious about what sort of superweapon children they have...  in any case, delighted to read this, and as always very grateful for the translating done!  Thank you very much!)  -[[Special:Contributions/180.43.16.157|180.43.16.157]] 06:13, 5 February 2013 (CST)


'Immediately becoming aware of that situation':  with the length of time that had passed, the word 'Immediately' prompts cognitive dissonance.  What word in the text does it correspond to?  *curiosity*  An alternative interpretation would be that Tatsuya immediately noticed that Miyuki was holding her breath, but in that case he should have noticed it getting closer and closer to him (and reacted) up until that moment.  A different choice of word/s may be worthwhile, depending on the text in question.  -[[User:Multipartite|Multipartite]] ([[User talk:Multipartite|talk]]) 09:23, 21 March 2013 (CDT)  [Edit:  Moved from improper placement in Volume discussion.  *great happiness at previous suggestion having been followed* -[[User:Multipartite|Multipartite]] ([[User talk:Multipartite|talk]]) 13:11, 30 March 2013 (CDT)]