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=== Part 3 ===
 
=== Part 3 ===
   
"Ane-sama, it’s me, Ais."
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"Ane-sama, it’s me Ais."
   
 
"It’s Le-la."
 
"It’s Le-la."
   
Guided by Harrigan's clothes, the two young witches – Ais Aishuria Haindora and Lela Laylah Haindora, who ran up the hill to arrive, bowed down toward Harrigan as she stood naked on the bath-house floor.
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Guided by Harrigan clothes, the two young witches – Ais Aishuria Haindora and Lela Laylah Haindora, who run up the hill to arrive, bowed down toward Harrigan as she stood naked on the bath house floor.
   
The daughters of Harrigan, in order to show that they’re part of her clan, share the same third name.
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The daughters of Harrigan, in order to show that they’re part of her clan, they have the same third name.
   
 
"What’s the matter?"
 
"What’s the matter?"
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Putting a smile on her face, the witch with a large build asked.
 
Putting a smile on her face, the witch with a large build asked.
   
"Sorry for calling you out like this. I need your help."
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"Sorry for calling you out deliberately. I need you to help."
   
 
"Yeah, don’t worry."
 
"Yeah, don’t worry."
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The two of them gave the impression of being around their mid-to-late teens.
 
The two of them gave the impression of being around their mid-to-late teens.
   
The one with the large build and pleasant smile was Ais. In comparison with Lela, she was taller, and the parts which should come out on her body have a great volume. She gave off the aura of an adult.
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The one with the large build and pleasant smile was Ais. In comparison with Lela, she was taller, and the parts which should come out on her body have a great volume. She gave the aura of a grow-up.
   
 
On the other hand, Leyla’s physique wasn’t much different from Yuuki….rather than that, the parts which should come out were less than Yuuki’s. After all, if truth be told, she was tiny breasted.
 
On the other hand, Leyla’s physique wasn’t much different from Yuuki….rather than that, the parts which should come out were less than Yuuki’s. After all, if truth be told, she was tiny breasted.
   
However, both Ais and Lela wore clothes which exposed lots of skin. In Lela’s case, she had some kind of short skirt made of countless amulets coiling around her waist which stood out.
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However, both Ais and Lela wore clothes which exposed lots of skin. In Lela’s case, she had some kind of short skirt made of countless amulets coiling around her waist which standed out.
   
 
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[[Image:Naga01 047.jpg|175px|thumb]]
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"I want you to carry Yuuki."
 
"I want you to carry Yuuki."
   
Harrigan stuck out her right index finger and pointed it toward her feet.
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Harrigan sticked out her right index finger and pointed it toward her feet.
   
"Just what has Yuuki done now…"
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"Just what have Yuuki done again…"
   
While making a wry smile, Ais moved her eyes outside the bathtub. Once she noticed that it wasn’t just Yuuki, her breath was taken away.
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While Making a wry smile, Ais moved her eyes outside the bathtub. Once she noticed that it wasn’t just Yuuki, her breath was taken away.
   
 
"Wait, is that a man?!"
 
"Wait, is that a man?!"
   
Lela, who had the same expression until now raised her eyebrows as well with a twitch.
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Lela, who had the same expression until now, as well raised her eyebrows with a twitch.
   
"Could he be an assassin sent by the Chu-rch?"
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"Could he be an assassin sent by the chu-rch?"
   
The hair of the two girls shook because of the goosebumps.
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The hair of the two girls shaked because of the goosebumps.
   
 
"No, don’t panic. It’s nothing like that. Probably."
 
"No, don’t panic. It’s nothing like that. Probably."
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"…..Huh?"
 
"…..Huh?"
   
Ais and Lela tilted their heads in puzzlement.
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Ais and Lela cocked their heads in puzzlement.
   
 
I think the novel says: Harrigan explained quickly all that happened until now.
 
I think the novel says: Harrigan explained quickly all that happened until now.
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"So something like that happened?"
 
"So something like that happened?"
   
Ais opened her eyes wide while looking at both the man and Harrigan.
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Ais opened widely her eyes while looking at both the man and Harrigan.
   
On the other hand, the daughter named Lela didn’t seem to show any surprise.
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On the other hand, the daughter named Lela didn’t seem to show any surprisement.
   
 
Speaking with a monotonous tone
 
Speaking with a monotonous tone
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"Then, what should we do, ane-sama?"
 
"Then, what should we do, ane-sama?"
   
"In any case, we can only inquire information from this guy. That’s why I called you, thinking that you would help me carry the both of them. Lela will help to establish mutual communication with this guy."
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"In any case, we can only inquiry information from this guy. That’s why I called you, thinking that you would help me carrying both of them. Lela will help to establish a mutual communication with this guy."
   
There was a reason for what Harrigan is saying. Lela possesses a magic that allows communication with a foreigner that only speak their own language.
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There was a reason for what Harrigan is saying. Lela possess a magic that allows communication with a foreigner that only speak its own language.
   
 
"Understood, but…"
 
"Understood, but…"
   
While nodding, Lela tilts her head...
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While nodding, Lela cocked her head in puzzlement..
   
"It would be a different story if he was a foreig-ner, but, it’s the first time for me to establish a mutual understanding with someone who comes from a diffe-rent world."
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"It would be different story if he was a foreig-ner, but, it’s the first time for me to establish a mutual understanding with someone who comes from a diffe-rent world."
   
"Give it a try and if it fails, at that time we will think of some other method."
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"Give it a try and if it fails, we will think of some other way at that time."
   
"Got i-t."
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"Got tha-t."
   
 
"Ais, I’ll entrust those two to you."
 
"Ais, I’ll entrust those two to you."
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"Yes, ane-sama."
 
"Yes, ane-sama."
   
Ais grabbed the body of the unconscious Yuuki, who was completely naked, with both hands and lightly lifted her up. She put Yuuki on her right shoulder. Then, while holding Yuuki’s body, she bent her waist and did the same with the man drenched in water.
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Ais grabbed with both hands the body of the unconscious Yuuki, who was completely naked, and lightly lifted it. She put Yuuki on her right shoulder. Then, while holding Yuuki’s body, she bent her waist and did the same with the man drenched in water.
   
It’s true that compared to Lela or Yuuki, Ais had a bigger build. However, she wasn’t a giant. In fact, Harrigan was taller than her. Judging by her looks, her muscles didn’t seen to be specially developed and yet, that physical strength.
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It’s true that compared to Lela or Yuuki, Ais had a bigger build. Nevertheless, she wasn’t a giant. In fact, Harrigan was taller than her. Judging by her looks, her muscles didn’t seen to be specially developed and yet, that physical strength.
   
Ais seemed to be the owner of a monstrous strength, which one wouldn’t guess from her appearance.
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Aisu seemed to be the owner of a monstrous strength, which one wouldn’t guess from her appearance.
   
 
"Where should I carry them ane-sama?"
 
"Where should I carry them ane-sama?"
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Ais asked casually as if not sensing the weight of two people.
 
Ais asked casually as if not sensing the weight of two people.
   
"For the time being, carry them to my room. I don’t want to cause any turmoil. Carry them silently so as not to bring other the daughters’ attention."
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"For the time being, carry them to my room. I don’t want cause to cause any turmoil. Carry them silently so as not to bring other daughters’ attention."
   
 
"Understood."
 
"Understood."
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Lela looked at where Harrigan’s finger was pointing.
 
Lela looked at where Harrigan’s finger was pointing.
   
"Th-at? It has a strange shape, doesn't i-t?"
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"Th-at? It has an strange shape, isn’t i-t?"
   
"You don’t know about it either?"
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"You don’t know it either?"
   
 
"It’s my first time seeing i-t."
 
"It’s my first time seeing i-t."
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(That’s because, that guy went to grab my breasts without showing any sign of drawing the sword.)
 
(That’s because, that guy went to grab my breasts without showing any sign of drawing the sword.)
   
Naturally, Lela didn’t know about the man conducting such actions, she couldn’t understand on what grounds Harrigan was basing her assumptions, but if she says he’s not, then it's probably true. For the time being, Lela kept silent on the matter.
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Naturally, Lela didn’t know about the man conducting such action, she couldn’t understand on what basis Harrigan was putting her assumption, but if she says it’s not, then it probably does mean so. For the time being, Lela buried her hatchet.
   
 
"Well then, go ahead, I’ll catch up with you soon."
 
"Well then, go ahead, I’ll catch up with you soon."
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"Yes, ane-sa-ma."
 
"Yes, ane-sa-ma."
   
After Harrigan saw the two leave the bath house, the puppet familiar turned back into normal clothes and then put them on with a calm attitude.
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After Harrigan saw the two leave the bath house, the puppet familiar turned back to be normal clothes and then she put them on with a calm attitude.
   
 
=== Part 4 ===
 
=== Part 4 ===

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